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    73 KB Glistening Host Thread OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/29/11(Sun)14:46 No.15094060  
    Continuing these.

    - Is a renegade chapter (originally Blood Dragons)
    - Serves Slaanesh
    - Fell to Chaos due to fighting Heresy with Heresy (turned to Slaanesh to avoid falling to Khorne)
    - Progenitor is the Blood Angels
    - Is thoroughly devoted to Slaanesh
    - Believes corruption above all and is willing to work with mutants/abhumans
    - Marines have freakish skin (most have raw, open muscles or porous skin that can absorb blood)
    - Marines are obsessed with getting close to their foes
    - Marines are skilled with ranged weapons and pray to Slaanesh before battle
    - Figure of legend is a champion/battle-brother who committed great atrocities on the Eldar (turned soulstones into wine)
    - Homeworld is a liberated prison planet with ruined forests and a distant rule
    - Combat Doctrine is Rip and Tear (although they still make use of lots of ranged weaponry)
    - There are no Sorcerers but there are still some psykers
    - Special equipment is unique daemon engines (The Mother)
    - Chapter reveres Slaanesh above all others
    - Has extra astartes but not too many (1500)
    - Ally is a pirate faction (Slaaneshi Rogue Trader dynasty)
    - Enemy is Orks or specific Waaagh!/Warboss (attacked their pirate buddies, may be Chaos Orks)
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/29/11(Sun)14:49 No.15094082
    Right now we're finding a way to merge the history of this chapter with that of the Brotherhood of the Gaunlet. So far we're thinking the Blood Dragons were on Andalus trying to relax themselves and deal with the Black Rage/Thirst. When they fell to Chaos, they began corrupting the populous and so the Grey Knights/Brotherhood were sent to deal with them.
    >> silly drawfag 05/29/11(Sun)14:49 No.15094084
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    I was going for a porcelain feel to the armour but then I thought making it like raw-ish skin was a better idea or something.. and of course this particular guy hasn't been fighting recently so there's no blood anywhere

    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/29/11(Sun)14:57 No.15094151
    I like it. And colour consistently shouldn't be too big of a deal. The Slaaneshi do tend to favour uniqueness.
    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)14:58 No.15094158

    Not sure how I feel about Space Marine holiday camps. Wouldn't it make more sense that the two chapters had some history of kicking arse together, but the Blood Dragons began to use chaos weapons. Then it became sort of like a story about a drug addict: The Blood Dragons began to use more and more chaos weapons, while the Brotherhood of the Gaunlet tried desperately to save them before the chapter OD.

    The Brotherhood, realising that the Blood Dragons had all but damned themselves, reluctantly called for aid from the Inquistion/Grey Knights. The Blood Dragons blame the Brotherhood for their excommunication, while the Brotherhood believe that destroying their former allies was the only way to save their souls from chaos.
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/29/11(Sun)15:00 No.15094183
    I was actually considering that maybe they were sent to the planet to deal with a Khornate insurrection. The influence of Khorne would affect them since they were heavily suffering from the Rage/Thirst, and give them reason to turn to Slaanesh

    ALSO! We need a warcry. What do you guys think about "Your blood shall glisten upon our blades." (from the 1d4chan article talk)?
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:02 No.15094200

    Holiday camps? What are you talking about?
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:05 No.15094241
    So, opening /tg/, the first four threads on the front page for me were:
    The brotherhood of the gauntlet thread.
    Glistening Host thread.
    The Enshrouded thread.
    Hive Fleet Nidhoggr thread.

    I'm not complaining, since the content they generate can be cool, but christ that's a lot of threads.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:06 No.15094247
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    >Slaanesh chapter

    AW YEAH! Prince of Excess in the house, niggas!
    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)15:06 No.15094256

    >So far we're thinking the Blood Dragons were on Andalus trying to relax themselves and deal with the Black Rage/Thirst.

    I'm sorry, but the first thing that makes me think of is the entire chapter going to Majorca or something, then spending their time refusing to go anywhere except the bar and shouting at the locals "DO YOU SPEAK LOW GOTHIC?"
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:08 No.15094275

    That's a misrepresentation. Check >>15093424 for details.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:09 No.15094278
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    >- Marines are obsessed with getting close to their foes
    >- Marines are skilled with ranged weapons

    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:09 No.15094284
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    >Figure of legend is a champion/battle-brother who committed great atrocities on the Eldar (turned soulstones into wine)
    >turned soulstones into wine
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:11 No.15094302
    Two words.

    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)15:13 No.15094324

    This happens every thread.


    Also they like to restrict themselves from entering combat. Think of those guys who wrap belts around their dicks to stop them from orgasming.


    Okay, that's pretty cool.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:13 No.15094328
    >- Marines are obsessed with getting close to their foes
    >- Marines are skilled with ranged weapons

    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)15:14 No.15094332

    See above.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:14 No.15094337

    Also, this: >>15093861
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:15 No.15094344
    >turned soulstones into wine
    >soulstones into wine
    that is some pro shit. how'd it taste?
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:16 No.15094359
    As though a thousand mouths cried out in pain.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:17 No.15094365
    Strangely enough, it tasted like Hawaiian Punch.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:19 No.15094377
    So like Hawaiian Punch?
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:19 No.15094379
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    If the same criticism pops up every single thread, have you considered that it may be something you should change? Because from where I'm standing, it seems like you just want them to be super good at everything, but choppy and shooty.

    Which makes them sound dumb.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:21 No.15094399
    I like the idea that they had a history together. maybe they went on the same crusade together? And then the Blood Dragons got Andalus. And they the Slaanesh shit started and so the Gauntlet had to call in the Inquisition.

    This works better if the gauntlet tried to deal with them using words, then tried to deal with them themselves and failed and THEN called the Inquisition as they have bad relations with them, this also gets the Brotherhood another reason why the Inquisition does not like them. They were bros with now-traitors.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:25 No.15094419
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    >- Fell to Chaos due to fighting Heresy with Heresy (turned to Slaanesh to avoid falling to Khorne)

    So they avoided falling to Chaos by falling to Chaos. Derp.

    Sorry to say OP, but this Chapter sounds stupid as fuck.
    >> Aserion 05/29/11(Sun)15:26 No.15094430
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    It may not even be up to date anymore, but after I saw one of the other pictures I couldn't help but expand. Hopefully you will like it.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:26 No.15094446
    >- Marines are obsessed with getting close to their foes
    >- Marines are skilled with ranged weapons


    >> Salamanders Fanbro !!849yeM8w7ZH 05/29/11(Sun)15:27 No.15094454
    this sucks. kill yourself.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:27 No.15094465
    >it seems like you just want them to be super good at everything, but choppy and shooty.

    That's not at all the case. I think of them as using a musketeer style of fighting, using blade and gun equally.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:28 No.15094473
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:28 No.15094477
    Well it's a different sort of Chaos though, isn't it? They were terrified at succumbing to rage. So they turned to Slaanesh. Simple.
    >> Alpharius 05/29/11(Sun)15:29 No.15094487
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    Glistening Host is OK, but I liked Skin Dancers better. That color scheme is pretty boss, though.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:30 No.15094498
    >Blood, blood everywhere.
    >Serves Slaanesh.
    lol k
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:30 No.15094501

    Desperate people tend to do stupid things.

    Plus, do you really expect someone falls under Chaos influence to act rationally in the first place?
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:31 No.15094515

    It's like someone has never learned how Inquisitors fall.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:33 No.15094530
    Looks pretty good.

    Alright, let's get back on the fluff details. Are we agreed on the Blood Dragon having gone to Andalus to try and calm themselves/deal with a Khornate insurrection?
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:33 No.15094534
    The Brotherhood of the Gauntlet thread has some discussion of how there's a Slaanesh cultist on their planet named after Jack Chick who turns water into wine that corrupts the drinker.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:37 No.15094569
    I'm down with this. I also like the Khornate cult uprising idea since it would give the Blood Dragons an actually reason for having been there.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:40 No.15094591
    If it's any compensation, they've got a Death Company unit named the Flayed Dancers.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:40 No.15094596
    This sort of conflicts with the brotherhood fluff, in their thread, they came to Andalus with the Blood Dragons as part of a crusade and they conquered the planet for the Imperium.

    Of course, Andalus is supposed to be really religiously diverse (like the medieval Iberian Peninsula) so a Khornate presence isn't unimaginable.
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/29/11(Sun)15:44 No.15094619
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    See pic.

    Perhaps the Khornate were already on the plane? Then when the chapters arrived they attempted to wipe them out but small pockets survived.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:47 No.15094645
    Could work like this:
    >Khorne uprising
    >Brotherhood and Blood Dragons come and sort shit out (have they worked together before?)
    >Blood Dragons do the major lifting, get given world
    >Decide for MAXIMUM OPULENCE
    >Eventual corruption, leaks down to the nobles
    >Brotherhood tries to sort shit out
    >Brotherhood calls for Inquisitorial aid
    >Blood Dragons, now Glistening Host, get kicked out
    >Breotherhood gets given world
    >World is corrupt, Brotherhood mad at them (maybe blames themselves for letting them get corrupted)

    Also it was said that the Chapter's hero Jibril might have banished the Glistening Host's daemon prince which later returned. Would they have had it so early on? Would it be more dramatic if Jibril died banishing it? Also of note is to match the daemon's angelic appearance Jibril is the name of the strongest angel in Islam.
    >> Alpharius 05/29/11(Sun)15:49 No.15094659

    Sweet! That does make me feel better
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:54 No.15094693
    This could work with me, maybe The Glistering Host return now and then to raid Andalus, mainly to piss of The Brotherhood, it could have been during one of theese raids that the Prince and the Hero clashed.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)15:57 No.15094710
    Maybe the ones that accepted Slaanesh thought that is they just could defeat the Red Thirst, they would have the faith and will not to fall to Slaanesh. Some good ol' overconfidence is always a nice reason to fall.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)16:03 No.15094750
    One of the ideas that just was suggested in the Brotherhood thread was that since Andalus only became an Imperial world after the Blood Dragons conquered it there had to be a reason for the two chapters to go there.

    Basically the Blood Dragons ignored orders to attack a military target and instead opted to save the population of Andalus, a non-imperial world that was being attacked by the forces of Chaos. The Brotherhood opted to join the Blood Dragons in their attack instead of helping the AdMech search for some techno relics on some backwater world.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)16:05 No.15094766
    I like that idea. Sets up a sense of camaraderie and brotherhood, making the fall and eventual conflict more dramatic.

    Now why were they so chummy?
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)16:28 No.15094959
    Brotherhood helped the Blood Dragons pick up bitches, and in exchange they let the space moors crash at their place.

    Seriously though, perhaps they fought in a campaign together?
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)16:30 No.15094970
    rolled 5 = 5

    >perhaps they fought in a campaign together?

    It doesn't have to more than this actually.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)16:33 No.15094997
    That works. The Brotherhood was made for a crusade but we're not sure what the crusade was for. We were thinking of making it a reference to the Third Crusade, with the Imperium reclaiming some holy place from Christian-influenced-enemies.

    Maybe the Blood Dragons fought with them in that? Not sure what enemy we can use with a Christian inspiration though.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)16:36 No.15095028
    rolled 40 = 40

    I thought the Host was the Brotherhoods main source for christian villiany. The crusade could be anything.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)16:38 No.15095041
    Just say it was against Orks.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)16:38 No.15095042

    In the brotherhood thread, they're discussing the idea of having christian themed chaos.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)16:40 No.15095051
    Yeah it's the main one. But... they're an Islamic based chapter founded for a Crusade. We've got to use it. We could say they did a really good job and now the enemy is dead. Maybe some now extinct Xenos with a sort of Christian theme, just mentioned in the background.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)17:10 No.15095161
    I agree with this. Orks are savage barbarians who both groups would want to eliminate.
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/29/11(Sun)18:02 No.15095347
    BTW I'm thinking of doing a little Glistening Host writefaggotry. Gonna post it here if I do.
    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)18:33 No.15095468

    Go for it! The more delicious writefaggotry, the better!
    >> GH Writefaggotry Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)19:20 No.15095868
    It is time, Malachai thought to himself.

    The Astartes could barley hold the joyous sense of rapture he was feeling. Soon, any second now, he would stuck in the gorgeous hell that is war. And against actual, mortal humans! Untwisted, devout guardsmen with the most tender flesh and frail bodies. Nothing at all like those ugly, thick-skinned Orks which he and his brothers had been forced to fight for so long.

    Soon he would hear the horrifying cries of battle, and feel sweet, beautiful blood splash against his body. Malachai couldn’t help but lick his lips at the thought of blood gushing out of an unfortunate loyalist’s body.

    Malachai’s armour bore the standard colour of the Glistening Host. Porcelain white ceramite with a golden trim. A majestic and divine suit of mark seven Aquilla armour. Many would not believe that such a horrible being could wear such a magnificent guise. In his hands he held a custom Boltgun, unholy symbols and characters scattered along it’s sides, carved in over the years by it’s master. A mechanical device lay underslung the weapon. A sharp hook was visible sticking out from a metal tube, serpentine chains wrapped around it and attached to a mechanism. Hookshots likes these were common amongst the Astartes of the Host, often used in conjunction with bolter and occasionally melee weapons. They would be fired at range, sinking deep into an enemy so that the marine may drag his foe towards him and enjoy a display of agony and pain as he did so.

    (Will continue this)
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)19:29 No.15095954
    Very much liking it.

    Also at the Brotherhood thread we're thinking of doing a story for the hero, Jibril. It'll be about a raid on Andalus by the Daemon Prince, wrecking shit up with maybe a noble rebellion supporting him. Shit is getting wrecked, Jibril and the other marines drop down in their drop pods, battle commences and Jibril as leader of the first company finds himself facing the daemon prince. They fight, Jibril wins and banishes him demoralising the Host so they leave but at the cost of his mortal coil, he is then put into a venerable dreadnought where he becomes a fixated drugged up combat machine. More so than most. At the moment his gear is going to be an artefact silver powerfist and a chainsword, it'll be a vanguard veteran guard so he'll have a jump pack which will go nicely with the daemon prince's angelic theme. The daemon prince is a naked angel looking thing, isn't it? Any details you can give us, stuff about his portrayal? If you'd prefer this to be a small raiding party led by the daemon prince or a large scale one?
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)19:43 No.15096074
    The ceramite plates which would have covered the marine’s midsection were removed. Malachai wanted to feel the tingle of blood against his raw, open muscles. He also did not wear a helmet, wishing to truly smell and see the luscious carnage. He wanted to taste war at it’s fullest extent.

    The Astartes lifted his bolter up, nearly pressing the top of the gun against his skull. He prayed. “Prince of Excess, the Pleasure Lord Slaa-neth, may my senses be acute and may you unleash upon me wondrous feelings of bliss.”

    A sharp sound rang throughout, echoing off the metal surrounding him. Malachai grinned and euphoria dominated him. He knew what was coming next.

    Suddenly a downpour of blood and gore rained down upon the marine. Ecstasy stung Malachai’s entire body as the blood trickled down him, drips of red seeping in through his armour’s joints followed by a feeling of pure joy. Soon blood had drenched the whole suit of the Astartes, now a terrifying, soaked red devil. Malachai stood quivering, as the sensation was beyond wondrous. He had not had a bathing in over a week and the feeling was like nothing else.
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/29/11(Sun)19:44 No.15096091
    Just realized I forgot to add my tripcode/name. Removed it earlier while posting in another thread.
    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)20:07 No.15096312

    Awesome fluff, OP.


    I'm not sure, but I don't think the Daemon Prince was really fluffed out. There was a joke about him wearing armour composed out of naked people/being made out of naked people, but that's about it I think.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)20:14 No.15096377
    Maybe a sort of angel figure but HUEG and wearing a flayed skin robe? Hmmm. Might need some more demonic details, though.
    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)20:24 No.15096489

    I like that. No demonic details though. Or perhaps something that is really, really minor. Almost unnoticable. I always liked the idea of a Slanneshi daemon being perfect in everyway. So perfect that you practically fall in love with it and want it to bum you to death. But there's always that feeling in the back of your mind as you state longingly into its eyes that its wrong. Just plain wrong; like the creature shouldn't exist. Infact, the sheer wrongness is painful, mindbreakingly so. Your mind breaks, unable to cope with the idea of you loving and hating something so much. Half of you wants to marry the thing, the other half wants to rip it to pieces.
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/29/11(Sun)20:26 No.15096515

    Malachai gasped in pleasure, the sense of bliss now lessen but the tone of it still there.

    He needed more. It was a dominating sensation. He needed to spill blood, and feel it once again.

    Some of the blood had dripped down the ceramite and began gathering beneath him. Smears and stains of gore remained on sections of the armour still. Malachai lowered himself, dipping his hand it in, then bringing his bloody gauntlet back up. As the red liquid ran along his fingers he rubbed them against his armour, sanguine lines moving along as he did. On the left side of his chest he formed a mark of the Prince out of blood. The remaining ichor on the gauntlet he smeared against his face. The senses of smell and feel itched with thrill.

    Then a voice, static and fierce, sounded throughout. “It is time. For the glory of Chaos!”

    Several joined lines of light suddenly appeared before Malachai, piercing the darkness. The light grew until it filled the Astartes’ entire view. He bolted into action, running towards the radiance. The battle had begun.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)20:27 No.15096522
    Hey OP, I don't have much to add, but I think I should mention this stuff looks awesome, and I love the BG on this chapter.

    First: the shit about them being good at melee and ranged. Ignore the faggots saying that doesn't make sense. Fluff says that they drill all of their combat skills like there's no tomorrow, and their natural talent is immense, added onto their technological advantages and such.

    Also, them falling to Slaanesh whilst fighting corn makes sense, don't listen to the guys saying it's derp, because half (not literally) the imperium falls against chaos that way and.

    Oh yeah, the one thing I don't like is the warcry, it's kinda cheesy. Also, I'd go a bit further into the blood drinking/mutations thing. Maybe some more into the vampire thing? Slaanesh is vain and cultured, just like the blood angels, and vampires, I think you've got a perfect combo here, keep on trucking!
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/29/11(Sun)20:29 No.15096538
    I'm afraid I'm going to have to stop here. I've got some otehr stuff that needs doing now, although I follow up with a second part (involving the Host's battle) tomorrow most likley.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)20:32 No.15096564
    Ooh, that's good. That's very good. Uncanny valley perfect, long flowing dark hair. Perfect face, perfectly symmetrical. You ever see a symmetrical face? Shit always looks wrong when you really look at it. Androgynous, lithe but clearly toned and HUGE but still human proportioned.

    And I have an idea, add a bit of subtle diachronicness. It looks like he's wearing the robe but when you really look it becomes more and more visible that there's no body the robe is flapping against - it is his body. And if you look at it, the mouths of the corpseless skins move in a scream. And when you're near it you can hear it, a small subtle scream and wail. Despite being a small sound you can still hear it over the gun fire of a battle.

    How's that sound?
    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)20:50 No.15096719

    Yeah, like it! Slaanesh really is the best chaos god for stuff that's freaky as shit.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)20:51 No.15096727
    >Oh yeah, the one thing I don't like is the warcry, it's kinda cheesy.

    We have a warcry? Since when?
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)20:53 No.15096735
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)21:00 No.15096817
    Yeah, the only thing I'm wondering about now is it's weapon. Usually it's something like a sword but for the chapter a gun shot at short range seems like it'd be more appropriate but I can't get a mental image for one that looks right for a giant uncanny valley angel with a flayed skin robe.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)21:04 No.15096855
    I think eh should have two weapons; a Blissgiver daemon whip given to him to help his corruption spread faster and a twisted Relic Blade which he was given back when he was a loyalist chapter master.
    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)21:04 No.15096857

    Perhaps it doesn't need one? Perhaps its like those angels at the end of that one Indian Jones film (can't think of the name for the life of me) were the angels melt the nazi's faces and shit.

    ...Yeah, I've got no idea.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)21:13 No.15096930
    Thinking about I think just one sword will go better with the whole angel thing.

    It's gonna be a big ass daemon corrupted relic blade, though.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)22:05 No.15097481
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    Maybe something like this? I like the idea of him using some ridiculously huge gun with one hand.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)22:43 No.15097924
    I dunno. It doesn't quite go with the elegance.

    Although I think I can think of something: gun barrel protruding from his arms. Like a sort of baraka thing but with guns.
    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)22:46 No.15097961

    As much as I love Baraka & his waifu, I don't think that really fits either. Its hands are line the fingers from that one Stephen King short story (I think it was called "The Finger). Its fingers can grow and stretch out almost endlessly. As it stretches, more and more joints appear on the fingers, so they can travel across the battlefield, slashing people up and shit.
    >> Anonymous 05/29/11(Sun)22:50 No.15097998
    That actually sounds pretty cool. Really sharp nails obviously need to go with it, but yeah. The though of these extending fingers going in these wild directions really rapidly like tendrils is pretty damn scary.
    >> Shock 05/29/11(Sun)22:53 No.15098032

    The horrifying thing? Its a fucking finger. There isn't many places that a finger doesn't fit in. Locked yourself in a room to hide? What's that noise coming from the sink...
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)02:08 No.15099862
    Ah guys, mind if I ask a question about characterisation? I just wrote some dialogue for the traitors and then read about how they are meant to be calm and collected. The traitors I wrote are really, really fucking elated to get the chance to spill some blood. Like cackling and shit. Is that implausibile with this chapter?
    >> Ave Dominus Nox 05/30/11(Mon)02:26 No.15100003
    Completely possible for them to be all uppity and jonesin' so long as they remain articulate. They aren't "KILL MAIM BURN" Zerkers. Think more along the lines of Hannibal Lecter with a heroin addiction.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)02:29 No.15100022
    Oh, that's fine. They are cackling and moaning and stuff but they also do a nice pretty Slaanesh speech so I think I did all right. Just writing up the daemon prince encounter now, I'm really tired so I'll probably post a first draft and then maybe rework it another day.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)02:52 No.15100213
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    Actually, why not go for the amour of naked people angle? Something in the style of pic related, but made of pure white marble, would work quite well in my oppinion. The whole covered in severed human faces idea is honestly getting to be pretty boaring, seeing as how every other chaos lord is waring at least two or three.
    >> Technomancer 05/30/11(Mon)02:59 No.15100272
    Oh, hey, hai guise!

    can I have a go at your chapter master?

    I love how you take the whole "giant bishounen with perfect musculature and features sculpted in the purest marble itself by angels also bronze nipples" and then rape the shit out of it.

    so, which elements do I absolutely have to include? Because i'm half-asleep and i don't understand what you're arguing about.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)03:07 No.15100340
    As for Warcry:

    >"Your blood shall glisten upon our blades."

    It's no good IMHO. My poor, poor attempts:

    "Refining through flaying!"
    "Let zeal burst through you/your ichor!"
    "Extract gleam from their veins!"
    "Push the darkness away! Shine, dear entrails, SHINE!"

    ...ok, these look hilariously bad, but know the idea - we should aim for something insane: "Your blood shall glisten upon our blades" is something Khornate could say. Slaaneshi warriors shall be mad psychopats of the kind "we know what we are doing, but we are still predators whose only purpose is to create masterpiece mozaic from your scrotums on the walls of our basements."
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)03:17 No.15100401

    Also this guy.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)03:23 No.15100451
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    This is the Marquis de Sade, the guy our chapter master is based off of, so I'm guessing he would pretty much look like this, only except more bishounen and angelic.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)03:24 No.15100452
    Aw man, but I've already written about his flayed skin robe. A tongue even comes out of one of the mouths and ends up killing a marine!

    And I am too tired to redo it. It's nearly done. It's not very good, but it's nearly done.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)03:25 No.15100467
    Although to be fair, he's not said his name yet. He is simply referred to as a daemon prince or daemon most of the time. So maybe he could be a different one? But at least still pretty damn high up because this is the Chapter's hero?
    >> Technomancer 05/30/11(Mon)03:31 No.15100504
    The marquis wasn't really what you'd call a bishie. effeminate, yes, but not bootifool.

    I'll see what I can do, combining it all, but rather tell me about the weaponry.
    >> Technomancer 05/30/11(Mon)03:41 No.15100587
    rolling with a sword and some sort of fancy whip, since I'm not getting answers. Also wings. Marble, skin robes, naked men on a naked man.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)03:41 No.15100593
    actually that was what we were arguing about. Ideas so far were:

    >Blissgiver daemon whip + twisted Relic Blade combo
    >big ass daemon corrupted relic blade
    >huge bfg he uses with one hand
    >gun barrels protruding from his arms, Like a sort of baraka thing but with guns
    >his razor sharp fingers which can grow and stretch out almost endlessly

    Just use what ever sound best/least retarded to you. Or just make up something of your own if you fell like it.
    >> Technomancer 05/30/11(Mon)03:43 No.15100608
    awright, then the whip will be a giant tongue that comes out of his robes/legs, and he'll have some sort of weird-ass daemon weapon that looks like... dunno, but I'll try to make it look pretty.
    >> Technomancer 05/30/11(Mon)04:04 No.15100707
    Okay, I thought a bit while in the WC, and I can now almost perfectly visualize what he'd look like.

    So either I'm in a great day and I manage to draw it, in which case it takes a lot of time because I'll have to be precise

    or I'm in a bad day, and I can't manage to do it right and it also takes a crapload of time.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)04:39 No.15100975
    Okay finished my crappy story. May revise it later. Have a read, I think I made the Glistening Host a tad too cheesy.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)05:26 No.15101345
    Bumbing for sweet, sweet Technomancer drawfagotry
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)05:29 No.15101367

    Didn't read the whole thread but if no one has come up with an answer to this yet, flamers and shotguns seem to fit the bill.
    >> Technomancer 05/30/11(Mon)05:38 No.15101457
    bump with inspirational music.


    Sloooowly drawing. This should work out correctly.

    blood and marble seem fashionable, this year.
    >> Technomancer 05/30/11(Mon)05:48 No.15101548
    they're the bestest ones evar at everything evar, thats what Slaanesh is about.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)06:24 No.15101792
    rolled 99 = 99

    Their battle-cry should capture their thankfullness towards Slaanesh for allowing them to feel such joy (I can imagine some of them weeping of bliss in battle) and towards their enemy, for participading.

    I'm not saying "OH YES, THANK YOUUUU", but something along those lines. Image the horror of watching theese twisted yet beautifull angels descend upon you, ripping you appart, pouring your blood over them as they thank you for it.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)06:28 No.15101820
    rolled 54 = 54

    I like the Huge, angelic, naked but skinless Daemon Prince. He could wield some kind of hook-spear.
    Stab and drag towards you.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)06:30 No.15101839
    rolled 35 = 35

    No, that's what being a SPESS MAHREEN is all about.
    >> Technomancer 05/30/11(Mon)07:36 No.15102249
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    had to eat, and now i'm feeling sleepy. this is going to take a loong time.

    preparatory sketch.
    >> Shock 05/30/11(Mon)11:37 No.15102623
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    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)12:56 No.15102882
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    How's this? Can't be bothered to finish it off or add any great detail.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)13:05 No.15102959
    Looks pretty rad.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)13:06 No.15102974
    Personally, I love it. The hook is like a shepherd's crosier, which kind of links back to the whole angelic theme. I feel like an actual model for the daemon prince could be made with an Astaroth the Grim model and a Daemon Prince model.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)13:09 No.15102999

    >I dunno, lol
    >> Shock 05/30/11(Mon)13:31 No.15103159
    Do we have a high-quality version of the chapter symbol yet? We could do with one for the Wiki page.
    >> Ave Dominus Nox 05/30/11(Mon)14:16 No.15103490
    No but we will have the first Glistening host model soon. got bored last night and went rooting around for Slanneshii parts in my bits trays.

    Found scraped together enough stuff for a model, Dual wieldin pistols, haven't really decided on a head yet though.
    I have one of the old possessed head on it right now. The blindfolded one with its mouth stitched shut. But im really not sold on it.
    Ive also got one of the other possessed heads that looks less over the top, slightly warped face with a huge tongue whipping out. or I could go with the newer slanneshii champion head that comes from the 10man box, the one with the one side of the head all horned up.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)15:08 No.15104003
    Hmm... none of those really fit the whole "debase noblity" thing the Glistening Host seem to have adopted. Maybe a helmetless normal marine head? It would contrast well with the mutated armor.
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/30/11(Mon)15:38 No.15104309
    I'm back. Going to continue with my writefaggotry soon.

    Also, FUCK YEAH Technomancer doing Glistening Host drawings!
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)17:12 No.15105288
    One thing that I dont follow is; the Flayed Dancers actually flay of their own skin and wear it as robes while the other marines have skin that appears as if they were skinless?
    >> Ave Dominus Nox 05/30/11(Mon)17:14 No.15105313
    The skinless thing isnt the norm. And the skin conditions vary. skinless is just easy to convey so it gets used for drawings allot.
    >> Shock 05/30/11(Mon)17:15 No.15105321

    Only the Flayed Dancers have no skin (they were it for fashion purposes). The rest of the chapter have your standard space marine skin, but due mutation/genetic engineering (I can't remember), which allows their naked skin to get huge amounts of pleasure from feeling blood on it.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)17:21 No.15105388
    If the Blood Angels are their progenitor chapter, I'd advise basing these guys' fluff on a non-Slavic vampire myth, preferably an Arabic or East Asian variant.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)17:23 No.15105409
    That might work quite well seeing as they've ties to the Brotherhood of the Gauntlet, a loyalist chapter based on feudal Islam especially the Moors/ Iberian period.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)17:24 No.15105421
    We are going more for the Angel angle than then vampire one
    >> Ave Dominus Nox 05/30/11(Mon)17:29 No.15105506
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    though i will say some cultures has some fucked up vampire lore.

    "The Hantu Langsuir, from Malaysian lore, is one of the most feared and deadliest of all banshees of Malaysia. It was believed that woman who died giving birth to their child, who also dies, will become a Hantu Langsuir after 40 days. She is described as being hideous with red piercing eyes, sharp claws, very long hair, a decayed face, and huge fangs. She is able to fly and is most often seen wearing a green or white robe. The hantu langsuir could also shape-shift into an owl. She is also vengeful and furious and will go after newborns and pregnant women, drinking their blood, milk, and organs from the inside out causing a very slow death. It was believed that the hantu langsuir has a hole on the back of her neck used to suck blood. Filling the hole with her hair or cutting her claws will make her human again. To prevent women from turning into a hantu langsuir many glass beads must be placed in the woman’s mouth. The still-born children of the hantu langsuir are called Pontianak."
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)17:34 No.15105549
    May I suggest that we change The Glistering Host to being a fleet-based warband? It just feels more suiting.
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/30/11(Mon)17:48 No.15105674

    There was no better word with which Malachai could think to describe what he felt as he stepped out into the battlefield.

    It was a canvas of terrible beauty. Dirt brown coated the warzone, with specks blood red and steel throughout. Shells and explosives came flying down in splashes of black and orange. The symphony had been assembled; screams of horror and pain, the sound of gunshots, the grind of gears and the boom of detonations chimed as the musicians played their notes.

    Malachai sniffed the air. It smelt of war’s most beautiful flowers; blood, sweat and smoke. The Astartes was beyond pleased as he took in the wonderful clash before him. He remembered, however, that he needed to contribute to glorious piece as well.

    Like any good artist he analyzed the work before him then readied his tool. The marine lunged forward, his boltgun loaded and prepared to fire. As he advanced, the shady blobs of three guardsman came into view. Malachai held his easel at him and made three dabs with it, leaving behind a red stain with each movement.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)18:00 No.15105759
    Every single one of these chapters has these two traits. Getting really fucking tired of it.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)18:03 No.15105777
    I know right? It's like some people are unable to comprehend supersoldiers who go through decades of brutal training being unable to shoot stuff as well as they stab shit...
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)18:05 No.15105794
    That is the will of the dice gods. It makes sence with theese guys though.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)18:12 No.15105850
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)18:34 No.15106077
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    Could use this guy's head from the Warriors of Chaos. Shave off the horns (or keep them) and flay his face up a bit, could work!
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/30/11(Mon)19:23 No.15106633
    Sorry I'm taking so long. I am a lazy fucking writefag.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)19:27 No.15106663
    Oh hey guys, I was wondering if I could get some tips. I did some bad writefagging for the Brotherhood here >>15100818 and the major problem with it is how the Host is portrayed. I kind of made them too blandly evil and was wondering if I could get some suggestions from you guys for when I revise the story as it really needs a good going over.
    >> Ave Dominus Nox 05/30/11(Mon)19:31 No.15106723
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    This is the model as it stands right now (In my seconds old handmade light box!!!).

    still gotta prep it and base coat it, but I figure I don't care a while hell of a lot about getting the head perfect this is just a Joe Blow infantry kinda guy no one special.

    >Captcha: THC hantivis
    Oh shit captcha! you wanna party? Slannesh would be pleased.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)19:40 No.15106785
    >- Marines are obsessed with getting close to their foes
    >- Marines are skilled with ranged weapons
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)19:47 No.15106845
    >> Shock 05/30/11(Mon)19:49 No.15106856

    >> Ave Dominus Nox 05/30/11(Mon)19:51 No.15106876
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    so are we just going to start treating this as an inside joke lol.
    >> Shock 05/30/11(Mon)19:54 No.15106912

    I've gone from understanding their complaint, to being angry at the complaint, to not really giving a shit about it anymore.
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/30/11(Mon)19:56 No.15106937
    I must get closer, Malachai thought to himself. He needed to see the results of his actions up close, to see the bloody destruction of a man’s body and smell the ichor as it spilled out.

    The marine quickened his advance. He kept firing at guardsmen whenever the popped into his sights. One, two, three, four loyalist’s skull turned to splatter. Six, seven and eight were hit in the legs or had their arms ripped off by bolter rounds. Malachai didn’t wish to kill them all, enjoying their ravishing mortal screams as pain seized them and they realized their part was done. The marines of the Glistening Host were skilled marksman and so his shots were able to hit their marks with remarkable precision.

    Malachai looked to his sides. His fellow angels were charging into the fray with him, their shining armour saturate in blood which gleamed in the sunlight. Every one of his brothers was smiling, just as glad to be adding their own red tints to the canvas. Far off he could see the most blessed and favoured skin-clad warriors of the Flayed Dancers.

    These were Astartes afflicted with the Black Rage and Red Thirst. In other the chapters of other Blood Angels these warriors would be treated like savages, animals. Their minds twisted and driven by blind rage. But Slaanesh had smiled upon the Host’s marines and turned their curse into a blessing. The Flayed Dancers were the elite of the Host, ones who could feel the greatest ecstasies of battle, their battle rage transformed into lust. Malachai watched the chosen Astartes with envy as they charged towards the gunners of an unfortunate artillery piece, flailing their chains and blades wildly with joy.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)20:03 No.15107014
    I know this doesn't work very well with your simile, but a gun pressed up against someone's head ceases to be a ranged weapon.
    >> Ave Dominus Nox 05/30/11(Mon)20:04 No.15107019
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    This is a saiga 12 shotgun modified into a semiauto shotgun pistol that looks questionably like a boltgun. Yes its real. Yes its made by a crazy 3rd world country.

    This Ranged weapon + Close combat. Get the drift.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)20:05 No.15107026
    A chapter with skilled shooters who have a mental flaw makes them want to get closer to their foes? How absurd!

    What's next, a stealth chapter of marines that take pride in their colours and are asleep half the time?
    >> Shock 05/30/11(Mon)20:08 No.15107058

    Either way, they both have their reasons. The Emperor's Nightmare only have half of their companies use the PRIDE IN OUR COLOURS RAWGH armour, while the Glistening Host like to restrain themselves from entering close combat, so that when they finally can't control themselves anymore they get a bigger buzz from the whole experience.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)21:54 No.15108082
    >> OP !vv/Nr3MYLo 05/30/11(Mon)21:55 No.15108093
    The clip of Malachai’s weapon was dry. He reached to his palette to grab another, but as he did a guardsman came into a view, standing a few meters away. The mortal had been unaware of Malachai’s presence, and once he had descried the presence bloody demigod he was frozen in place, a look of horror upon his face as his eyes widen and his mouth gapped.

    The Astartes comprehend the guardsman’s terror and grinned maliciously at him. Sweat drenched the poor loyalist as he stood paralyzed in awe. Malachai opened his mouth and a slick tongue slipped out.

    “Well don’t you look delicious…”

    Malachai slammed a clip into his boltgun and took aim. The guardsman’s instincts kicked into and he bound into action, brining up his lasgun to bear. The Astartes fired off a single bolt which he aimed at the mortal’s weapon. The shot hit the front of the lasgun, exploding on impact. The gun’s barrel was destroyed and shards of metal flew out, slashing it’s bearer and mutilating his arm.

    (And that's I've gotten done for now. Will finish tomorrow most likley.)
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)22:00 No.15108150
    Guys, they're good at shooting shit, but they LIKE getting up close and stabbing the enemy. Why the fuck is that so hard to understand.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)22:01 No.15108166
    people are fucking stupid
    >> Ave Dominus Nox 05/30/11(Mon)22:30 No.15108537
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    So bump with progress. I got the base stuff in and the spatter. I just gotta clean it up and detail it a bit. then base it. I'm no golden demon, and the fact that I hate white as a base dosen't help. But as far as table top quality goes I think its gonna turn out ok.
    >> Anonymous 05/30/11(Mon)22:33 No.15108579
    Blood Angel heads would work fine, if painted right.
    >> Anonymous 05/31/11(Tue)02:51 No.15111024
    >> Anonymous 05/31/11(Tue)04:46 No.15111830
    bumping for sadomasochist marines
    >> Shock 05/31/11(Tue)05:25 No.15112017

    Looks jawsome. Only problem is the head (which doesn't really fit the chapter, I've gotta say), but it doesn't ruin the look of the model, so hey, jobz a guddun.
    >> Technomancer 05/31/11(Tue)06:08 No.15112239
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    sllllooooow progress, just so you know I'm still working.

    naked boys on a naked dude.
    >> The God-Emperor of Mankind 05/31/11(Tue)06:12 No.15112254
    I am loving these new chapters sprouting like mushrooms, although most of them are generic, least this one is Chaos.


    The guy I sent you last night, hes got Steam. I've posted his ID on your thread.

    Its the only way to reach him atm.
    >> Anonymous 05/31/11(Tue)07:00 No.15112411
    Yeah, this is an actualy trend I enjoy. The Glistering Host and The Brotherhood of the Gauntler are promising chapters.

    Might be going slow but looking good! Is this the Daemon Prince?

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