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    390 KB True Heroes Part 8 !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)10:18 No.5132901  
    1) Character Chart up until Part 7: http://www.mediafire.com/?ihlndum3lg3

    Part 2.5: http://4chan.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/5080043/
    Part 3: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/5090159/
    Part 4: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/5092620/
    Part 5: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/5099924/
    Part 5.5: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/5103895/
    Part 6: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/5110513/
    Part 6.5: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/5113351/
    Part 7: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/5123741/

    Where we left off: Selene had gotten herself severely injured, but you managed to fend off the spirit of death that had been hovering over her. When she awoke, she thanked you with a mutual kiss - which was cut short by a sudden explosion.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)10:19 No.5132903
    The two of you run out of the home in a rush. The moment you step outside, you find there are soldiers at the end of the alley, away from the fire. “Get them!” Your eyes dart every which way before you decide to just head down the other end of the alleyway. “They’re the ones causing the explosions. Capture them alive, they may be with the revolution!” As you near the end of your path, you’re cut off by several more enemies.

    Instead of simply plowing through, Selene, who was behind you, jumps on your soldiers and vaults high above and over the barricade. Distracted by the odd majesty of the evasion, they paid no attention to you whom was running along the building walls to make it high enough. Though the soldiers chase you, you are now close enough to the burning building to scan each individual level, which you do. On the top floor, you notice a body. This person is sitting down, from what you can see, and not moving. The building is starting to crumble from the corrosive flames and is on the verge of a breakdown when you reach the front of it.

    [ ] Go inside; Leave Selene to fend off guards
    [ ] Continue to flee; let building crumble
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:24 No.5132929
    Yell to Selene (if she's close enough) what you're going to do, and go into the building for the body.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:25 No.5132937
    "Come on!"
    Both run inside, they probably won't dare to chase us inside a burning crumbling building.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:28 No.5132956

    It's Kuhn! We must save him!

    [ ] Go inside; Leave Selene to fight

    I'm sure she could hold them off.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:30 No.5132961
    She's just almost died, she's not in any condition to be fighting.
    This, it works.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)10:34 No.5132982
    You call back to Selene, letting her know what you plan to do. You can tell she disagrees, but nods in acceptance to you decision. She walks back from whence they came, blocking the way for the guards so they could not reach you. They slid to a halt, both surprised and arrogant that one woman had planned to stop all of them.

    You sprint up the stairs with great speed, but, after a while, the heat starts to aggravate your senses. You duck downward until you reach a blocked path. You see a door to your left.

    [ ] Break through the burning rubble
    [ ] Go through the door
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:36 No.5132989
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:39 No.5133008

    Door. Building is fragile and whatever.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)10:43 No.5133030
    You go through the door, but see nothing of interest. When you scan the area, you notice an opening to the wall to the left. You think about going through it, but get the feeling you should break down the wall to your right and continue on.

    [ ] Go through the opening
    [ ] Break the wall down
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:45 No.5133041
    Our feelings havn't led us wrong so far.
    Charge through the wall.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:46 No.5133047
    Is this the adventure that started off with us turning into a bear and then getting our asses kicked by a memory-eater? Has the memory eater got dead?
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)10:48 No.5133060

    Still alive. And still part of the story - just not currently.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:54 No.5133084

    Go through the opening for maximum safety.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:54 No.5133085
    Wall charge seconded.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)10:57 No.5133103

    You fools! OP is tricking us, the building is fragile!
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)11:03 No.5133131
    I agree with this, climb left side.
    No point in screwing with the building structure at this time.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)11:04 No.5133133
    With a running charge, you destroy the already fragile wall with little effort. The building rocks and shakes violently, but does not fall. You see the stairs leading to the next floor and rush toward them with great speed. Upon reaching the top floor, though your vision blurry, you manage to make out the man sitting in the building’s inferno – it’s Kuhn. You go over to him and notice he’s unconscious.

    [ ] Wake him up
    [ ] Take him with the chair
    [ ] Other
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)11:05 No.5133139

    My apologies, I saw your post too late and could not take it into consideration.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)11:07 No.5133151
    Grab him, leap to the next building across and run down the stairs in that one.
    No point staying in this one now.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)11:14 No.5133155

    Given the fact we just knocked a wall down of a study building, I don't think we can carry Kuhn out of here in time.

    [ ] Wake him up

    I assume he's tied down.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)11:17 No.5133171
    If we're on the third floor or below, grab the chair with Kuhn on it and jump out of the nearest window.
    If higher, grab the chair and find a window facing an adjacent window, and aim for one either on the same level or one lower, then jump to it with a running start if needed (while hugging Kuhn, with the bulk of the chair facing forward)
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)11:20 No.5133185
    We don't have time for that. The building is on fire.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)11:30 No.5133231
    You grab Kuhn and his chair and lift it over your shoulder. The smoke is aggravating your eyes and throat, making it impossible for you to yell for help. You recount your steps and remember you’re on the 3rd floor. You hear the building creak, which tells you you’re out of time. You count your blessings as you leap off of the floor and toward the ground. With the extra wait on top, the normally irrelevant strain on your legs has increase significantly. When you land, you can hear the sound of your body straining under the pressure. It takes you less than a second to drop Kuhn and fall to the ground in pain. The building then collapses; an idea appears in your head that it may have been a sign to the state of your legs.

    You see Selene rush around the corner.

    [ ] Suck it up; don’t show pain
    [ ] Stay on the ground
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)11:37 No.5133271

    [ ] Don't show pain

    I think it's about time we manned up and stopped being all... not manly.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)12:01 No.5133387
    Try to hide the pain, but don't TOO hard, that simply isn't necessary. Adahn's already proved his worth to Selene
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)12:09 No.5133438
    You stand to your feet as she gets close. Your legs feel heavy and you find it difficult to stand up; Selene looks at you questionably when she arrives and you smirk in response.

    Her attention is soon drawn to Kuhn who is strapped in a chair and quite bruised. She unties him and rips the tape off of his mouth, which causes him to fall to the ground still unconscious.

    [ ] Kick him awake
    [ ] Shake him awake
    [ ] Do nothing
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)12:11 No.5133444

    Sit down on chair. Inspect legs.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)12:16 No.5133488
    No. Sit down on legs. Inspect chair.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)12:24 No.5133536

    What I forgot: Ask Selene about wound. If she ripped it open we have to find a hospital or all three of us are in deep shit.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)12:30 No.5133575
    You sit down for a moment and mentally inspect your legs. You feel if you do not strain them, you’ll be fine.

    You: Selene, your stitches?

    She opens her jacket to show you her bandaged wound. There is no blood so you believe the stitches did not open.

    You sigh in exasperation. Kuhn has probably inhaled quite a bit of smoke and his physical condition isn’t too good either. It seems, to you, that you’re all quite messed up.

    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)12:52 No.5133717
    We should probably find a place to rest. We're not in good condition and it would be reckless to charge headfirst into the enemy base without being 100%.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)13:14 No.5133844
    This, we probably don't even have time to untie him and wake him up and this is the fastest thing probably.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)13:17 No.5133871
    Go find somewhere to rest for a bit until Kahn wakes up at least.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)13:22 No.5133910

    Helloooo, slowpoke!
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)13:29 No.5133958
    Writing now, in case you were wondering.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)13:35 No.5134005
    You exhale loudly and stand in pain, though you don’t let Selene see you wince.

    “Maybe it’s best that we take a little break,” you say while fighting back the groans your creaking bones are trying to force through. She appears to ponder your comment, but eventually comes to accept it; tactically, waltzing in a place where you’re overpowered, outgunned, and outmanned while in injury isn’t the best thing to do.

    The two of you hoist Kuhn on your shoulders and search for an empty home to rest in. It takes a little while, but you eventually find one suitable for your tastes. You enter their bedroom and lay Kuhn on a bed of his own before drop on the mattress next to it. You take off your shirt and shoes, nothing else in case someone was to arrive unexpectedly. Selene does the same and the two of you climb under the blanket together. You sigh in thought as she moves close to you, your eyes drooping wearily while her arm rests itself across your body. You wrap your arm around her shoulder and pull her closer, making sure not to agitate her stitches in the process.

    [ ] Talk
    [ ] Sleep
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)13:39 No.5134034
    ah it's good to be participating in these again

    Talk, but about what she wants to do tomorrow. We've had enough relationship talks for today, snuggling will be enough.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)13:40 No.5134036

    Cuddlin' with a sociopath. How nice.

    [ ] Devise a plan of action

    We've not the power to just brute force our way through.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)13:45 No.5134070
    Talk about the plan of attack tomorrow for a bit.
    Then kiss her on the cheek and say 'Goodnight Selene' have a rest with our eyes closed, maybe a quick light sleep.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)13:54 No.5134130
    You: We’re not strong enough…

    You look up at the ceiling as you begin to ponder the meaning of your words.

    You: We can’t brute force our way through here; we have to think of something…

    You look downward for a moment to hear her response and/or ideas.

    Selene: We’d have to destroy it from the inside out.

    You ponder her words.

    You: How would we get in?

    Selene: Let’s see… Saiga mentioned that the man loved women, which makes it easy for me to get in if I… “dress up”.

    You think for a moment.

    Selene: Kuhn could be my attendant. If it works, we’ll have at least 2 on the inside.

    You: What about me?

    The two of you a silent as you ponder your next move.

    Selene: Break through the front door and distract everyone as we try to find the switch that will open the dome… that’s all I have.

    [ ] “That’s a bad idea.”
    [ ] “Hm… it may work.”
    [ ] “That’s a good idea.”
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)13:59 No.5134178
    That is a really stupid idea, but it may work. Let us go with it.
    If it goes wrong Selene can fend for herself and Kuhn... well... Kuhn is fucked.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)13:59 No.5134179
    "It might work."

    What happened to our new ally? W/e his name is. He could help us distract.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)14:07 No.5134218


    And what happened to him indeed. And the kid.

    And why was Kuhn alone?

    It's a mystery..........................
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:11 No.5134237
    Well it will take awhile for her to get into the main building with enough trust to be left alone. We can use that time to look for Sai.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)14:11 No.5134244
    “The idea is absurd. So absurd, in fact, that it may actually work.” She gives you a little jab in the ribs which hurts more than what was probably intended. “We’re going to be busy tomorrow…” “Yep…” You learn over toward her to give her a good night kiss on her cheek, but, in the same way as last time, she guides your face and lips toward her own. It lasts for a few seconds before she pulls away. “You need to learn to aim,” she says in a teasing tone. You chuckle and wish her good night; in such a short time, the two have you gotten close, you think to yourself. Before you can continue analyzing your relationship, however, the two of you, almost simultaneously, drift off to sleep.

    To be continued in 20 minutes. Or less.

    However long it takes me to eat.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:13 No.5134261

    That's why we're going to shit things up when she gets inside. They'll be too busy fighting us.

    As for Saiga and the kid, I'm willing to bet Kuhn made them go on ahead while he held off soldiers or whatever. I'm willing to bet they're pretty close, if not, already inside.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:18 No.5134293

    Female sociopath that's NOT tsundere or yandere about her feelings? I am confused.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:21 No.5134316
    Now we must go and get a pretty dress, a pair of watermelons and a wig so we can sneak in after them if they need rescuing.
    Cloud/Adahn to the rescue. We can wear the mustache at the same time to be twice as attractive.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:25 No.5134347
    she was tsundere awhile ago. she's warmed up. Us dying heroically to save her life probably had something to do with it.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:30 No.5134379
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    I was thinkin' the same thing.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)14:33 No.5134405
    Alright. I'm back.

    And writing.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)14:45 No.5134476
    Again you open your eyes to the darkness, the shining light of the cathedral painting glowering underneath you. You stand, as if this was clockwork, and stare at the doors in front of you; the one on the left and right open, but the center one closed. You feel that if you went to the around open doors, you would be led to even more doors.

    [ ] Open – Power
    [ ] Closed – Transform
    [ ] Open - Trick
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:47 No.5134492
    We shall need it in the future.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:47 No.5134494
    Look for more doors.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:47 No.5134500
    More doors? More doors is good. Lets look for more doors. Or go through Power instead. We need more!
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:48 No.5134506
    Look for more doors, if not Trick.
    Hey, were a trickster anyway, might as well go for it.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)14:49 No.5134511

    I mean "already open doors, it would lead to more". Sorry, didn't proofread.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:49 No.5134521

    Argh, no, you bastards. Transform for maximum damage. We must know what this door reveals.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:51 No.5134533

    Good thing I stated what door we should use.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:52 No.5134540
    Transform. I have a soft spot for Druids.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)14:54 No.5134560


    Think about it: it's better to know what the door reveals now before we specialize in one specific power.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:03 No.5134631
    Transform. Preferably into a giant centipede.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:06 No.5134648
    Or a swarm of bees.
    That'd be fun.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)15:06 No.5134651
    You head straight, directly toward the door that has yet to be opened. Upon your approach, you’re engulfed by bright white light which destroys your clothing and your physical self.

    Then you awake in bed.

    >You learned Transform: Yang Panther
    >Transform: Bear can now be used 5 times within a given day.

    You’re sweating, you notice. You look around, but you’re only greeted by the artificial darkness that plagues this entire city. Your eyes roll toward Kuhn’s bed, which is empty. As if it were waiting for you, you feel a gust of wind slid over your naked chest; searching for the source, you see Kuhn near an open window, no doubt smoking. You’re tempted to go talk to him, but you find that Selene has a look of comfort on her face.

    [ ] Go talk to Kuhn
    [ ] Stay in bed
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:08 No.5134665
    Stay in bed, but quietly ask Kuhn to bum you a smoke. Assuming Adahn smokes.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:09 No.5134667
    We've gotten out of bed before without waking her, we can do it again

    Talk to Kuhn. Need to know where Sai and the kid went.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:12 No.5134684

    Cat-like reflexes, speed, and general awesomeness? Fuck year! I am now glad we chose transform.

    Though, I'm definitely voting trick next time.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:12 No.5134685
    Talk to him. Assess the situation. I need more input.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:14 No.5134698
    Slide a pillow in to take our place, go ask Kuhn very quietly where the kid and Sai went.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:17 No.5134715
    Approach Kuhn, look out over the city. "I like these quiet moments before the storm."
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)15:27 No.5134805
    You slide out of bed stealthy in order to not wake Selene, sliding a pillow where you were to serve as a medium. You walk silently over to Kuhn, who notices your presence almost immediately.

    “So you two are finally together, huh? Crazy attracts crazy, they say.” You grin at his implication, but don’t respond to it. “How are you feeling,” you ask, knowing the answer already. “I’m fine, aside from some bruise and smoke inhalation, but I’m a smoker – the latter doesn’t bother me.” You lean against the wall next to him. “Where’s the kid?” The wind blows the cigarette smoke inside the room, but you don’t cough; you’re used to it, for some reason. “He’s with Sai. They were going to enter the main building while the soldiers were looking for us.” You nod, understanding the situation. When he says nothing for a minute, you fill him in on the situation and the plan you devised while he was asleep.

    “Sounds interesting.” You smirk at his tone – you can sense the impractical nature of his thoughts related to what Selene had come up with. “Well then, shall we get started?” The both of you turn to see Selene putting on her jacket. “I guess so.” You walk over to where you once slept and clothed yourself. As you were walking out of the room, Kuhn’s curiosity gets the better of him. “So, you guys have sex yet?” Simultaneously, you tell him to shut up, to which he responds with a laugh.

    “First things first,” you begin when you enter the main part of the inner city. “The two of you have to get disguises.” You scan the area and see women walking about with men wearing traditional Japanese kimonos. “Looks like we have our work cut out for us.”

    [ ] Go with Selene to pick out her disguise
    [ ] Go with Kuhn to pick out his disguise
    [ ] Go about your own business; let them choose
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:30 No.5134833
    Selene's intelligent enough to pick her own disguise. Kuhn is too outlandish to pick one by himself.

    Go with Kuhn.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:30 No.5134835
    Go get our disguise.
    Ready for a sneak in if all goes Tits up we need to.

    Or go with Selene, help our cute girlfriend choose attractive clothes, hell yes.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:32 No.5134847
    I would say go alone, but we need a proper man-talk with Kuhn so he stays our friend.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:36 No.5134875

    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:38 No.5134886
    [ ] Go with Selene to pick out her disguise
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:42 No.5134917
    Go with Kuhn. Wouldn't hurt to ask him if he happens to know any adventurous medic types, either.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)15:47 No.5134945
    You: Alright, Kuhn. Time to pick you out a disguise.

    You grab his arm and pull him away from Selene.

    Kuhn: W-what? Go with your girlfriend!

    You: Can’t do that. You’re too… you to be left alone.

    Selene’s eyebrow raises while she watches the two of you fight each other while walking away. Now left alone, her eyes gloss over the area in search of a place she could use to go incognito.

    Kuhn’s shoulders slouch as he walks in front of you. “I could have picked someone up,” he says in a dejected tone. You remind him of your goal and he sighs solemnly. “Now, what do we do?” he asks while turning to face you in the same second.

    [ ] Look for examples
    [ ] Look for clothing store
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:51 No.5134970
    Find a gay bar, ask for advice on making Kuhn pretty.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:52 No.5134977
    Look for examples. You want to fit in, not be fresh and new.

    I don't know why Selene is so surprised all the time by our choices. She's the one who hates to be babied.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:53 No.5134988
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    kung fu white mage is superior to any medic
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)15:57 No.5135007

    She wasn't surprised, she merely quirked an eyebrow to us "fighting" in the street. If anything, Kuhn was surprised.

    As for the other time she's surprised, we actually babied her quite a bit during the early parts of the story so I guess it's just surprising that we've backed off.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)16:00 No.5135026
    The two of you look around; attempting to gain any information to what Kuhn should be wearing. Everything seems to be in traditional dress up, but most of the gentlemen are older than Kuhn by at least a few years – some even with balding heads. You rub your chin in thought, glancing at his flourishing hair to the men that are balding. He notices this after a few moments. “What’s on your mind?”

    [ ] “You need a wig.”
    [ ] “Heeeeey… want a haircut?”
    [ ] “Nothing.”
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:07 No.5135069
    Propose a hair cut, if he outright refuses then get a wig.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:07 No.5135072
    Draw Katana, give him a huge grin and stare at his hair.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:12 No.5135091

    Do not draw Katana. We do not want attention.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)16:13 No.5135106
    Your finger rests against the underside of the guard which pushes the blade slightly out of the sheath. It glints in the lights of the city; your eyes bounce all over the place before settling on Kuhn’s hair. You grin wildly. It doesn’t take him long to figure out what’s going on. He covers his hair with hands and gives straightforward decline. Your face quickly returns to benign ambiance at his answer. “Fine, if you want to do everything half-assed.” Your blade slides silently back into its container as you start walking away. Kuhn looks at your back, his left eye twitching wildly.

    After some search, the two of you happen upon a costume shop – which would do well to serve all your needs.

    [ ] Let Kuhn pick out what he wants to wear
    [ ] Choose the wig first
    [ ] Choose the clothing first
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:16 No.5135121
    Choose clothing first.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:20 No.5135152
    Let Kuhn choose but if he chooses anything insane then choose again for him, clothes first, then wig.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:26 No.5135185

    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:26 No.5135188
    if the citizenry have an odd accent or way of talking, keep that in mind. kuhn will have to be able to speak the part as well as look it.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)16:30 No.5135222
    “Choose something sensible,” you said with a hint of sarcasm on your voice. The moment you looked away, you immediately lost him. You have no idea what happened, or what he was doing, but it did instill panic in you that he was no longer under your control. You waited at the entrance.

    5 minutes passed.

    Well, he’s just being thorough.

    10 minutes passed.

    He’s… dedicated to the work.

    15 minutes passed.

    Just what the hell is he doing?

    20 minutes passed.

    [ ] Continue to wait
    [ ] Look for Kuhn
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:32 No.5135236
    Look for him.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:33 No.5135243
    Look for him. That Fucker ditched us.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)16:44 No.5135347
    You rub your temples in frustration of the recent event. You search each area of the store, but find nothing – no sign of Kuhn, but you do meet several angry women. “Excuse me, miss…” You turn around after picking up the sound of a familiar voice. “Can I see your breasts?” “Pervert!” The sound of smacking echoes through your mind when you make your way to the source. When you arrive, lo and behold, there’s Kuhn, dressed up with completely red cheeks. He sighs as he sees you approach and the woman leave. “Geez, man… try a little subtly – that never works does it?” He smirks at your question. “Of course it does, did you think I would do it if it wouldn’t? Look, I got two numbers.” He holds out a piece of paper and a napkin, each of which have a phone number and a name scribbled on it. “Well, I’ll be damned…”

    You look at his disguise; a simple outfit that older men tend to wear, and a wig of a receding hairline. “Well, I’ll be damned for a second time…”

    [ ] Use this disguise
    [ ] Pick out another
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:45 No.5135357
    Look for him.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:46 No.5135372
    Use that disguise I guess.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)16:52 No.5135417

    Go with it. Might as well, y'know?
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)17:02 No.5135502
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    You decide to use the disguise that Kuhn had picked out. He sports an unnatural grin as if he’s satisfied with this outcome, but you ignore it. It doesn’t take long for you to buy the clothes and leave; you walk along the roadside, watching the men and women move about the inner city. Their happy expressions betray what you’re actually sensing from them: despair. While lost in your thoughts, you hadn’t realized you had already arrived to where you and Selene had split up. You notice she isn’t there so you wait.

    “Hey, you two.” You and Kuhn turn after being called to. Your eyes widen at what you see while Kuhn has a slightly different reaction; his eyes develop hearts and his nose begins to pump out steam. “So, what do you think?” the woman says. “I’m sorry, but… do I know you?” you ask, still unable to place the face of the person who had just approached you, despite it being familiar. She seems disappointed that you don’t recognize her. “It’s me. Selene.”

    At the same time, you and Kuhn appear on the same wavelength. Your heartbeats synchronize and you have the same exact thoughts. Kuhn quickly regains composure to avoid injury. Selene seems to know what’s going on, but ignores it, luckily for you and Kuhn. “Well, what do you think? It’s not really my style, but…”

    [ ] “You look beautiful.”
    [ ] “You look good.”
    [ ] “Nice disguise.”
    [ ] “You look like a whore.”
    [ ] Say Nothing
    [ ] Other
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:05 No.5135519
    "*A few seconds of open jawed gibberish*...you look...just...just...wow...yeah...You look beautiful."
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:06 No.5135539
    "With that disguise, you'll fit the part very well."
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:09 No.5135569
    [ ] “You look beautiful. Are...you even wearing anything underneath that kimono?"
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:11 No.5135583
    "Damn. Its a wonder that I even have some sort of coherent thought."
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:16 No.5135623
    [ ] “You look like a whore.”

    Well, she does. Honesty is important.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:19 No.5135662
    Er... does anybody else notice how weaboo this story is/has been? The imagery, the characters, the scenes, the katanas, the fights, powers, etc. I thought /tg/ hated weabootry.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:20 No.5135668
    That's what i was going to say. Then i went with
    Instead. It doesn't insult her, but conveys she looks like the kind of street trash that live in the building.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:20 No.5135672
    "You look fantastic."
    Honesty is the best policy.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)17:21 No.5135683
    You try to comment on her outfit, but it takes a few nonsensical sentences before you spout out something close to being understood. “You… you… you look beautiful. You’ll fit the part very well.” She smiles at your opinion. Your eyes move from her face down to her chest. “Are you wearing anything underneath that kimono?” “No. I figured I had to look a tad looser than the others to guarantee myself access.” Kuhn nods his head with his hand on his chin and gives sounds of agreement. You glare sideways at the man whose nose is pouring blood. You cough to get his attention. “Let’s get this over with, shall we?”

    The 3 of you discuss the plan one last time. In 10 to 15 minutes, you are to cause the necessary distraction. Kuhn and Selene head toward the main building to which you look on in curiosity; they are held up at the main gate for a minute or two, but are soon allowed inside. Your hand begins to quake as you wait for the time to tick down. Is it because of fear? Or is it excitement? You can’t tell, but an undeniable grin has etched itself on your face.

    [ ] Go to the 10 minute mark
    [ ] Other

    Affection Rise! Kuhn & Selene
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:21 No.5135685
    we know; don't ruin the moment(s).
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:21 No.5135688

    Only the ones that hate anything fun.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:22 No.5135689
    well most of the characters and imagery is from Japanese games. That doesn't necessarily make it Weebo.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:24 No.5135715
    Go to ten minute mark. Unless we don't know the step by step plan or something exciting is going to happen if we just glaze over for 10 minutes.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:24 No.5135721
    Ah... yes it does. While this started out is a fairly funny/interesting NMH spoof/fan thing, once we got to the whole swords of light/she's a reaper thing, I cringed. It has not gotten that much different from that point. Just saying though; I'll be moving along now.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:27 No.5135759
    ah. I assumed you didn't know it was NMH. Alright then.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:31 No.5135797
    Stretch while waiting for the ten minute mark. Can't go into battle all tense.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)17:32 No.5135808

    I suppose that's my fault. I kinda got into the story and whatnot so I start writing plotlines, characters, stories, etc.

    You've given me something to think about and I thank you for it.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)17:56 No.5136012
    Bite my Cock. This is a brilliant story with interesting characters and a good plot and you have no right to whine you fat neckbeard. Now sit down, shut up and enjoy or do one yourself.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)18:02 No.5136064
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    Constructive criticism versus mindlessly sucking the OPs dick. One of these is useful and helps keep the story quality high. The other is more becoming of deviantart faggotry.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)18:10 No.5136119
    I find this story has a weeaboo tendensy and admittadly (like >>5135721) I cringed at that reaper scene. However just because something is weeaboo doesn't make it unenjoyable (I loved the kamigawa magic series dispite it being a massive weeaboo love fest.) Just try to have some originality.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)18:14 No.5136157
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    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)18:46 No.5136412
    is this still going or do we pick up again tomorrow?
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)18:51 No.5136445
    idk, something happened to OP i guess. Maybe he's eating and forgot to tell us.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)18:51 No.5136446
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    I suppose I should update you all on the status.

    To put it simply, they (those that critiqued) are right. Things have gotten cliche and bland, which is my fault with what I ultimately decided to include and create in/as the story. As a writer, now that this has been brought to my attention, I cannot currently continue with the story. I apologize, but I do have a duty to my readers to bring them something interesting and, sometimes, new - and I can't do that in good conscious when I have doubts myself.

    I thank you all for reading. Maybe I'll continue this someday or maybe I'll start another one - or maybe not. I don't know. Again, I apologize and I thank you.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)18:54 No.5136488
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    well shit
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)18:55 No.5136494
    and may we just "fuck you" to those weebophobes.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)19:02 No.5136556
    If you're going to abandon it, can you at least tell us what will happen or the details of our past? At least reveal some secrets to those of us who've fallen in love with the story. Don't leave us hanging like this, please.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)19:03 No.5136568

    Thank you, you ass! This is why we can not have nice things! :<
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)19:04 No.5136571
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    The greatest writefag is you. You remained somewhat anon, even with a trip you never took a name. You have taken critisicm, seen when the ending is right, and been graceful and polite upon your exit.

    Although I never read your stories or even clicked the threads, you are an honorable person. If you ever start one again, I will happily participate.
    >> !ZaiyoM.Dpk 07/11/09(Sat)19:08 No.5136604
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    To be honest, I've already decided to continue the story. However... it may take a little while for me to finally decide on something that I feel would improve the story/make it interesting - and that's the bad news: that could be a couple days to a couple weeks.

    I, however, will not leave you hanging. You can count on that.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)19:10 No.5136624
    Well i guess I'll just have to poke around until then.

    This will be a VERY long in game 10 minutes...
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)19:12 No.5136646
    OK, sounds good. This has been fun, you've done well. Thanks for the good times, and I'll be awaiting your return.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)19:18 No.5136699
    In this case

    [X] Other: Save game
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)19:20 No.5136711
    Shit fucking fuck! Im gonna get drafted now before this ends. FUCK!
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)19:23 No.5136730
    God damnit /tg/
    First really good quest we have in a while and you shit in the creek, why don't we have nice things you ask?
    This is why!
    Just continue and ignore those fags.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)19:30 No.5136779
    While I admit that part 6 was pretty dull, it has really picked up in part 7 and 8. Weebo (though I still think that's a little harsh for this) isn't a bad thing.
    >> Anonymous 07/11/09(Sat)19:43 No.5136875
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