Hiei Krauser grabbed his bag as the bell ran and bolted for the door. 10 floors down and one shot was his only thought. His classmates milled about slowly as he was already out and slipping his 'Punk is Freedom' sweatshirt, bright orange, over his head as he hit his locker. He pressed his palm to it to be read and the lock popped open, he was taking a risk but he had to get out before they caught him. He pulled his board out and stepped upon it, glad for the HeadMusix implant hed gotten for his birthday as 3rd Gen GlitchHop thumped to life in his ears.

Someone called out for him to stop skating in the halls but he was already at the stairwell, Hiei ollied up onto the inner handrail and tailgrinded down to the landing, stopping himself from smashing into the wall barely only to push himself off and hop up to the next floor.

"9 floors to go." He muttered and caught the railing with a hand, vaulting himself up atop it again, gaining speed which made his hands hurt as he wrenched himself down flight after flight of stairs. 8, 7, 6, he passed the seniors floor without the stairway having become its crouded mass of pressed teenage bodies yet, people only beginning to reach the Well of Lost Souls as he was close, so close, 5...

RUN ON SENTENCES... EVERYWHERE

He was mid jump when he saw the flash out of the right hand corner of his eye, someone was th-

"Hhhhnnnnnnnggggghhhh!" Hiei grunted out as the clothesline caught him right in the stomach. The frail boy folded over the snickering senior's arm as his skateboard rolled without him onto the fourth floor. Tears welled in his eyes as he couldn't breathe from having the air driven from his body so violently, gasping for breath from the pain he gave a sob as more hands grabbed to him and pinned him against the wall.

Those cruel grins looked down at him. "Well, well, well. It seems that our little guppie was trying to run away from us, doesn't that just make you sad Tony?" There was a wicked chuckle from Craig. They were cruel and unrelenting bullies, faces near identical masks of ground down homogeny. They hated him for being bright, a sore spot to their eyes and they couldn't stand him stepping out of their rigid lines of expected behavior.

"Real sad, maybe we should make him sad too?" Tony echoed in expected compliance.

"Heygetoffame!" Hiei struggled to get free. "It's gonna get crouded in here soon, lemme go fuz-lite!" He kicked inneffectively, the tears of helplessness still not leaving his eyes.

Craig shook his head in mock-sadness. "Indeed, he's not showing propper regret for trying to deprive us of his ~colorful~ presence." They used it like a jeer, an insult, he hated them.

>>9741723
JESUS FUCKING CHRIST, THE PRETENTIOUS HIPSTER IS ACTIVELY BULGING OUT OF MY MONITOR

I HAVE A FUCKING FLATSCREEN AND THE HIPSTER IS BULGING OUT

>>9741734
Seriously... this shit is kind of painful to read.

No trolling here, get a proofreader.

Then, as if from on high, a voice appeared. "Aren't you boys supposed to be headed to sports practice? I'd hate to have to see you in detention again." The sea of hooligans parted for Mrs. Rhamadi. She stood in her trraditional khaki suit with black blouse, the red dot of her traditional hindu heritage standing out as a powerful spec of color as she walked over to Hiei with his board under one arm. She lookes about to the boys and arched a brow. "Well?"

The seniors shuffled and mumbled as they started to move off, leaving with an apt "Catch you later."

Hiei looked up to Mrs. Rhamadi. Taller than he by a fair margin, her roan skin smooth and flawless she smiled down at him with a near sad expression. Buxom and curvey she was a common target for schoolboy crushes, and while certainly he recognized she was beautiful Hiei did not understand why, just that she stood out brightly amongst the drab staff. "You should not let yourself be bullied so Mr. Krauser." She said in a lecturing tone. "And there is no skateboarding in the halls!" She held out his board to him in a kindly gesture.

The boy ducked his head and mumbled a mushed thanks-appology and wiped his eyes piteously as he took back the board and rushed down the last few flights of stairs on foot. He had a date with destiny, or so Dashell had claimed. He didn't look back as he ran from the 15 story high-school complex, ran from the dreary and depressing reality of schooling to the vibrant world his friends had recently dragged him into.

He never wanted to go back.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

More like comma splices and punctuation errors. Stuff it, I'm not trying to edit this.

I should note my power got fucked because the primary transformer in the area BLEW UP.

I was forced to play trivial pursuit.
From 1981.

Anyway, I can work on it again now- how much would you say before I need a playtest? I've got the meat and potatoes done, things I have due to add:

Equipment and general items to regulate currency

Rules for standard competitions

Explaining Combat and different kinds of damage.

possibly general tricks but that seems secondary

The instant you named your protagonist after the yaoi-bait martial artist from YuYuHakusho you lost me.

>>9741773
I had a great laugh at this, rather curious as to what caused such a reaction.

>>9741856
That was exceptionally dramatic, but this is the first time I've looked at one of these threads, and I see
>His classmates milled about slowly as he was already out and slipping his 'Punk is Freedom' sweatshirt, bright orange, over his head as he hit his locker.
The classmates mill about slowly, suggesting the "slow unintelligent masses" concept held by most rebels, and the rebellion is immeadiately reinforced by the announcement of how fashionable his "Punk is Freedom" shirt is.

>He pulled his board out and stepped upon it, glad for the HeadMusix implant hed gotten for his birthday as 3rd Gen GlitchHop thumped to life in his ears.
I admit, I recoiled at first from the sheer pointlessness of naming the brands and genre of music, but now in closer light I realize these are setting details... even if I still recoil a little.

>Someone called out for him to stop skating in the halls but he was already at the stairwell, Hiei ollied up onto the inner handrail and tailgrinded down to the landing
Also, Hiei Krauser? Thats an absolutely horrific mishmash of ethnic naming. And specifying the kinds of tricks going down the handrail? I shudder again just bringing it to light.

So yeah. At a brief glance, it really feels like pretentious hipster/punk garbage.

It doesn't feel much better at a longer glance either.

Its certainly not my thing, and I'm sure someone will rage at me for this post, but you asked about my reaction.

>>9741855
AHAHAHAHAHAH I didn't know/recognize that fact. Thank you! Now I need to rename him.

I mean I -clearly- couldn't have been thinking of a medium-to-uncommon boy's name that also happens to be a mountain. It has to be from some stupid shonen crap. FML this ruins -everything- I wanted.

Well fuck the touching coming-of-age story about a spoiled brat of a punk setting about on the path to enlightenment and power...

I have no comment either way.

>>9741960
No no no no, no rage. I am, in fact, quite glad you had such an on point, concise, and evaluated opinion on something I shat out as quickly as I could on the way to further plot development.

Now of course I was being incredibly blunt and slamming the overt themes down the readers throat in as unsubtle a fashion as I could as quickly as possible it came out quite inelegant.

And the ethnic mishmash is -supposed- to be there, I wanted people to be able to see waifish half-japanese boy instantly without thinking about it. I just wish I had named him Naoki instead of Hiei.

So, in summary, you are entirely right. It's punk trash and was meant to be.

>>9742130
Welp, mission accomplished. Good luck on your future endeavors.

Try not to use Japanese/German though. For some reason those never end well.

>>9742164
aw c'mon guy! axis powers!

>>9742193
'cuz that sure flew like a bird.

Yay for Velocity!

I also got a bit of writefaggotry done. Will post soon after I read through it. I wanted to try an give an example of aa 300 person, and hopefully that worked.

>>9741835

Equipment and Economy are the major things I think. Even if it's just the basics.

Maybe the general tricks, but I think that can be put off or figured out later after Alpha.

>>9742275
More to the point, that was the point. I hadn't even -gotten- to the abusive alcoholic German father and the emotionally unavailable chronic victim Japanese mother. Oh trust me, the whole write up was choice. It appears, though, that just that much is enough to have someone's panties twist so I'll not continue on with the self-indulgent faggotry. Or maybe I will, later.

Anywho.


I agree, Economy and Equipment. I also think the combat write-up should be rules light for the time being and let playtesting make it into the robust system it needs to be.

This is MY ride.

>>9742611
You are small time.

>>9742636
WAT

I don't even-

the schlepeltiger! oh you beauty!
you can only turn right angles, but i love you!

>>9742655
It's Travis Touchdown's bike from No More Heroes.

>>9742655
Fluff it as a Bike, 'cept as a runner or something.

Fuck I dunno.

>>9742655
And this is the party.

Velocity made me buy ceramic bearings for my Seba FR1's, get JSRF for my Xbox and start reading Snow Crash

I hope you're proud of yourself

>>9742717
Pick up an electrician's kit and wire LEDs and a battery pack into it and ride around at night and son, I am proud

>>9742717
I've been playing JGR for the first time in nearly ten years.

Feels good man.

>>9742766
Not with such a lame-ass image.

Why do you think I made a cover with a pretty woman, and then Zhuren made a cover with a nearly-naked pretty woman?

I thought this was the party

That strap must be pasted on.

>>9742766

You seem to be ignoring the multitude of threads hundreds of posts long

Stat me

>>9742791
This is also the party.

>>9742785

For posterity I will always claim I was looking for a good picture of Simca in all the wrong places.

>>9742829
I still think that 'the Swallow' is either a terrible nickname, or a fucking amazing one.

I SAY

the young lady in the cover image is not wearing anything I recognize as skates

I'll see what I can do about finishing some writefaggotry later on in the week.

With any luck, it might even be readable.

Then a naughty police officers seduces all the women and has a good time with them while the faggot boys cry

>>9742877
That's because they're Air Treks.

>>9742810
This is the most badass party I have seen in a looooong time.

I've got a handful

Pic related: MC said 'fuck it, your character can have aerokinesis already'

>>9742920
So let's say I come across this book in a store

Or, okay, on a message board

And I see a picture of a girl in pink leather that looks like it will slip off if she turns around too quickly, and this gearpunky title bar covering her crotch

Oh, hm, yes those boots are a bit oddly shaped

I wonder what this game is about?

>>9742964
Coming soon:
VeloCITY: Another view on grinding

Also, don't forget to archive this shit either.

Too many good threads have been lost already.

So, can someone post everything that's been made so far?

>and other dystopian settings in which extreme sports Punks fight against The Man.

The only way this can be redeemed is if The Man fights back with Agents on dirtbikes doing EX-TREEM stunts.

>>9743001
Your wish, my command, as long as there aren't any blowjobs

>>9742964

We'll probably switch back to this one soon anyway

>>9742964
Well you open it to find out of course, or read the back (Or download the pdf.)

If you are actually asking its about extreme sports punks fighting The Man... In a very general non-specific fashion that may or may not lend itself to reality bending physics.

>>9743014
Incidentally, they do.
Street force: COPS THAT ARE TOTALLY CRAZY

>>9743032

Not to mention punk squad.

" CURSE YOU PUNKSQUAAAAAAAAAAD! "

>>9743030
OK, but in that case you should make a manservice cover too.

Alright?

Guys?

>>9743020
Thanks man

Hell, I love the cover

It doesnt have to be a realistic depiction, just thematic

yeah all I have on the character sheet so far is the name bit.

>>9743058

I AGREE!

Quickly, find me some setting appropriate beefcake! Extra points for thuggin love!

This may work for beefcake, but I imagine you want more muscley. Need more time to check.

>>9743104
I agree, the game isn't realistic to begin with so putting unlikely characters on the cover is fine.

But the game is about skating, so someone should be skating on the cover. Right now it looks like the game is about being enslaved by lesbians.

flood detectiooooon

y u do disssss

>>9743165
Enslaved by lesbians

Well, that's one way to hook a plot.

Here we go, better, probably one of the more shaman like things. Boddivetahs. Damnit, I can't remember how to spell it.

I kind of want to do what exalted did if this gets to the point it has ACTUAL chapters and put a comic in every so often.

Panel one
Blackrose skating up to an inspired, trollface.jpg
Panel two
Blackrose opens mouth, still trollface.jpg, "bikes have" and then a black bar pops up on the screen, inspired is all :|
Panel three
Cursor over black bar, reveals "bikes have NOAIR"
Panel four
Inspired rage face

Well, despite never having really read though all of the threads for this that seem to have sprung up like weeds, I got to say that I love how this has come together. I've seen mentions of parkour and stuff, but do you have rules to include stuff like this?

>http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=09lIbsDXa_A

>>9743204
Bodhisattvas.

>>9743161
I do indeed mean more beefy and less cake. Skateboarder/Biker would be the sweetspot because we have a ton of Skater/Free-runner material as is.

>>9743216
There's an item similiar to it in the panoply that I'll have to get around to statting- Springheel Jackboots. Every step you take it harnesses the kinetic energy and pulls up a spring, and then you can release it into a massive mario jump

Warning: We claim no responsibility over landing with this product

woops skipped a page

tricks are kinda bland but they can be fleshed out after playtestan

>>9743227

Checking my pictures.

Damnit, I have a lot of female portraits. This is a little eye opening.

And it turns out I don't have what we need. I shall begin a goo search for it tonight.

Boards and Bikes, correct?

And the next two pages are CRITICALLY unfinished.

>>9743204

Looks like a Deadman in makeup-off mode to me, I can attach the logo but I think we need a more action based shot.

That being said that is a damn handsome man.

>>9743216

So people have posted pictures of these a bunch but not with the relevant video. I am now of the opinion that a retractable set of this comes standard in Runner Trick Boots, being the opposite of Thin-Grips.

>>9743332
>goo search
Well, I think throwing in a fetish or two might not help the enslaved-by-lesbians confusion.

and that's all, pizanos

>>9743332
Yes boards and bikes.

Upon looking there is a lot of skateboard photography of ranging types but little lineart on DA (I have no account or skill in this search) and less of both for BMX.

>>9742810
LOOK AT THIS PICTURE guys

This picture has TOO MANY SHIRTS

>>9743389

This might work. Though the gun is there and it's a motorcycle. I'm going to need to do some more serious searching though.

Expect more later. Also story of more epic people in the city I wrote.

>>9742785
Could pick a better one for the future. Especially if you ever think of publishing this.

She looks like a character from One Piece.

>>9743447
Muahahaahaaaaaaa Nooooo.

~That~ is a great MotorMetro inspiration piece for as soon as we get playtest underway.

This is JJ from Lain.

Yeah, the anime ain't much like Velocity. But this character looks about right.

Again, I gotta ask.
Why is the slut from Impel Down dressed as the slut from Air Gear?

Your game must contain one (1) rip-off of Beat.

>>9742943
Damn that's a fly runner crew.

pic related, the Big Nasties...This is them right?

>>9743585
Not far off. A majority of them are dressed crocodile-esque, but some dress casual- they just have to wear some amount of green is the minimum

Just rip-off real life skaters for your manservice.

Wish I had more pictures of people on skates

the closest things I can find would take photoshop board/bike insertions, which sounds messy...

>>9743714

What's Ringo doing on VeloCITY's cover?

>>9743932
Ringo isn't blonde, it is some woman impersonating ringo, poorly.

Also I honestly have no clue, made by Zhuren, not I

>>9743728
Huh.

Yo-yo as a re-usable projectile weapon.

>>9743955
>>9743932
It's already been mentioned, that's sadie chan, a dominatrix prison guard from the anime One Piece.

>>9743955
>imposter

>>9744099
I'm sorry, but...context, please.

>>9744040

In the croissant mask alternate costume, yes this is correct.

This is also not the VeloCITY cover, it's just the one I use when I start the thread, it was never intended to usurp anything because its kinda poorly done.

I did it in paint fercrissakes.

Suddenly, writefaggotry of the worst kind!

The Big Nasty known as Gator was a big man. He dwarfed most of the other people in Velo city, an was nearly as wide as he was tall. He was muscled like an anchient ogre, with a disposition much the same. He was not the greatest punk in the city. Far from it. He was sloppy in many respects. He never truly got the hang of planting landings, and most of the time used his immense strength to muscle through the tricks needed to win competitions and build his reputation. He played dirty though. He understood how fear worked, and used it to his advantage. A suddenly drop, the proper face paint, the sudden hand on the shoulder, the unexpected trip. Gator knew how to shake up a punk and make him lose his rhythm. It was as close as the Balance would allow to killing your opponent.

Well, here's the big thing. Big Gator was not an idiot either. I heard he was one of the smartest bastards that has every come out of the Big Nasties. No, never underestimate them. They're capable of a brutal cunning, and Gator was much more then that. He was, however, arrogant. He believed himself invincible after several races against some of the weaker Spicers. Rather then actually try to figure out his limits though, Gator decided to go after bigger fish. Poor bastard thought that he could have handled one little chick in a race. Pity the bastard didn't understand what was gonna happen.

>>9744113

>>9744173

I followed the bastard into the uptown, surprisingly close to where the fuzz makes their headquarters. On the ground floor of one of the most gray buildings in the entire city was a surprisingly stylish little Asian place. You know, the ones that sell those big bowls filled with too much broth and not enough meat. Never been a fan of them myself, but Gator's target was. As luck would have it, she happened to be there. The Smiler.

I have to admit. She's tiny. I mean, I'm not the biggest guy. I look up to most people I meet and sometimes get blown away in strong breezes. But here I dwarfed her. She didn't even notice us walking in until the Gator sat down at her table and stared at her. This is the same stare that broke down most of his previous competition, or at least rattled by them slightly. She just held up a finger and drank some of the broth from her soup. I tried to stifle a laugh as she brought it back down. There was more then a little bit dribbling from the side of her face where the scar gave the girl her name.

I can't believe I'm going to say this, but the Smiler actually looked embarrassed.

>>9744200
I

what?

That didn't clear anything up for me.

In fact, I'm even more confused than before!

>>9744227
tl;dr
The character in question assumed a guise to help out the main characters, Croissant Mask (name is presumably a japanese pun that we don't get), Simca stole the costume, swapped it out with the extremely slutty one there, and simca is dressed up as Croissant mask

>>9744209

Well, I wasn't too close. I mostly followed to see Gator try something big. He was very good at what he did after all. If he could beat the Smiler, then things might change in the city. Everyone knew she was part of the Balance, and she was the easiest Hero of the punks to find. If she fell, balance might start shifting and big things would happen. Most of the others hardly made themselves known, and when they did the facts got so distorted that no one really knew what happened. Hell, the last time one of the big Spicers came out, the man apparently turned into a roaring inferno as he tore down the streets, leaving melted concrete and flash burns on several unfortunate victims.

The Smiler though was weird. I knew a little about her, everyone has. She's scary, and she's good at what she does. That's about it. Looking at the small woman talk to the monstrous Gator though, I couldn't see what everyone was talking about. She stood and paid for her meal, the owner thanking her and telling her that the big special was coming soon. She nodded eagerly, talking for a few minutes as Gator waited. He wasn't a patient man, and I was surprised her didn't attempt to strike her down on the spot. Soon as they were out though, us three heading towards the race track. We gathered something of a crowd along the way. The Smiler was famous after all.

We got to the designated race area. It was a simple thing compared to the sewers or the Spice's special routes. Just a coupleof runer's tricks and you would have been fine. The crowd cheered as the two took to the line. The start of the race was dominated by the Gator. He took off like a rocket, with the Smiler left far behind after only a few moments.. It was obvious who was faster. I took to my bike in order to catch up, and I began to see why the Smiler was dangerous.

>>9744227

The artist does GREAT art. But his story telling is shit. The plot gets unnecessarily convoluted and it seems like he's pretty lost himself.

This means that the beginning of his series are very interesting, but loses me over time.

If you're still interested look up "Air Gear" in Mangafox.com (or any online manga reader you prefer).

>>9744255

She seemed disgusting in her movements. I truly cannot describe it anymore. Everything she did, from leaping over a trashcan to quickly climbing a building for a shortcut made something in me want to look away. It was revolting, and, frankly, terrifying. She smiled the whole time, more so then that big scar would indicate. It was like her entire mouth stretched open, like a Jack o'lanturn, to reveal far too many teeth. She began to laugh, a high pitched, piercing sound that will wake me in a cold sweat. She seemed to be covered in a sickly black smoke, like smog or ooze.

I pedaled faster as she went over the building. The scarf was the last thing I saw, and I could swear it winked at me with eyes that weren't there. I rounded the corner, banking too hard and crashing. I quickly stood and collected my bike, as best as my shaking knees and sweaty palms would allow. I saw her though. She stood next to Gator. He was on his knees and his face as white as snow. The Smiler didn't even seem human now, almost like a thick, black sludge given human form. Eyes opened and closed at random over her entire body, and her mouth was twisted into a terrible parody of a smile. Her eyes gleamed and the ground itself seemed to die around her. The building she climbed over looked as though it had been abanded for years, decayed and forgotten. Gator couldn't tear his eyes away from that monster in front of him. She touched his shoulder, and I saw her head dart and close her mouth with a wet crunch. Gator screamed.

I blinked, and all that was left was the small frame of the Smiler running off to finish the race, with Gator crying on the ground in one piece.
And that's it for my terrible story. Wanted to try writing about one of the punks when they start hitting the 300 levels, where they start becoming the Wave instead of just the surfer.

>>9744227

>>9744349
>those faces in the second page

xD

>>9744300
Interesting!

While perhaps more over-the-top than even I had imagined (and to clarify I'm imagining lightning punches, flaming kicks, and sub-zero wakes of air) I think it shows the gap effectively.

Working on the character sheet.

Have hyadain while you wait.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jY8jJRvwKS4&NR=1

>>9744387

A bit, but hopefully the implication that it was all in their heads is there. Maybe.

Though, I do like to think Gator later went to the Bodhisattvas to recover and ended up joining them.

Still, I kind of imagine they tend to embody a concept when they hit the 300 levels, whether its flame, or wind, or a wave, or something more intangible like fear.

Oh, I almost stopped posting 'this is your party'-s

Almost.

Blackbirds: Will steal all your shit and then shoot you in the face.

Well, not always with the shooting, they're one of the more criminally biased ones though...

>>9744609
You know, I was going to suggest we put our recommended VeloCITY playlist together...

And now I'm a little afraid of what Lead Design and Editor's suggestions might be.

And this is... a particularly flamboyant black rose, even for their standards.

Seriously, a 'fuck me' tattoo?

>>9744696

So this project seems damn interesting- I need to see if I can rope some people into trying out this combat system.

For now, lemme see what sort of images I can dig up for you guys- hopefully I can help even the genders out a little more.

Two members of the Deadmen!

>>9744728
SHIT HOW THE FUCK DID I FORGET THAT

This is your Smarts 7 Runner.

>>9744728
DAT ZETTA HAT

DAT ZETTA HAIR

I KNOW WHO THE FRACTAL THAT IS, YOU NANOPASCAL.

1: Is there any way to distinguish between different types of equipment for a particular category of sports, like distinguishing between quads and inline skates, or between racing bikes and trick bikes?

2: Any rules for unconventional, performance art, or 'mutant' equipment, such as this?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=agfpctJEa_4

3: How about motorized equipment? Actual motorized inline skate are almost always home-made creations, and never as impressive as Air Treks are supposed to be, but someone might still want rules for a BMX bike or something.

4: May we have a faction of extreme sports enthusiasts who are also fleshpots and exhibitionists, akin to Ashwood Abbey from Hunter: the Vigil?

>>9744797
Factoring 000s, it's x 2 DIE

I dont remember if i posted this before but:

a suggestion to have some kind of enhancement called "Beat"
gives a large bump to +soul and small bump allround
no negative effects untill it wears off where it gives a small all round negative and a larger negative to speed

What gang?

>>9744696


I will also do this. I have far too much music to not be able to have fun with it.

Also, gonna head to bed. Here' hoping it's another glorious thread!

>>9744817
1. Other than relevant statistics, not that I can think of unless you just have a quick description of them
2. House rules since I have no clue when the fuck that sort of thing would come up in game and I would have no way to account for all of it.
3. Yes, in two forms since gasoline is insanely expensive in Velo: Battery and Dynamo. Battery runs long and fairly efficiently but with little benefit over normal aside from possibly better acceleration and max speed, and dynamo builds up as you move, and unleashes its charge over a much shorter time for FUCKING INSANE SPEED OH MY GOD I'M THE MOTHERFUCKING FIST OF THE NORTH STAR JESUS CHRIST
4. That sounds exactly like Spice, who don't have an ego but are completely dedicated to doing the most insane fucking tricks you will ever see.

>>9744848
Pointless is gone; this makes me sad.

>>9744867
Ex-deadmen, work for street force now, poaching newbie punks.

>>9744645
Oh fuck it's Smiling Jack and his crew... we're so fucked I think our assholes are already bleeding.

Approximately 75% of your PC's total income will be going to this guy.

Note that this is licensed concept art, so it might be a touch riskier to use. Definitely a handy reference, though.

I think I'll have to make energy swords available too.

Expensive as god's left nut, but, available.

The fiction is terrible but the setting sounds fun.

A net gain!

>>9745084
Yeah as I've said I'm going to cherrypick what goes in to keep it as malleable, yet interesting, as possible as a setting rather than ORIGINAL CHARACTER DO NOT STEAL

>>9744837
THERE IS A TRAP IN THIS PICTURE CAN YOU GUESS WHERE?!?

>>9743322
you really aughta stick the tic tac in there somewhere. it can easily be modified as an attack, and at higher levels you could be able to tic tac off of people (a gang or group of fuzz are trying to block your path and you tic tac off of them in succession until you get to the other side). i'd also replace the slide with underbar since the underbar can not only get you under things but through them as well, you could use it to swing from something and kick someone, and anyone who slides on pavement at high speeds deserves road rash. it's also just more efficient, which is what parkour is about. jus muh two cents.

>>9745000

I'd assume they'd be the official weapon of high ranking police officers and high-teer assassins.

Like, just having one basically tells everyone you're a badass and you'd better hope you can actually use the thing so when the next punk who thinks he can take you finds out you'll actually be able to defend yourself.

>>9745143
Underbar, slide- the gist is the same, as for the tic tac I got that as a suggestion but it seems its only use would be as flavor since runners have freedom of movement any way, and you could just kick someone and say you're tic tacking off of them anyway.

Fuck YEah RunnerS!

http://www.onemanga.com/Black_Lagoon/59/13/
One potentially revelant bit from Black Lagoon.

>>9745221

lolol where's her spine?

>>9745221

>>9745259
Spine?!
What the Fuck is that?
Also this is my look
But not black more of a brown

>>9743032

>Street force: COPS THAT ARE TOTALLY CRAZY

My opinion of this game is now revised.

>>9745312
Fuck yeah Crazy Cops! Lets push them off buildings

>>9745361
oh Shit This one can RUN!

>>9745329
Imagine these gents on military-grade tactical wheeled foot apparatuses chasing punks downhill.

My runner.

>>9745361
>Crazy Cops

AXE COP REPORTING FOR DUTY

>>9745392
I am OKAY with this.

>>9745377
>>9745361

Crazy cop-runners are my fetish

bonus points for helmet + balaclava

>>9745423
JAde will kick his ass then get him fired for using a axe on teens

>>9745430
You know, I'm okay with this too.

This is your party.

>>9745511
It's nice to know the loli gained a few inches.

FUCK YEAH KICKING

how's gear coming along?

>>9745534
WAIT! Kick a Cop in Front of a Train!
THAT FOR FOX THE WARRIORS!

>>9745534
kick someone while you're wearing those Springheel Jackboots.

>>9745672
Oh that will hurt

>>9745769
It may have adverse effects if you accidentally set off both at once though, unless you rabbit-kick someone.

>>9745221
Runners?

>>9741960

>3rd Gen GlitchHop

A friend of mine who makes music... when I tell him that somebody actually theorized about "glitchhop," he'll fucking kill someone.

"i once shat explosively into a toilet, and I swear to god it sounded like I was making glitchcore music" is how he once put it.

>>9745847
Excessively unsyncopated beats, modal tonality, industrial influences, and meter complexities. Tell him this and he shall shat once more... Though as a musical movement it's already slowly growing, but I just don't think it'll become very large.

That being said I'll heavily bump it as VeloCITY concept music.

>>9745805
Runners.

Anywho, sleep-time rapidly approaches. Score one for continuing to be useless. I'll catch everyone about tomorrow morning.

If you're going to make writefaggotry about skatepunk or whatever rather than pretending you're a pretentious hipster you could actually be a pretentious hipster.

i mean in the new sort of kind of post-everything sensibilities we have coming out the key is the key is you have to kind of tie everything back to free jazz where it all came from so commas are out and punctuation is out except maybe periods every now and again. really though this whole atonal syncopated movement thats springing up in a few places is pretty intereststing but if you want to write about it you you you need to understand how it would flow and make your writing get across the rhythm of the music or lack thereof so start employing some interesting literature choices improper sentence structure et cetera and make it so that reading your writefag bullshit is listening to the music that kind of defines and sort of partially realized albarn future

glitchop is basically chopped and screwed dubstep

>>9741798
>>9741743
>>9741723

I feel like this is unfinished. Just some punk ass kid getting his ass whupped and then saved? That's mundane bullshit.

It should go on. Kid skating around, doing his kinda shitty thing, generally being a mopey little dork. Some Crazy chick boarder blasts by, busts some Awesome moves, and then tells him to man the fuck up, before giving him a little instruction, tour, and pep talk.

The next day, he boards in, trips and generally makes a fool out of the bullying cunts before getting into class. Then, he watches how his teacher moves, and realises "Oh shit, she's the boarder who taught me!".

I realise it was kinda implied she was a punk, attributing colour to her, but this aint a subtle setting.

>>9741855
Screw you and the horse you rode in on.

Also, this is my Runner.

>>9750133

Saved for the Saved god!

>>9750133
A fitting entry.

Also, I wonder when this will be summed up in a pdf?

> extreme sports Punks fight against The Man.
Christ, I hate this already...

>>9750170

>ITT: OC is bad.

ITT: trolls try to troll people who are asleep, and the few people still awake waiting for more contributors to arrive.

>>9750170

>>9750186
>>9750207
Nofunmind?

>>9750170

In fairness, I can see where he's coming from with that.

Don't worry, it's not as pretentious as it might seem at first. Think noblebright on acid.

>>9750170
jeeznuts will not hear your pleas on /tg/, so go fuck yourself heathen!

>>9750222

i was going to say somthing about that...

also, what the hell are you posting? looks good.

>>9750170
Remember Shadowrun?

>MythicaltranshumansfightingTheMan.jpg

>>9750170
Cool viewpoint, bro.

The internet is a better place, now that we know what you think of something.

>>9750239
Its Hiei from Yu Yu Hakusho.

Artist is Diabolism.

Fuck Runners. Obedience will be enforced.

So just some more disscussion and then a segue into the hei stuff? I'm not sure what to classify it as.

Eh, I've seen worse. Though if anyone else is up, I could do with some of the logo designs I saw splashed around every so often. If you have them, please post them

Gonna be on a computer with illustrator for most of the day and don't want to go insane.

Also, random punky picture from mah folder.

I awake to find people have trolled me in my sleep.
Awesome!
>>9746359
An interesting thought, I might even try something like that if I ever finish the story and take it back to editing and a re-write.

Assuming I care about my own fiction

>>9749551
You are entirely correct, it is unfinished. The storyline you outline is... kinda close? A few thematic differences, the teacher is not a central character though I do try to heavily imply she's an ex punk during a scene or three.

>>9750295
>>9750282

Fuck it. I'll put up more of the story. For this poster.

>>9750295
>>9750282

hang on a second... thats a kind of trap isnt it?

I'm a little late to the party. So, what is this? Extreme cyber-punk? lolrandum rebellion? Kids who grew up on the streets have super-powers based on whatever sub-culture they immersed themselves in?

>>9750366
Here is the logo.

It occurs to me I have the choice between being ready for work and writing nothing, quitting my job and writing all day (so tempting), and half-assing both. Here goes half-assing intentionally indulgent writefagging.

>>9750474

Yes, on at least one level, to all. Not -quite- so randumb, but when I tried to create factionalism and gangs that controlled large territory into the fluff Anon and Lead Design both rejected the concept an unsuitably Punk and or Anarchic.

Which is why I'm writing the fiction I am right now, to show if I can grasp the more desperate struggle of the few and exactly what disenfranchises a youth in Velo so that they turn to the Punk culture and start down the path towards gaining aforementioned superpowers.

This would be better if you ditched the extreme sports and called it tekkonkinkreet

So this is Shadowrun/CyberPunk,
minus the Grim or the Dark,
Plus ROLLERBLADES.
Sounds like a fucking shit ass anime...
Yay. Just what the world needs.

>>9743341
There are some major problems with this

rough character sheet i've thrown together in mspaint so far

>>9750611
OH SHIT, IT'S THE NO FUN POLICE.

LET'S GET THE FUCK OUT OF HERE, GUYS.

>>9750554
What disenfranchises you?

I havent read to much of this yet but just from the things its based off I am very excited!!!

>>9750610
Don't forget emo kids trying to define themeselves and their world through Gaining Superpowers... Yeah, this would work as something to watch, but what's the appeal of playing a game who's whole mechanics seem to be based on MOVING PLACES bit WITH STYLE?
Has any succesful P&P ever focused this hard on movement? Never mind making movement it's core design principle...?

>>9750625

What problems are those?

>>9750930
The fact that there aren't any other RPGs like it doesn't make that BAD, per se. All RPGs have their roots in D&D, in which movement was a sort of afterthought to the rules (less so as the game went on, though). As such, all subsequent RPGs share that bias to a degree or were specifically designed to remove that bias.

I think there may be too much focus on CRAZY and OUTLANDISH SHIT in this game. As for me, I'm all for running a game about a humble crew of skaters starting from the basics.

>>9750998

It may not seem like there's a lot of potential in a low-key game, but I think if you focus on party interaction and making the most mundane things into adventures, it'd work.

>>9750998
WOIW A TEENAGER WHO SMOKES. AND THEY HANG OUT WITH A TOKEN NIGGER!
THEY ARE THE REBELS OF OUR GENERATION.

>>9751021

It'd also be good to have some actual skaters contribute. The game needs more slang terms and stuff.

>>9751044
Wouldn't they consider this kind of thing silly?

>>9751044

Thankfully, Velocity hasn't taken a lot of flak from trolls, but they have targeted the fact that the PC's are "punks". It's not about the actual punk movement, people. It's about punk kids.

>>9750467
The only female I posted was the blue haired girl in the top left corner at the kiss chart.

>>9751062

I dunno. Maybe there are people around that are interested in both skating and RPG's? Stranger things have happened.

>>9751083

Source for more. This has picked my interest

>>9751083

I'm not sure about the emphasis on "color" and "greys" in the game, either. I mean, it works as a metaphor, but if you start taking it literally it becomes really silly, like that tagging game that flopped, "Getting Up: Contents Under Pressure". Just my opinion though.

>>9750998
I am firmly of the belief you could run an entire campaign at the 10* level and have it be interesting, that was the design philosophy I had behind my original fluff attempts and I do not think it is any less true now.

Games, settings,fluff, it's all what you make of it limited only by your imagination. Find four other people who find the concept interesting and you have a game. Besides the game isn't even out of Alpha. Tons of work still needs to go into it to make it a system worth playing.

Anywho

I'll be taking my laptop to work today to continue writing the really terrible fiction. Its -so- good. And by good I mean it's terrible in all the ways I love about things hackneyed and tacky.

>>9751021
>MWAAA

>>9751041
QFT

gay comic is hella gay

>>9750965
there's a disgusting lack of crab

>>9751098

http://damaged.anime.net

Most annoying layout ever

christ, its trolly in here today. i like the character sheet so far. the name tag in the corner gives it a certain 'not taking myself too seriously' charm.

>>9751098

There's only 6 pages of this comic available online. I'm just posting it here in the hopes of inspiring some /tg/ original content.

I could post a writefaggotry by the comic's author, which I think is relevant to VeloCITY. I already posted it once, but that thread was never archived.

>>9751098
you're a faggot

>>9751127
Crab skating (AKA the switch foot) is where you point both feet in opposite directions. It's an extremely important move in ground skating and many moves (and dodging people) require it.

>>9751183
having no crab is outrageous!

>>9750998

As said before. The beginning of this game is gonna focus more on the much more low key sections of the game. The 10* level. This would be the fun, more earthy realistic level. As realistic as this game gets anyway.

The crap with the Smiler going all abomination I posted would be higher level of the 30*.

>>9751107

It more a focus on expression. Gray is just thier unform and they're business colors of black and white. Punks rebel by using every other part of this spectrum.


Also, have we decided what titles are for each level? Like I put down that people in the 30*s are Heroes, since it tickled my fancy and they remind me of more mythological things. As it is, I would like to figure that out. One of those tiny details that might be nice to add. And better names then what I came up with.

>>9751209
i kinda like alphas, since i think punks would kinda like the pack visualisation that brings but it sounds a little official from another viewing. and i think ive heard them being referred to as aesirs once or twice, not sure if thats official or anything.

i know its going back a fair bit but i really like this cover >>9743020 a lot more than the one in OP. seems less... gratuitous. more characterful.

>>9751437
Isn't the cover in the OP meant to be for the book about the various gangs, and the blue cover is going to be the one for the PHB or whatever Nothing Man calls it?

>>9751466

OP cover was one that was slapped together by Zhuren I believe. It's not supposed to be anything official I believe. Just something catchy and eye opening.

rolled 68 = 68

>>9751508
well it sure as hell managed that

>>9751508
It also says "my game is all about tits and ass." Which may or may not be what you want.

maybe, i dont know. i only skimmed through this thread and missed the last couple due to work and a completely out of the blue 24hr ban (not that im bitter about that or anything). even for a different book though, seems a little 'hot girl on the front has no visible link to the contents but still hot girl' which always bugs me in rpgs. i mean sure, im a sad and lonely fa/tg/uy, and sure i have trouble saying no to scantily clad womenfolk, but i dont appreciate my weaknesses being exploited for the OMG BOOBIES brb

>>9751544

He has a point, maybe we should stick to the first one.

Also, I think we need to work out a good blurb for VeloCITY. We should probably avoid the word punk as it has a load of connotations that don't really apply to our guy's. Possibly also leave out " The Man " cause that one has a LOT of teen angst attached to it for some people.

in a world where- wait, wait, no. let me try again.
it is the year XXXX, and mankind has- wait, no. hang on. ok.
in a post-apocalyptic- oh hell no. damn.

wow. this is hard...

howzat so far? anyone got any suggestions what else should be on there?

>>9751842

So are we not including those little skills just yet?

I forget hyow exactly they worked but it was just stuff like " Good with Computers " and you would get a small bonus if you tried to do something involving them.

>>9751842

something for more personal details about your punk I think. Not a lot, but more then just your name to fluffy establish your character in a line or two. Also, a bit more seperation on the Vigor and Energy. Speicifically, more seperation between the writing and the (Muscle and momentum stuff.) Just make it a bit cleaner looking.

So what's this about? Judging from the OP picture it's like anime FATAL or something?

rolled 89 = 89

>>9751842
Do we really need the massive style thing at the bottom when it doesn't carry over between 'action scenes' or whatever its called, and resets every time you bail?

>>9751897
i was gonna put lines in for stuff like gangs and turf and probably theme song underneath class... anything else you can think of? text looks fine to me :\
wat do?

>>9751875
this isn't anywhere near an official character sheet. someone else posted >>9743118
and i decided to try filling it in based on rules pages that have been posted. i really just intended to throw all the essentials on there so that someone else closer to the project to tweak it as they saw fit later.

>>9751998
i was thinking about shrinking that a bit, and i thought i saw something in the rules about style ranking so i assumed there should be a way to track it (hince the littler stars for checking off)

>>9752000

Crap. Give me like 30 minutes and I can show you what I mean. It's a minor thing, and mostly spacing. I need to switch to a better computer then a shitty netbook.

>>9751998
i figure use a token or something to mark what your style is at the time. that way you can tell at a glance what it is at any moment while racing, but can change it quickly and easily a you go. start at f, when you do well enough slide it up to d, then you stack it and move it back to f, and so on.

>>9752030
thing is i didn't have the font, so all of the text is copy pasted from other stuff that was posted in this thread

>>9751998
that better?

>>9752113
forgot pic

ALLRIGHT, FUCK

YOU KNOW WHAT? /tg/ NEEDS TO START A PUBLISHING COMPANY THAT WOULD PUBLISH EVERY SINGLE AWESOME HOMEBREW /tg/ CAME UP WITH. I WANT A HARDCOVER VELOCITY BOOK.

>>9752146
They would have nothing to publish because everything goes to shit before they can finish it when /tg/ realizes how much it sucks.

>>9752146
/tg/ makes a lot of awesome stuff but rarely finishes it. Take Machina Dei for example. Awesome setting, never finished the rules (barely started them, in fact).

Velocity seems to be a simpler system so it might actually get finished.

I think this thread started bad, with a misleading pic and a not particularly representative fluff bit.

We really need to make a proper blurb, which says what this setting isn't about.

This Aint just punk kids fighting the man. This is a newly arisen culture of freedom of expression and movement, anarchy of mind and body, which is attempting to break free and establish itself as a legitimate force in the world.

On the other side is mundanity, the ordinary, grey world. The Man isn't some unified force of opposition, and I don't think the term really fits the setting. There isn't The Man, there's The Grey. That general feeling of the mundane and ordinary, which makes people think being Grey is the "Right" way to be, and people who are Different are Wrong.

Punks see themselves in a thousand different ways. Some are crusading philosopher poets, others are kids having fun or scientists of speed experimenting with this new medium of movement. The Punk movement is as divided and varied as the Grey is monotonous and dull.

I dunno, I'm rambling, I just think quite a lot of this thread has got the wrong idea. This isn't "Lol skaters rock police suck". Its a fictional world, where things are different and the rules change. Its not angsty punks tagging neighbourhoods and being douchebags- or, at least not mostly, and folks like that'll get fucked over in the long run.

Its a setting about freedom, and individuality, and the forces that would crush that. At least, that's what it seems to me. The folks who like the setting are as varied as the folks in it, I'd guess, so make up your own mind. Just don't judge a book by its cover.

>>9752240

Oh... my... god...

This is the best blurb ever.

>>9752240
you gotta admit, though, that cover's not that good. the original is much better. just too bad it has copyrighted artwork in it. i was enthusiastic about the first few threads when this started originally, but the last few threads haven't been very good. they've just been kinda lackluster, i guess.

>>9752266

Eh, it needs a little cleaning up. I've just been around from the early threads, and I get the feeling that, no offence to Zhuren, he's not the best at clearly stating what the setting is about.

His stuff is still good mind. Its just easy to get the wrong idea about the setting if you read it out of context.

Movement is how you hey from one cool setpiece to the next. Chases can be a setpiece, sure. But isn't the game just going to be one long fucking chase? Running, skating, whatever, away from the bad guys?
And when they catch you?
You fight back or just run away with style again?
Does this mean enemies are reduced to grind rails to perform sick tricks off in order to run away flipping the bird? How long could this formula keep people hooked for?

>>9752320

Think Mirror's Edge (or what Mirror's Edge should be). Disarm / stun them, then run away because you're going to get fucked if you fight.

Yeah, it's not necessary going to be a chase after chase - that's like saying DnD will be a fight after a fight.

>>9752320
there's still combat and roleplaying. the system just puts more emphasis on movement than other games.

>>9752320

You're thinking about it the wrong way.

For these punks, movement doesn't need to be a means. It can be an end in itself, and it can also be a means to more than just going from A to B. You can still fight, you can still run missions, you can do pretty much anything you can in a normal campaign. You'll just, usually, do it at high speed, with a splash of colour.

There are groups like the Blackbirds, in the shadow of the punk movement, running infiltration and espionage. But even they aint grey or black. They're cool dark blue and green, subtle colours which stay hidden in the night.

Based on Battle Colour Poets Vs The Grey, you may as well run this with WoD rules and call it;

ParKour;
The Faggening

>>9752367

>WHINE WHINE WHINE WHERE IS ALL THE GRIMDARK

>>9752367

And another person whose gotten a wrong idea of the setting. Sorry, the blurb I wrote up Does seem a little pretentious. It really is a relatively down to earth setting though, far less pretension than WoD. Well, at least the way I plan to run it.

>>9752311

I think in the recent threads things have gotten a little bogged down in details, people trying to do new stuff which has already been done and getting a little lost, or people discovering it and getting a wrong idea. No offence to Zhuren, whose a nice guy and an enthusiastic contributor, but he Did get a thread or two derailed and has had a little trouble getting a proper feel for the setting, although he seems to be getting the flow now, which is very good. Hopefully, post alpha, and when we have a proper blurb so we don't get so much misunderstanding, quality'll go up again.

>>9752354
>>9752351
>>9752366
It sounds pretentious.
It sounds dull.
It's trying to break a mould, but come ON.
You try and sell this to the RPG Market, oh hey guys it's a game about MOVEMENT and the FREEDOM movement brings... Most will just say, "the fuck? I don't want to map out a whole chase scene every game, what...? Every ENCOUNTER?! Fuck that!!"
And the cool post modern hipster fags you're trying to attract? "Wut, why's this not a video game man? Dice? Shits just D&D, nerd. Not gonna waste my time..."

Does it really matter if it uses copyrighted art?

I mean it's a homebrew thing and not in any way a commercial product, who gives a shit if you use copyrighted art.

>>9752457
>>I've never played jet set radio.

>>9752457
>I've never played Jet Set Radio
>I've missed the past eight threads and six or seven significant contributors autosage
>I don't like this, clearly it has no appeal to anyone

>>9752499
>Implying hipsters aren't going to be the main group interested in this regardless.

>>9752457

Sorry, but that is just your personal opinion.

A lot of people like the game, and a lot of people see a lot of potential in it for interesting storytelling which you seem to be ignoring, or just aren't seeing in the premise. That's fair enough. Its not a game for you, and it wasn't intended as a game for you.

Personally, I'm not going to use any maps for it. Speed, acceleration and so on can work fine as relative values, and as long as I give a strong description of a location, conveying its themes as well as the major features, I think I can trust some good PC's to come up with cool tricks and such all on their own.

>>9752457
Aren't you a magical little cunt~?

>>9752533
>Implying it matters who likes it and the most important thing shouldn't be that people have... you know... fun?

It suddenly got real butthurt in here.

>>9752553
>>9752533
>>9752529
>>9752499

Please guys. Don't resort to that kinda thing so quickly. If you can keep a tone of civility, you can sometimes resolve things without too much difficulty, and thus you can avoid the thread getting dragged off into an argument of trolling and such. He has an opinion, and he is entitled to it. It simply means that this is not a game for him. I do agree that it does Not mean the premise of the game is bad, and he'd be wrong if he stated so, but he's merely implied so. Nonetheless, we don't yet have any real grounds for being so uncivil.

>>9752457

>>Implying it's not a rules lite system designed to tell stories over winning encounters.
>>Implying that m opinion should make you guys switch out everything you've done and change the premise f the game.
>>Implying that you have a different view point that I respect, but your wording and tone makes me hate you for it.
>>Implying my penis is tiny and I cannot take internet insulting and trolling
>>Will put idea on back burner for now to emphasive freedom and creativity as that is an important point.
>>Implying it will be sold.

Also you smell.

>>9752529
>>9752499
Oh wow, yeah, a Vidya like this being fun totally means a P&P will do the same!!!
Hell it's not like it's two totally different fucking mediums aimed at two totally seperate demographics, fuck me sideways it was Earth all along!!!

>>9752533
we're not, fyi.

seriously though marketing an rpg to hipsters is like trying to sell a lexus to a crust punk.

>>9752617

Now, this post? This post is either a troll or horrendously ignorant, and can safely be ignored for either reason. If you must respond, a certain lack of civility isn't too uncalled for, as it were.

An example would be. "If you don't like it, don't post in the thread you stupid fucking cunt".

>>9752630
>tripfag
>hipster

Why am I not surprised.

>>9752655
>>9752630

...We are not "Marketing" an RPG to anyone. We're taking an idea which seems cool to us, and running with it. If you don't like it, please go and post in threads you enjoy, and leave us alone. Seriously, why bother to post? A few moments reading will reveal the point you made to be moot.

>>9752659
it's my 'personal brand'

>>9752656

Honestly, I would like it if they posted. I would raher figure what's wrong, and trolls can do that. If they actually criticize the game and don't spout off the equivalent of buzzwords. Critique is supposed to rip you apart, but so far the only thing I've seen is that there might be too much emphasis on the Color vs non color, which is in itself only a minor part of the game.

I AM AWAKE NOW
>>9752123
This is fucking amazing but it still needs the area for like, 6 slots for the character's personal traits and flaws. Other than that, amazing.

>>9752617
Actually, to massively paraphrase- this is a bare bones version of the game. With time I'll be able to improve it all such that it can possibly have more all-encompassing stats and skills so that it can be abstracted to encompass all angles that the setting can possibly have to offer- for now? I'm designing it more in the mindset of a war game creator, completely focused on this one angle above the rest.

It simply has not blossomed yet.

>>9752686
I'm not sure if it was intentional, but a part of me snickered when you said "running with it".
(hint: it's a pun)

>>9752123

Replace stock dollar symbol with "Cred:" or something else at money.

>>9752743

...I did that unconsciously. Gods, this game is in my brain...

ITT: WAAA DONT CRITIQUE MAH SPESHUL PROJECT AMMA PARTA SUMFIN HERE!!!

>>9752771
I am now going to take Anon's sheet into fireworks, disassemble it, and chop just the little bit for the traits into it- and also keep it all nice and vector so I can edit it in the future.

Thanks, sheetbro.

>>9752701
hey, weren't you going to help clean up the text on the character sheet? i'm pretty tired and could use a hand if you wouldn't mind.

>>9752740
thanks. i'm sure i can make more room. the shape boxes probably don't need to be quite that big. are there going to be hit points? i personally prefer wound systems like savage worlds. i realized that losing shape wasn't quite the same as taking damage since it auto-resets.

>>9752798

Wait, what? None of the contributors said anything like that at all. They accept critique and try to change the game in ways to suit it.

>>9752798

... what critique? Critique is helpful. This is not.

Because it is trolling. Seriously, everyone ignore these guys.

Turning a single skill check into an entire game: The Game.

>>9752819
There are hit points yes- Vigor is the equivalent for that. Most damage hits Vigor, but some attacks will directly attack Shape.

Also good on you for placing the shape boxes at the side- I had a little thing in mind where I wanted to be able to mark shape with a paperclip.

>>9752840

AND THAT'S THE AWESOME THING ABOUT IT.

>>9752840
Well, if you want to get technical, yeah, there are only 20 different values in the game that you can roll against, not counting modifiers and all that- the stats and skills need improvement, but this is a first test of the game.

honestly if you're trying to capture the feeling you need to compress it down, four stats is too many, four skills is to many. Cut it down to Strength, Agility, Inteligence and Air, Balance, and Tricks

>>9752921

I don't really think that's necessary. Computer interaction, hacking and stealin and fast-talking yourself out of bad situations is still supposed to be a part of VeloCITY.

>>9752921

No. Sorry, but we've got the alpha down to Almost finished. Suggesting rules mods, at this stage, is almost entirely worthless.

>>9752965

Holy fuck, when will we be able to see .pdfs?

get rid of "vigor" everyone has five hitpoints in shape. your "muscle" can help reduce damage or something

I'm just saying it's not anywhere near streamlined enough

>>9752977
>>9752992
Alright, while I'd normally consider some of these things I have to ask: how the fuck much do I have to file down a system I made in a week? None of these ideas are remotely useful to me for now- the system's already cemented around 4 stats and 4 skills, the vigor system is so that people don't get knocked out, invariably, in so many hits, and all that.

Countermeasures and balance- but it's still all significantly simpler than most RPGs, to the point it could be played as a board game

>>9752965

then start over because if you're trying to create a system that moves fast you've gotten too bloated already

>>9753061
It has a maximum of one roll per the equivalent of a turn per player, with the target to hit being easily found by mashing two numbers together.

>>9753061

No. Fuck off. We have a system. We are going to playtest it. If it works, great. If it doesn't, well change it.

We are Not going to scrap a weeks progress for some random fuckwit latecomer. Screw you.

>>9753033
you could add "out cold" as the last shape box and instead of using vigor as hp use it as a role to resist damage to shape/a way to recover shape

when you're trying to make something run as fast as possible you have to constantly be asking yourself "is this absolutely, 100% necessary, will the game be unplayable suck without it?" If your answer is "no" or "maybe" then you rip it out and toss it in the trash

Aha, a new Velo Thread! Now, where did I get too...

Joining Spice is deceptively simple. You do not Find Spice.
They will find you.
Chaotic as it is, Spice's ability to gather information is impressive. They have members in the majority of Gangs within Velo, and even considering their relative lack of Gang-Loyalty, Spicer's do talk about more than just Tricks on the boards. Furthermore, you can always count on a Spicer to have some means of Recording video on his Person, be it a Camera, Phone, or even Just the Skills to hack local Security Cameras. Of course, this is because Spice encourages, almost mandates, its members to Record every Trick they see that, as a Spicer would put it, is Especially Flavoursome. These videos are then Posted to the Message board, although Many of them find their way to other Sites over time. There, the vast Hordes of Spicers pick them apart, appraising Every Trick with an expert Eye, Praising the the elite, and Denouncing the Mediocre.
Spices recruiting strategy is simplicity itself. If a particular Video gets a particularly Good Response, they have Found their Latest Recruit. If their lucky, a Spicer will already know the Punk in question, And will be able to, Anonymously, contact them and Offer them membership. If their not, it becomes a Game, Spicers competing to See who can be the First to Present, however openly they want, the Prospective Spicer with the Offer.

>>9753086
so you don't actually want legitimate criticism you want slowpitch shit that you can knock out of the park.

If you're this invested in the status quo you've created when you're only a week into the project you might as well just pack it in.

>>9753184
It's not as much that, as much as your ideas are completely irrelevant. This is the very starting rendition to the game- everything, rules-wise, is now cemented. I just need to actually finish it all up, host it, and then playtesting can start and I can alter it from there depending on what parts are or are not fun.

If I wanted to scrape off everything that made the game not tristat DX, I would have.

>>9753199
so how do these personal traits work?

>>9753296
Basically, just 3 of each, you put in 3 things that your character is good at or general positive stuff, like, "Good at cooking" or "Expert mechanic" and then you put in 3 not-so-good things about your character, like, "Cannot dance", or, "Unstealthy"

Basically, a catch-all replacement for an actual skill system.

So I'm still doing most of the math, but it seems like the style values of tricks are really low compared to the wagering bonus.

For a lot of these tricks, a single wager will double the style you get. I'm not entirely clear on what the penalties for failure are, but it seems like this will encourage a lot of wagering even when a character's attribute is very, very low.

Do you lose a fixed amount of style for a failed roll? Or do you drop a grade? In the first case the optimal decision may be to fail hilariously until you finally land one super trick, which seems incorrect.

>>9753337
Lose one style point if your fail minorly (by less than 5), 5 if you bail out and fail majorly (more than 5)

All I've got on that issue so far is that it really needs to be ironed out- otherwise, it's all about wagering when you're good at something, and playing it safe when you are really, really not.

>>9753114
Offers to Join Spice come in many Forms. Sometimes, its just an E-mail, with Login Details and a single question; "Spice; you want in?". Sometimes, a more "low Tech" approach is used, Sending the message via Post, Phone, Or even just a Piece of Paper tied to a Brick. Recently, the Trend is for a Simple Business card, slipped into the Prospectives possession without their Notice.
If you Accept the Membership, All you need to is visit the board and Log in using the Details given in the Invitation. If you don't, just leave it. The Invitation will expire after a Day or so, and they'll never Contact you again.
Unless, of course, you catch their Attention again, In a Bigger way than before.

Of the Original Spice Gang, only a few members Remain. Only two of the Original Admins are still Alive, Dr Tobasco and Cajun. Some like to claim that Jolokia is also alive, but most Accept that he's Dead. Furthermore, Cajun left the Gang years back to get Married, and has not been heard from since, and so Tobasco is the sole Remaining Admin for the board. While there are lesser Moderators, only she holds the Ability to Ban or Expel Members, a power she Exercises rarely and only against those Who break the Cardinal Rule of Spice; No Fakeing. She keeps her Streetname a tight Secret, going so Far as to Disguise herself in the Sporadic Videos she posts. And, While her skills are undeniably great, she admit she is "No Replacement for Jolo", and her Popularity in the gang results from her skills in Maintaining the board against the Frequent attempts to Bring it Down.

very nice, randomcapschap. i especially like the way ex-members were mentioned - it gives a feel that this is part of an ongoing story. And the fact that tabasco has a certain degree of humility is nice, considering shes leader of the creme de la creme.

We seem to have gotten bogged down a bit these past few threads. I suppose it was inevitable what with the CRAZYAWESOME outpouring of idea's in the first couple.

We REALLY need a blurb for this though, or else we're going to end up arguing what does and doesn't fit the setting in every thread.

>>9753360
revision after reading the style page again. haven't made room for the other traits yet, but i'm trying to make it easy to track stuff like style points.

>>9752819

Sorry, was in a class that frowns on things like creativity. Fucking art history.

Tell me what you want and I can do changes, but I think I may wait for Nothing Man at this point. Though I'll work on stuff if you think it needs it now.

Goddamnit Nothing Man! Stop being so good at this!

Also, the million dollar question. How/When will this playtest first happen? Do you have an idea Nothing Man, or should we just shut up about it for a while?

>>9753608
Sssooooon.

Primarily, since this guy is working on a character sheet, I just need to plot down runner movement rules, the a glossary of gear examples... and that's pretty much it for the alpha

>>9753680
To re-cap on this, I'll plot down the runner shit and the gear glossary as soon as I get my chinese food delivered.

I'm gonna run a playtest on sup/tg/ at some point soon after the alpha is released. Watch this space.

>>9753442
Although most Gangs dislike Spice because of their recklessness and Irresponsibility, there are some gangs that are more positive towards them. And, Likewise, some that dislike them More than others.

Spice tends to get along well with the Fireworks, especially since Jolokia, the most famous Spicer of all, Joined the Fireworks shortly after the Original Spice was "disbanded". Spice and the Speedfreaks have something of a "Friendly rivalry", since Many of the most famous Spicer Tricks involved significant Speed. big Pepper, up until his death in a Traffic collision, was a Popular member of the speed-loving Gang.

On the other side, the High Fliers actively denounce Spice as "Reckless Idiots with no respect for the City or its people". Punksquad is known to Have a Policy of "Permanently Removing" any Spicer found within their Ranks from the Punk Community. Spice has also, in various ways, expressed its dislike of the Balence in the past, seeing their rules as stifling the Creativity of the Punk community and Preventing some Tricksters from reaching their full "Flavor". How the Balence feels about Spice is unknown, as are most things about the Enigmatic Group, but the common perception is that they are "Not Fond" of them.

Black roses with weapons concealed in there cell phones

Ok, I've been following VeloCITY off and on for about 5 days now, and I just noticed something about speed.

On the movement page (and I realize that this is probably the worst way to gather this information) the blader's max speeds are all given at 6. Now while I assume they are all low level, a max speed of 6 implies these bladers move at a rough estimate of 6 meters per second, which translates to only about 13 miles per hour.

Now correct me if I wrong, but doesn't this seem abhorrently slow? I'm almost certain that I myself was clocked at 10 mph (granted I was going downhill) on my blades when I was a kid, and this is a fantastical setting.

>>9754012
Yeah, but, the trick is- if you're going to try creating a game at a realistic scale like that then the sheer fucking mapmaking would be INSANE, it's already kind of specific since you need to think of rails and ramps and pipes and all that but at such a massive scale you'd need a huge table to get races or such done.

>>9754012

Oh god, now whenever I imagine any of the characters doing tricks they'll be doing teeny little hops at a snails pace....

" DID YOU SEE THAT JUMP! "

" HE MUST HAVE BEEN GOING ALMOST TEN MILES AN HOUR! "

" I THINK HE GOT, LIKE, HALF A METRE OFF THE GROUND! "

" I WILL NEVER SEE SOMETHING SO AWESOME AGAIN IN MY LIFE! "

>>9754012
>>9754071
plus this Alpha is doing to be played in the lowest bracket and that speed is with out any speed boosting skills.

The Spice Saga draws to a close.

>>9753928
While Jolokia is, by far, the most Famous Spicer, a few current Members have gained a small degree of Fame among the wider Community. These include Gingersnap, a Boarder known for a Series of Extreme Grinding videos, Five-Spice, a Blader with exceptional Wall riding Skills who Hangs out around the Docks, and Old Bay, a relatively elderly Punk who Likes to Jump off tall buildings.

Oh, and a note on Leaving Spice. Spicers are free to leave at any time, although rejoining is harder. Generally, a Spicer will only be forcefully Expelled from the Gang if they Fake a Trick for a Video, or are found to be consorting with Yoghurt, a Rival Internet Gang created topple Spice from its position of Supremacy above other "Extreme Stunt" Gangs. Those Expelled from the Gang can never Rejoin, although the Official punishment ends there.
However, those who are punished in this fashion should beware that not All Spicers are so content to Leave it at that. So Called "Red Hot" Spicers, comparable to Religious Evangelists, are known to Hunt down Disgraced Spicers to "Punish them Properly". While the Higher Rankers of Spice do not necessaries approve of this activity, they make no obvious attempts to prevent it either.

Finally, I leave you with the Unoffical Motto of Spice;

Taste the Flavour of the Burning Streets, Set aflame your Passion and Ignite your Soul.

>>9754176
PS, feel free to Suggest a Better Motto. I know mine sucks

>>9754159
what part of lowest level didn't you get?

I'm probably going to call it quits for a while after this because I haven't gotten any sleep and I'm suppose to be meeting a friend to go running, but are there any other changes/things that need to be added that you guys can think of? If you can shoot me any ideas now I can probably try to work them in later. I've started focusing more on just making this a template for Nothing Man to perfect and put finishing touches on, so I apologize if the top part is a bit sloppy.

>>9754235
Also, I realize some things are still HUGE that could be smaller. Will work on later. Eating now.

hey, how's it goin?

>>9754321

Still offering to help if you want. Just say what to do or if I should just sort of go at it on my own.

>>9754669
I don't really know what else to do from here, that's why I was asking for suggestions.

>>9755223

I'll try my hand at it soon enough and see how it looks then. Just don't want to step on any toes.