Hopefully reaching Honnouji today edition.Past threads: http://pastebin.com/uMT2kb5q
>>31204353Red five, standing by.
>>31204353It's time.
It is time!
Following the visit in Honnouji Academy, you head right to bed upon return. While still distracted with what you've seen today, you close your eyes, and try to sleep. Suddenly, you can feel something moving under your bed's covers.What emerges from them is a stark-naked Satsuki. You jump in surprise, and try to stand up, but she quickly pins you down. Her face comes dangerously close to yours, all of her body pressing against you."Satsuki, what are you-"She puts a finger on your lips. Her mouth starts moving, as if she's saying something, but it's so quiet you can't hear it."A b-bit louder, please? I c-can't hear you.", you stammer, still shocked by the situation.She brings her mouth to your left ear, almost touching it. You can feel the air vibrations on your skin as she utters the words."Let me touch your pompadour."
>>31204463
>>31204463Thread starts with votefag drunk. Great.
>>31204463Are we starting the "Nightmares" arc already?WAKE UP
>>31204463HmmmmmmmmmmSomething feels off...
>>31204547http://youtu.be/1hLXY1DUEIA
1st april up in this
so, assuming that monkey does join us at some point, what position in the student council would ryuko take? i'm sure we'd get to decide it; it's just i can't think of any 3-Star tier positions that aren't already taken by the other devas
>>31204653Vice president?
>>31204463op, what the literal fuck are you doing
>>31204463"NOOOOOOOOOOO!"You wake up screaming. You just had a really weird dream, but it's already escaping your memory. Guess that's how things are. Satsuki and Nonon, already awake, hear your scream and peek into the room."Is something the matter?"You look at Satsuki and shudder, still remembering part of it."Uh, nevermind. It was just a dream."Your graduation from middle school draws near. One day, Satsuki calls you, Nonon and Inumuta for a meeting."Before we leave for Honnouji Academy, there is yet one more candidate for us to recruit.""And who's that?""His name is Sanageyama Uzu. He is the creator and leader of the North Kanto Gang Alliance. It is an alliance formed between various groups of delinquents all over North Kanto. He single-handedly unified it, and is still expanding his reach. We're going to issue a challenge to him."A delinquent leader, huh? He must be pretty good if he's managed to unify such a chaotic group.Shortly afterwards, Satsuki issues a challenge to the North Kanto Gang Alliance, representing the students of Rinne-dou. They reply quickly, with a meeting spot specified.
>>31204463>>31204704well played OP......well played
>>31204704You meet Sanageyama in an open field. The five of you against him and roughly five hundred of his troops."I'm Sanageyama Uzu, North Kanto Gang Alliance representative! You've got guts, picking a fight with me, Kiryuuin!"Satsuki stands at the front, her arms resting on Bakuzan."I have no intention of fighting you. I expect you to surrender."This angers the delinquents, who charge in your direction. "Who the hell do you think you're messing with?!"Satsuki closes her eyes, and focuses. Then, with a shout, she opens them, and a powerful shockwave sweeps away all of the attackers. Ki attacks are easily the coolest thing the two of you have learned recently."You stopped them with just your spirit, huh? But that won't work on me!"Sanageyama's resistance to the attack is certainly impressive, and your interest in the his skills grows.[ ] Observe[ ] Ask Satsuki if you can take him on
>>31204902>[ ] ObserveGirl needs to take him on and earn his respect
>>31204902>[X]Ask Satsuki if you can take him onThis is gonna be interesting. No Heaven's Eye, No uniforms, just skill.
>>31204704"I dreamed that you wanted to touch my pompadour."Satsuki just looks at you cunfused for a second before speaking. "Ryuuko, you don't HAVE a pompadour."You put a hand on top of your bangs and a single tear runs down your face. "N-no I don't suppose I do."Nonon is standing their looking away with a blush running across her face muttering something. You can almost make out the words. Something about Pomp-kun?
>>31204902>[ ] Observe
>>31204902Ask Satsuki if you can take him on; we need to start a rivalry with him somehow.
>>31204902>[x] Ask Satsuki if you can take him onHave him begging for rematches that he will never get.
God damnit you guys. I'm looking for an excuse not to just recite the flashback word by word, and you're avoiding it
>>31204902>[x] Ask Satsuki if you can take him onSpank the monkey.
>>31204902[x] Ask Satsuki if you can take him on.We're Satsuki's sword, right? If he can't beat us he can't fight her.
>>31204934>>31204957>>31204965>>31204982>>31204995Oh, good.
>>31204902Sanageyama charges at Satsuki, but you step in between them."Not so fast. Satsuki, may I? This seems like it could be interesting.""Do as you wish."Sanageyama, however, is not amused."Out of the way! I'm not interesting in fighting Kiryuuin's goons." The guy's sure full of himself."If you can't beat me, then you can't hope to match her. I'm her sparring partner, you know?"Seems that got through to him."Okay then. I'll dispose of you, and then go after her!" Still not letting up on the attitude, though.[ ] Hold back, test his skills[ ] Go all out
>>31205127>not interestingnot interested*
>>31205127>[ ] Go all outSMASH MONKEYSMAAAAAAASH MONKEY
>>31205127>Hold back, test his skillsThe most important things to do right now are conserving our energy early on, and evaluating his skills; holding back temporarily will allow us to do both.
>>31205127[x] Go all outTime to diminish the electric shamisen.
>>31205127>[ ] Hold back, test his skills
>>31205127>[x]Hold back, test his skillsWe're not supposed to take every ounce of his dignity, we're testing him.He'll job to a condom anyway, so his fate is sealed.
>>31205127>[x] Go all outMake Aniki proud.
>>31205127>[x] Hold back, test his skillsThis is basically a job interview (pun unintended), so let him demonstrate.
>>31205127> [x] Hold back, test his skills
>>31205246>job interview (pun unintended)God damnit.
>>31205127[x]Hold back, test his skillsWe can always go psycho Ryuko when he start taunting us.
>>31205165>>31205188>>31205191>>31205246>>31205256
>>31205268>This timeline's Ryuko isn't hotblooded but turn psycho if you insult her or taunt herI wouldn't mind this. At all.
>>31205340RESOLVE is simply a colder, more disciplined form of hot-bloodedness.
>>31205127This guy is a potential ally, so just beating him outright wouldn't make sense. You gotta go easy on him a bit, and see what he can do.You throw Jiyuuzan over your shoulder."Then, show me a good time, Sanageyama!"He charges at you, and starts taking rapid strikes at you with his shinai, all of which you block."MEN! DOU! KOTE! MEN! DOU! KOTE!""Doesn't that remind you of something, Satsuki?", you call out. You think back to your fight in elementary school, the one when it all began.Sanageyama notices his flurry is uneffective, and jumps back."Heh, you're better than I thought. But, how about this!" He jumps in the air, preparing an overhead strike, pathetically easy to dodge. You step aside a bit, and take a swing of your own at him."I can see through all of your moves!", he says.Your attack misses. Sanageyama lands behind you, and thrusts his bamboo sword forward, aiming at your head."You're mine!"However, he's a little bit too slow."Oh, really?"You thrust Jiyuuzan backwards, and it hits Sanageyama square in the solar plexus. He drops to his knees, and the shinai falls out of his hands.His fighting skill is a lot like what yours would probably be, had you not met Satsuki. You can tell he's got the talent, but he needs more proper training.You look at Satsuki, who seems to be expecting an evaluation from you.[ ] He's not bad, but needs training[ ] What a loser
>>31205674>[x] He's not bad, but needs training
>>31205674>[ ] He's not bad, but needs trainingNow no monkey business
>>31205674>[ ] He's not bad, but needs training
>>31205674>[ ] What a jobber
>>31205674[X]He's not bad, but needs training
>>31205674>[x] He's not bad, but needs trainingTime to train our monkey.
>>31205712>>31205729>>31205733>>31205743>>31205780Gonna brb in a couple minutes
>>31205674>He's not badAlso, >Show me a good time SanageyamaCOUGHJACKCOUGH
>>31205860Seconding this
>>31204463NOOOOOO!
>>31205674>you throw jiyuuzan over your shoulder>you thrust jiyuuzan backwardsdid we toss it or did we keep it?
>>31206016Throw over your shoulder as in use the shoulder as support for it
>>31206035ah, my bad.
>>31204939
>>31205674You rub your chin, thinking for a bit. Sanageyama is still kneeling, dumbstruck by his defeat."Hmm. He has the potential, but lacks training.", you say, after a while.Satsuki nods, and steps towards Sanageyama."Sanageyama, come. I'll provide you with the ultimate stage where you can unleash your full strength - the stage called Honnouji Academy."He appears to be still confused by what's going on, and looks at you."If you're her sparring partner, then she's-""Even better, yes.", you finish for him. You chuckle. "Well, just a little bit.""Then I accept."Satsuki hands him an enrollment permit, and instructs him to show up there during spring break, before the school year begins.You return to Rinne-dou, only a couple weeks remaining until graduation. You spend most of that time in anticipation.On the first day of spring break, Satsuki, Nonon, and you pack up all of your things, and head towards the chopper which came to pick you up. Another home left behind."So, what are we going to do in Honnouji during spring break?", you ask Satsuki on the way there."Settle in, and prepare the school to welcome its first students. Also, before all that, you will need to pass a certain test.""A test? What, like, an exam?""Not exactly, no. It will be an experiment to check your Life Fiber resistance, all five of you."
>>31205674>show me a good time, Sanageyama!"
>>31206261I'm feeling like this won't ends too well.
>>31206261>"Not exactly, no. It will be an experiment to check your Life Fiber resistance, all five of you."
>>31206320>*blumenkranz intensifies*
>>31206261>You rub your chin, thinking for a bit.
>>31206381Hey now, chin-rubbing isn't exclusive to Sam.
>>31206394I know, but you already did>SHOW ME A GOOD TIME JACKcouldn't miss an opportunity to post a sam pic
>>31206261Satsuki explains further. "While the initial designs for Goku Uniforms are finished, we still need to determine the upper limit of Life Fiber percentage in them. This test will determine that limit."You arrive at Honnouji, and meet up with the others. Satsuki then leads all of you to the Sewing Club laboratory, where Iori is to conduct the test."So, all of you are the soon-to-be Student Council members? Then we can commence the experiment."Inumuta steps forward. "How will this experiment look, exactly?"Iori walks over to a large wardrobe nearby, and opens it, revealing multiple school uniforms, with varying amounts of stars in their design."Each one of you will try on those uniforms, starting with One-Star, which contains the lowest concentration of Life Fibers, 10%. While you're wearing them, we will monitor your vital signs, and determine what Life Fiber concentration we should stop at. Normally, humans can take up to around 15% before they start experiencing negative effects. However, seeing as all of you were hand-picked by Lady Satsuki, I expect more from you."
>>31206509>no one will be able to get past 30/40%>except Ryukooh no
>>31204704http://vocaroo.com/i/s06CDEv09hpn
>>31206533Too close for comfort.
>>31206509>We easily pass all LF % tests>Satsuki dons Junketsu out of jelly>Or wait>We don Junketsu
>>31206533You're back!
>>31206570>we don junketsumy brain says no, but my dick says yes
>>31206570It's so wrong but it feels so right.
>>31206523>Test determines that we could stand 100%>iori thinks that there must have been a mistake and apologizes saying he will fix the equipment
>>31206523>he didn't even bother making one higher than 40%>has to stitch them together into a ghetto kamui to continueAlso, shouldn't Iori be taking the test too?
>>31206604>>31206651Let it flow through you>tfw i've been writing a lewd about for /c/ about Junketsu Ryuko while monitoring this thread
>>31206604MY MINDS TELLING ME KNOW, BUT MY BODY!!!! MY BODY...IS ALSO TELLING ME NO!!!
>>31206689Drop a pastebin laterPlease ;_;
>>31206689Or so you're that write-fag>mfw you're writing that
>>31206747Oh so you're*fuck my inability to double check what I write
>>31206573http://vocaroo.com/i/s1oSN3uO1Wr8
>>31206509"Well then, who's first?""I'll do it.", says Gamagoori. He takes the One-Star uniform from the wardrobe, and heads to the monitoring chamber.The rest of you stand next to Iori, who's checking the readings on the computer connected to the chamber."Alright, put it on." Gamagoori has already stripped to his underpants beforehand. He quickly puts on the uniform."Hmm, activation of Life Fibers confirmed, vital signs normal. Okay, now try the Two-Star!"The same results repeat for the Two- and Three-Star uniforms."No negative effects at 30%, huh? Impressive. Alright, that will probably be the upper limit, but your readings look good, so let's try the Four-Star!"Gamagoori grabs the uniform with four stars sewn on the chest area, and starts putting it on. As soon as he's finished, however, he starts trembling and sweating.Iori looks at the readings. "As expected, pulse and respiration spiked. It would be dangerous for him to wear it for prolonged periods of time. Okay, that's enough, you can take it off now!"Sanageyama, Nonon, and Inumuta get tested after Gamagoori, with similar results. It's finally your turn."Alright, I don't expect much different results after the other four, but the test would be incomplete if I just stopped it here. Go on in."
>>31206789>came in her to check on my imouto>because he's dead, anaru can see into every universe ryuko inhabitsoh man, that's intense
>>31206789I can accept this. Have a nice picture in return
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>>31206840Mother of god...
>>31206840HE HAS ASCENDED TO POMPAGOD!?
>>31206914Perhaps
>>31206779Don't worry, i've typed with one hand down there before.
>>31206261>he has potential, but lacks trainingIt's not training that he lacks.It's brutality.
>>31206914>POMPAGODHis pompadour shields and protects all those who cannot protect themselves
>>31206944"....wha...?"
>>31206836You step into the monitoring chamber, and start trying on the uniforms. The Life Fiber-imbued clothes fill you with a familiar feeling, just like the shirt your father made for you all those years ago. Was it outfitted with Life Fibers as well?"The Four-Star now, then. Let's see how it goes this time.", Iori says over the intercom.You grab the uniform, and start putting it on. This will likely be unpleasant. However, you don't feel any different."Vital signs... normal? Well, that's unexpected. Okay, let's keep going, I guess."And so, you continue to put on the uniforms, as the expressions of the people gathered outside gradually change from interest to complete disbelief."Nine stars... vital signs... normal... How?", Iori mutters."So, where's the Ten-Star? I'd like to give that a shot, too.""There's... no Ten-Star. Clothing made in 100% out of Life Fibers is extremely difficult to create, and there's probably nobody in the world who could wear it, anyway... ...or so I used to think. I don't know why, but your degree of resistance to Life Fibers is downright inhuman. Or maybe the equipment broke?"Satsuki is standing in the back, her expression unreadable. After you leave the chamber, she approaches Iori."I'll take the test, as well. Give me the Nine-Star uniform."
>>31207171Satsuki a rip.
>>31207171oh fuck. This is gonna be fun
>>31207171Let's see where this goes.
>>31207171>"Nine stars... vital signs... normal... How?", Iori mutters.>"I'll take the test, as well. Give me the Nine-Star uniform."Aren't we trying the 9 star on by the first sentence?
>>31207236Read again.
>>31207171
>>31207171"That's crazy, Lady Satsuki! I don't know why Matoi managed to pull it off, but you shouldn't put yourself in such risk!""If she can do it, so can I, Iori. Besides, I need to know if I'm ready for Junketsu."You watch the scene in confusion. What's Junketsu? Still, it seems your test results hurt Satsuki's pride. Should she really do this just because of that, though?[ ] Try to convince her not to do it[ ] Observe
>>31207335[x] Observethis is future I chose
>>31207335>[x] Try to convince her not to do itThought it would be a number of weeks before I got to use this.
>>31207335>[ ] Try to convince her not to do itWe Junketsu now
>>31207335>[ ] Observe
>>31207335>[x] ObserveIf she can put on Junketsu in the series, she can put on the nine-star.
>>31207335>[x]observe
>>31207335>[ ] ObserveHer RESOLVE will pull her through!
>>31207364>>31207383>>31207389>>31207390>>31207393
>>31207372God damn it
>>31206718>>31206747http://pastebin.com/1nmQSghi
>>31207408Forgot my pic.
>>31207436no....NO!! FUCK YOUR SKELETONS!! Can't go through that torture again!
And so Satsuki dies, and we take her place as Junketsu's wearer.
>>31207408>>31207436>>31207497YOU BASTARDS
>>31207426YES
>>31207497>>31207436>>31207408NO
>>31207543>>31207576Even better, we end up meeting Ragyo and Nui.
>>31207576Anon, in the words of a wise man:"Sometimes, for the dream to live…the dreamer must die."
>>31207335You know how prideful Kiryuuin Satsuki is, so you decide not to interfere. Iori eventually gives up.He sighs heavily. "Very well. Please proceed into the monitoring chamber."Satsuki steps inside, and takes off her normal uniform. She then starts putting the Nine-Star on. Once she's finished, she stands up straight and asks Iori."Well, how are the readings?""Hmm, it appears that your vital signs are normal, however-"However.However, it didn't go so well. As Iori relays the results to Satsuki, suddenly the uniform starts emitting sparkles, characteristic to Life Fibers. Except, those aren't white, as usual. They are blue.The observation chamber is filled with blue light, and Iori's monitoring devices explode. Then, through the thick glass, you hear Satsuki's screams. Screams of pain.You don't know what happened, but you know one thing. You need to act fast.[ ] Go in there and save her[ ] Call for help
>>31207628> [x] Go in there and save her
>>31207628>[x] Go in there and save herACT NOW, THINK LATER
>>31207628[X] Go in there and save herWhat good would calling for help do?
>>31207628>[ ] Go in there and save her>[ ] Call for help
>>31207628>[ ] Go in there and save her
>>31207628>[X] Go in there and save her
>>31207628>[x] Go in there and save herwhile>[x] Calling for help
>>31207628>[x] Go in there and save her
>>31207628>[x] Go in there and save herWho else could even help, Nui?
>>31207646>>31207648>>31207650>>31207660>>31207664Skeleton count reduced
>Satsuki turns into life fibers>Ryuko wears her as a new kamui>Junketsu speaks with Satsuki's voice
>>31207628GO IN THERE AND SAVE HER FOR FUCK'S SAKE
>>31207594NO, FUCK THAT SHITHOW CAN YOU EVEN THINK THAT SIDING WITH RAGYO IS A GOOD IDEA IN ANY UNIVERSE
>>31207781HE SAID MEETNOT JOINMEETcome on dogcalm your tits
>>31207628
>>31207628There's no time to think. You call out to Iori and others."Go call for medical help, or something! I'll go in and get her out of there!""Are you out of your mind, Matoi? The Life Fiber energies being released there will tear you apart! We need to-"You cut Iori off, not to waste any more time. "You said I've got high Life Fiber resistance, right? Then I'll be fine."You step inside the monitoring chamber, and the airlock closes behind you. It's like a tornado in there, with Satsuki in the eye of the storm. She's floating above the ground, blue sparkles constantly emitting from her body. You notice that she's naked. Where did the uniform go?Without thinking any more, you jump at Satsuki, and grab her. In that moment, all of the blue light around you turns red for a moment, before disappearing."Satsuki?! Wake up, Satsuki!"She opens her eyes, looking very weak. "Ryuuko...? I'm sorry... this was foolish of me..." With that, she passes out.You keep trying to shake her awake, and then the paramedics summoned by Iori arrive. They check Satsuki's vitals, and take her away."What the hell happened?! She'll be fine, right?" You start barraging Iori with questions.
>>31207781>not wanting to join Ragyo>not wanting hot incestuous threesomes while the world explodes>not wanting the world to end and live on as an eldritch abomination>not wanting to evolve over time and become the spiral nemesis>even speedwagon is afraidThe plebest of plebs.
>>31208033Nui, get off of /tg/.Don't you have drills to regrow?
>>31208033How many Helicopters you own, bitch?
>>31207965"Calm down. As you could see yourself, she's alive, likely thanks to you.""Thanks to me? I just grabbed her, and the light disappeared.""That's what you did, yes. And I have no idea how did you manage to do survive it. The amount of energy there was enough to destroy the monitoring equipment, so I would assume any normal human would instantly die upon entering the chamber. However, you went in there, and stopped it all, while sustaining no apparent damage. It's one mind-boggling thing after another with you today.""So, what about Satsuki? What happened to her?""It seems that the uniform's Life Fibers reacted to her negatively, for reasons I'm not entirely sure of. The paramedics told me she's mostly fine, but she's experienced great physical pain, and will need some time to recover. I will need to see if the ordeal didn't have any negative effects on her later."You leave the laboratory, and find yourself in the main building. You don't know what to do next. Everyone else disappeared after you told them to bring help.[ ] Try to find Satsuki[ ] Track down the other four[ ] Wander aimlessly
>>31208033>not wanting to join Ragyosounds like shit>not wanting hot incestuous threesomes while the world explodeswhat is this the lower half of the U.S.?>not wanting the world to end and live on as an eldritch abominationI'd rather become an eldritch abomination>not wanting to evolve over time and become the spiral nemesissounds cool>even speedwagon is afraidmy nigga
>>31208118>Track down the other fourthen>Find Satsuki
>>31208118>[ ] Track down the other fourTime for elite four interaction
>>31208118>[x] Try to find SatsukiAs much as I want to interact with the devas that is not the way of RESOLVE Ryuuko.
>>31208118[x] Track down the other fournonon is going to fucking freak if we don't tell her Satsuki's okay
>>31208118>[x] Track down the other four
>>31208118>[ ] Try to find Satsuki
>>31208118>[X] Try to find SatsukiThe less skeletons, the better.
>>31208118> [x] Track down the other four
>>31208118[ ] Try to find SatsukiWe best imouto even if we don't know it yet.
>>31208118>Track down the other four
>>31208118>[X] Track down the other four
>>31208145>>31208156>>31208157>>31208168>>31208173
Rolled 78>>31208118[x] Track down the other four
>>31207426this was a good readthank you writefag
>>31207426Is it bad that I recognize that doujin?>even speedwagon is afraidCaptcha thinks so
>>31208118Satsuki is probably still receiving medical attention, so you decide not to bother her for now. However, you need a word with Nonon, Inumuta, Gamagoori, and Sanageyama. What's with them just vanishing like that?You go back to the main elevator, which you used to go to the laboratory and back up. You notice that the light next to the topmost floor button is now on, as opposed to during your previous visit. You recall Satsuki mentioning that the tower is supposed to house Student Council chambers. Maybe they went there?You press the button. The elevator ride takes about as long as the one to the lab. You step out, and enter the Student Council chambers for the first time. Your earlier comment about the tower being lofty applies to the interior as well. In what looks like the main room, you find the other four. They all turn to you."Matoi!"The sight irritates you. "What are you guys doing, just sitting here? Satsuki was in serious danger, you know!"Inumuta replies first. "We know, but Iori told us to go here and wait after you entered the chamber.""He said somebody would come to tell us what happened, but it's been almost an hour, and nobody did!", Gamagoori adds, clearly angry."So tell us, Ryuuko! What happened? Is Satsuki-chan okay?" It seems Nonon has been crying, as her eyes are red.
>>31208412Hug Nonon and pet her. You know you want to.
>>31208450Pet her Pompadour
>>31207426/r/ sauce on that image. Reverse image search doesn't work well with cropped images.
>>31208478NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!
>>31208450>>31208450>ryuko pull nonon into a tight hug>shhhhh.. it's going to be alright>hey, nonon?>wh-what?>let me touch your stuffed animals
>>31208504YYYYYEEEEESSSSS!!! NOW THE TABLE'S HAVE TURNED! NO NANI SORE WILL SAVE YOU NOW!!
>>31208492http://g.e-hentai.org/g/658553/3f5516e1b5/Happy fapping.
>>31208542Much obliged sir.
>>31208542excuse me sir this is a christian image board
>>31208412You relay to them the events: what happened after you entered the monitoring chamber, and what Iori told you later."So, you saved Lady Satsuki, Matoi?", Sanageyama is trying to make sense out of what you said."It seems like it."The three guys look at you with respect, and Nonon hugs you, sobbing."She's my friend too, you know. I couldn't just stand by and watch.", you tell her.Inumuta adjusts his glasses. "Still, Matoi. I've only just started my research on Life Fibers, but from what I understand, there's no way you could've survived this. The resistance you've shown to uniforms earlier, was inhuman, as well. And yet, you're standing here, perfectly alive and unharmed. Just... how?"You shrug. "No clue. But it helped me save Satsuki, and that's what matters."
>>31208556
Well, I've reached my objective from the thread's OP, but I think that will be it for today. I hope you liked it.
>>31208639Nice job OP 'twas awesome
>>31208639Dammit, OP, this thread is/was the only thing keeping me from shitposting on /vg/. Now I have to go complain about tonks and office furniture.
>>31208703I know this may be a foreign concept, but have you tried not shitposting?
Submitted to archive, it's at the top.http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive.htmlGonna update the pastebin, as well.
>>31208735But... but German bias! Wasted money!I was using "shitposting" in the joking sense, because, as we all know, any posting of any kind ever on /vg/ is always shitposting. No exceptions. Except for Stalker General.
And of course, expect me around the same time tomorrow. Gonna stick around for a bit, and answer any questions or opinions regarding the quest so far.
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1bT0nQdkpBZ
>>31208779Liking this, OP. You're starting to diverge from the canon, and that's good.However, don't play the Observed routes as "just-as-default". One of the quest-giving rules I remember was 'alawys make each option interesting.' If Ryuko chooses to observe, then maybe Satsuki DOENS'T win the match, or it comes closer, or we recognize something wrong in her matchup which could have turned it around if she wasn't able to succeed. Make things like some sort of vulnerability or risk happen, to keep things exciting.Also: how do you intend to keep Ryuko from being OP? We-as-folks-who-know-the-series know Ryuko can survive BS levels of Life Fibers, but it'd be boring if she's just invulnerable. Can she be a little neurotic about some things? Nervous about being able to soak Life Fibers like nothing for reasons she can't understand? Perhaps afraid of Satsuki being more vulnerable than she lets on? Jealousy between Nonon and her and Satsuki? Remember, even an OP character like Superman can be interesting in the hands of a good writer who can characterize weaknesses of character as well as weakesses in battle.You've got some good stuff, OP - keep it up!
>>31209024>Also: how do you intend to keep Ryuko from being OP? We-as-folks-who-know-the-series know Ryuko can survive BS levels of Life Fibers, but it'd be boring if she's just invulnerable. Can she be a little neurotic about some things? Nervous about being able to soak Life Fibers like nothing for reasons she can't understand? Perhaps afraid of Satsuki being more vulnerable than she lets on? Jealousy between Nonon and her and Satsuki? I'm about to get to that part in the next thread, actually.I'm not sure if it was you who has made those lengthy posts in the previous threads, but thank you. I'm trying to learn from that advice, and I hope it shows, if even a bit.
If I could make a suggestion about your writing style; I would recommend checking out a few other quests.You're doing this CYOA style; but your story posts feel a little too ridged and undescriptive for that format. Paint a picture with your words, make a living breathing scene for people to enjoy. Since you're not really doing dice rolling, you can afford to take a bit longer and be more descriptive.That said one day I'll finally be able to start up a quest I want to run where that exact same quest isn't already running.Cheers and press on friend.
