>>40118201
Steven Duncan.

>>40118201
James Mercelo

>>40118225
I'll second this.

"Welcome to the Game of the Damned, Steven Duncan. You're now already dead." you read, then chuckle skeptically. "You'll be given tasks, and you have to complete them if you want to remain, well, "fine" and "well" as you are now, Mr.Duncan. Unless you want to go to where you're supposed to be in your 'condition'."

You stop breathing for a moment, blink, and then look around. Just you, this sidewalk, and that dead end with the huge garbage containers with the the sleeping hobo. Then again, you exhale, in an amused manner.

"'Task 1: Take the young lady to your home within an hour.' She will help you in future tasks. Take good care of her." you read.

What young lady?

Then, you noticed that the space in front of the trash seemed to ondulate and bend, like the air above hot desert sand, and out of it, a large humanoid mass emerged, and fully materialized kneeling on the ground, blinking and looking around with her huge, slanted eyes.

It was a girl.

Then, what became immediately obvious was her *size*. Clad in white lingerie, which contrasted with her tan skin-white hair combination, her breasts and ass were enormous, and round. Medicine ball-sized, they bobbled around youthfully with her anxious gestures. From your angle, you could also see that her waist was miniscule, as if she was held together by a ridiculously tight invisible corset, or just that part of her was severely anorexic.

(Cont.)

>>40118225
>>40118291
>>40118336
God these names are so fucking boring

Then she started to approach you, with a cheery laughter, arms open. With you stunned, she grabbed your hand a with generous force, pulled in, deeper into the alley, into a corner

"You're finally mine." she giggled. "MINE.", and she tugged you in, to press into her ample bosom so that she could grip hold of you around your torso, and tighten herself around you viciously.

You stammer as you try to draw forth words. Then you stop, close your eyes, and inhale, before speaking.

>"Release me. Who are you? Are you the girl I'm supposed to take to my house?"
>"I don't remember paying you to do this. Speaking of that - who are you?
>"Whoa, I see that you're to the point. I'd love to skip more than just introductions here, but I'd like to know who you are first."

>Write in

>>40118375
>>Write in
"Oh hell yeah." Lets do it.

>>40118375
Uh not complaining here but who are you?

>>40118380
>>40118375
This

>>40118380
Agree with this

>>40118375
Best game ever

"Oh hell yeah." you reply, with a wide smile, stand properly and in position to move out of the alley, taking her hand.

"But, Duncan!" the girl said, a bit off-taken by your surge of enthusiasm. "The game, uhm!"

"I know." you replied, trying to lead her out, but she seemed to refuse to leave the shelter of the secluded alleyway. "I'm... Not dressed... Properly! I know it's not a condition, but at least help me out with this, please!"

>Nope, I got a game to win. Come with me quick, you'll be fine.
>Write-in a solution to the indecency problem.

>>40118375
....Just making sure, but you don't have a penis, do you?

>>40118592
>>Nope, I got a game to win. Come with me quick, you'll be fine.

>>40118622
Agreed

>>40118592
>>Write-in a solution to the indecency problem.
Just fuck her right here

>>40118592
>>Nope, I got a game to win. Come with me quick, you'll be fine.

>>40118671
This

>>40118671
That's an idea. Seconded.

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"Nope, I got a game to win. Come with me quick, you'll be fine." you claim, and take her hand firmly, and start to run to your house. You didn't lose any time at trying to cover her up - fulfilling the goal as stated was your only condition. Her body bounced around bounyantly as you dragged her along a few squares down, drawing the attention of most of the bystanders of whom most simply responded with a surprised stare or a quick photograph.

You stuffed you key into the front door of your apartment buiding, with the girl looking around nervously. Click. Door open. You took her hand and dashed up the stairs with a wide smile, unlocked your door and push her inside carefully - then you check your watch. Nearly fourty-five minutes to spare. Easy. The girl immediately walked up to your back, and front-first, hugged you as much as her breasts would allow.

You got another message, from your "friend". That guy that went with the pseudonym of "Goatskull"

"Congrats." it said. "You've now been granted a familiar - a succubus, as a tool to aid you in your tasks. You have fifteen minutes before I will send you the next instruction - I hope you use your time well until then, my dearest Duncan."

>Write in.

>>40118908
>>Write in.
Blowjob.

>>40118201
>Accepting some random dude's invitation to LARP
>In the middle of the night
>In the city
Shit nigga
You gonna die

>>40118917
>>40118908
This, get a blowjob from her.

>succubus follower

>was worried about modesty

So, which of these doesn't add up?

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This is totally Duncan

>>40118908
ask whats going on

>>40119178
>He smiled,
WAIT WHAT

>>40119218
Woops
*SHE smiled, then nodded en

A bit of a scare there, huh? Heh

>>40119218
Look up for local seafood restaurants and crustacean costumes. Ask our succubus if she knows anything about our target.

Deleted old post, posting corrected version.
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"Succubus." you say, in a order-like tone. Then you point downwards. She smiled, then nodded energetically.

---*---

You zip back up your trousers, feeling satisfied, and you check your phone to see that you have another message.

"Task: Kill Ang-za-haru. He is within fives blocks from your location, and he likes crustaceans. Time: 24 hours."

That was it. The succubus returned to where you were, on your old sofa, from the bathroom, and started to crawl up onto your body, approaching from the front, trying to hug you again. You had a mission, the kind you needed to do to avoid "dying for real", these odd messages, and this succubus, who has so far been pretty great.

>Write in.

>>40119277
look up all the sea food places in the area.

>>40119277
>crustaceans
Ask familiar to use her succubus powers to become a giant sexy lobster, because apparently the next target is into that sort of thing.

>>40119304
This is a fool proof plan and I support it.

>>40119277
Tell him we have a special shipment of crabs for him. Then bash his skull in with our dick.

>>40119304
>>40119315
>>40119332
kek

>>40119292
>>40119257
Writing

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>>40119277
Shoulda kept it saying "He".

We're all faggots here, fancy little demon would reflect the anon's desires.

>>40119277
Plot twist: Ang-za-haru IS a crab.

You popped up your phone, googled for places that served crustaceans in the immediate area, and you found two places. A supermarket near home, that had them in stock, and La Mafia, an quite posh, italian-styled restaurant with a fun theme.

You turn to the succubus, who was kissing your cheek tenderly. "Do you know anything about our target?" you ask.

"Maybe." she said, and then turned aside, looking pissed. "I... I've been waiting for so long to be summoned - I have been observing you ever since you were a young boy... Duncan, I was so glad that you invited me to do... That. I've been waiting for so long for you! But...I'm not your slave! I don't want to be that! Go fail the mission for all I care about." and then, she resumed her regular hugging and kissing. "I'm angry." she said, in a softer tone, and then resumed her affections.

You'd rub your chin if you could right now, if she stopped hugging you for once. How could you... Solve this problem with your succubus, the "tool" given to you to complete these tasks (which is now apparently killing some fucker called Ang-za-haru)?

>Write in

>>40119523
Maybe fucking her senseless will help us clear both our heads.

>>40119523
Ask if she has any abilities or powers that arent sexual.

>>40119523
Would you do it for a scooby sna- er, some oral, later? Slaves don't give quid-pro-quo, after all, so it'd establish that she's not a slave.

>>40119523
Keep her close and hugging us, if that'll solve the problem of her wanting to be near us. Maybe claim she's our girlfriend, assuming we're not married (which we probably aren't)

Tell her if she helps us kill Ang-za-haru, we'll fuck each other's brains out in victory.

>>40119523
Google the name. See what comes up.

"...Do you have any powers or abilities that aren't sexual?" you ask.

She chuckles. "I have *no* powers, dingus!", then removes herself from you, and merely sits besides you. "You apparently already know how to feed me, but if you want me to have powers, you have to make me grow. With demon hearts."

"Demon hearts?" you ask.

"Yeah. Ang-za? Demon." she states. "Shapeshifter, but as frail as a normal mortal."

"Would you help me out for a scooby sna- er, some oral, later?" you suggest, trying to negotiate.

"No." she replies. "I want hugs, kisses, cuddles and gropes."

You feel like its not the right moment to make a move to fuck her senseless right now, given her replies.

"Hey." you add, tugging her back to you with a arm around her back. "I can do that. Stay close."

She continues to pout, and crosses her arms over her ample bosom, and sits put, but lets you hold her.

"After we kill his Ang-za-haru guy - together, we can fuck each other's brains out. Deal?" you propose.

Her hips involutarily buckle a few times, slightly at the proposal, but she braces herself down, blushing. She raises a finger at you, and sternly states "Maaaaaaaybe. I'll consider it. Only if you do well."

>Write in.

>>40119774
"So...how about we order the lobster?"

>>40119774
>shape-shifter.
>likes crustacean.
>within 5 blocks

We don't happen to live on the bay, do we?

>go to posh italian place
>wait
Shapeshifter will come

>>40119774
Cool. So, know anything else about Ang-za besides that he's a demon? And that he likes crustaceans, apparently. Because it appears that you know more about him than I do.

>>40119871
With a succubus here? You fucking bet he will.

"Cool. So, know anything else about Ang-za besides that he's a demon? And that he likes crustaceans, apparently. Because it appears that you know more about him than I do." you say.

"Well, I *know* his smell." she replies. "I can smell them - us demons. Not too precisely though, I'm not a fucking bloodhound, but you get the idea."

"That works - that's way to actually find him, at least aproximately. So...how about we order the lobster?" you then suggest, pulling out your pitifully thin wallet. You pop it open and you look inside of it with a dissapointed look. "....It better be good enough to keep me full for five days." you comment.

The succubus leans her head to a side, in annoyance. "You seem to forget that I'm in lingerie. As comfortable as it may be, there is no way I'm going outside for an assasination mission in *this* attire. The cops would stop me right at the restaurant for public indecency, and I won't be of much help anymore when *that* happens ."

>Write in.

>>40120112
Check the closet of your see if you have anything she could wear since our wallet is woefully empty.

>>40120112
Solicit the young lady's presence in a wonderfully eventfully evening of partaking in delectable yet parsimonious refreshments while enjoying the exquisite view of area outside of La Mafia's captivating entrance.
Or we could pick up some cheap food and stake-out the restaurant. That works too.

>>40120142
This

>>40120142
Thirded.

You look at her extreme body - her cartoonishly small waist and her medicine ball huge breasts and ass. You huff to yourself in worry - did you have something that would fit *that*?

Jeans, shirts, more shirts, jackets and more jeans. Nothing particularly stretchy or big. You look back at her apologetically. "Sorry, this... is call I got. Can you fit in it, succubus?"

She took a shirt, and didn't manage to pull it down. Then, she tried some pants, with no avail. "It's useless." she said. "By the way, the name's Kiki."

You humm to yourself in slight frustration. "Okay. Be right back. Stay here." you say, exitting the apartment. You had to buy clothing - something that would fit. Luckily, most stores were just a busride away - the problem was, *what* do you buy?

Wallet: 250$

>Write in attire for the succubus, Kiki.

>>40120422
A few skirts some regular underwear some socks a pair of shoes, a blouse or two and a jacket.

>>40120502
This is a good start.

>>40120502
I like this.

>>40120422
Assuming it's warm out, maybe a sun dress or tea dress? We don't need to get much for her, just one or two outfits that we're confident will fit without looking terrible on her.

>>40120422
Budget ~$100 for this excursion. We should get her enough clothes for a while, but we need to save cash.

Wallet: 155$

Fuck, girl's clothing was a bit more expensive than men's. You grab a pair of skirts, bland underwear (luckily this was fairly cheap, but you didn't get any bras, since you couldn't find any her size. Her current lingerie would do for that, you figured), socks, a pair of sneakers, a large blouse and a the biggest sun dress.

You returned after two hours of scouting and running from store to store, getting clothing, hopeing that it would all fit - if it didn't, Kiki needed custom-made things. As you entered back in the apartment, you could find her shivering heavily, laid on the sofa, while biting a pillow she was hugging. She immediately straighted up, and braced herself down, slapping her cheeks, whispering to herself in a chant "Mad with Steve, Mad with Steve."

She looked back up at you, looking constipated. You introduced the clothing to her, and she tried it on, fitting into everything relatively well (her asscheeks did poke out of the lower side of the skirts, and the blouse was dangerously taut over her chest)

Kiki then looked at you, dressed in the sundress and holding the pillow. She then shivered, but then braced herself down to stop it with the pillow, holding it against the lower part of her face with her large amber eyes peering over, trying to conceal her hips twitching behind it and that she was kissing into its fabric too.

"We could just ask for the cheapest they have at La Mafia, if you want to take that route." she suggested, rewording your previous idea. "And stop t-t-teasing me with that look." she added. But you really weren't giving her any kind of look. "I know you want to p-provoke me, you! w-Ww-why am I only weak to you!"

>Write in

>>40120908
Shrug. "Maybe its just my natural charm or something. Anyway lets go, and you can...hug me if it calms you doen along the way."

>>40120965
This works for me.

>>40120908
Look up La Mafia's menu online and figure out:
a) what cheap things they have
b) what crab dishes you should look out for people ordering
c) whether reservations are required, or even permitted

Also,
>"I want hugs, kisses, cuddles and gropes."
Give her a tight hug/grope. Possibly cuddle and/or spoon her while looking this stuff up on your phone.

>>40120908
Okay, we clearly need to take the edge off here, ideally in the kinkiest possible way.

Wrap our arms around and take her hands into our own. Begin kissing her while staring longingly into her eyes as we ease into consensual sex in the missionary position.

If that doesn't satisfy the succubus for now I don't know what will.

>>40120965
This, but make sure to say it with a smile

>>40120908
>Stake out instead of eat there
Also supporting >>40120965

>>40121017
>>>/d/

"Maybe its just my natural charm or something. Anyway lets go, and you can...hug me if it calms you down along the way." you say with a smile.a

"J-j-just a one-sided hug?" she stammers, disappointed. "No, I'm o-ok." she concludes. "Let's go."

As you walk towards La Mafia, you could see Kiki looking at you swooningly from the corner of your sight, but as soon as you'd look at her, or ever hint that kind of gesture, she'd straighted up, and march on forth with you, with her fists making a tight, nearly painful fist. You take a moment to check La Mafia's online menu as well. They served fresh lobster - the only crustacean on the menu, but their speciality was pasta of different kinds. Reservations were a possibility, but today they had vacancies at the less appealing tables. Additionally, you found that their tapas were "fairly" cheap - 10$ each tapa of a different thing (ham, salmon, etc)

Before reaching La Mafia's entrance, Kiki was in a less than acceptable state after so much withdrawal, she was muttering "Steve bad, but Steve can take me whenever he wants... - But Steve bad! Resist Kiki! Hugging Steve is better than heaven...But no Kiki! Resist! " along other variants whih manifested her intense internal struggle of not caving into being affectionate with you when you're not doing what she wants you to.

>Write in

>>40121411
Hug her really quickly, then start the stake out.

>>40121442
I dont understand what you mean with stake out

>>40121411
>Pull her into a big hug, and while holding her ask about the range of her sensory ability. If it's long enough, find a place to stake out the restaurant. If not, then in we go.

>>40121411
Hugging her is obviously gonna go places, and denying her is gonna start one heck of a scene. Take her somewhere no one would see, and give her a hug

>>40121504
Nah, just wait it out, she'll just get handsy underneath the table and you'll have to fight a demon with the biggest erection ever.

It'll be our secret identity.

>>40121471
Surveillance on the entrance from afar. Keeping an eye on the comings and goings while waiting for Kiki's nose to pick something up (assuming it's possible with the range of Kiki's demon scenting).

>>40121411
>>40121442
This, because teasing succubi is fun

>>40121411
Kiss her quickly, then hold her hand as you walk into the restaurant.
Before you do, have Kiki check around and see whether the dude's already there.

You approach her, and her face immediately brightens up in excitement and the promise of relief, but then, you only give her a short hug, then release her, leaving Kiki with her eyes closed, kissing the air in front of her.

She then realized what was happening, but didnt want to fully accept it. She was shivering, and small beads of tears started form in her eyes. Reluctantly, she let her head rest again your arm, in a desperate need for physical contact.

"Try to smell him out" you tell her.

"I-i-i...c-c-cant..." she said, almost convulsing "c-c-an-t...thuh-thu-tthiink-k-kk...."


Right there, you believed that enough was enough and you went and hugged her, in a attempt to ease her suffering. She didn't trust you this time though, as she remained still, but with her state noticeably improving as you continue, with her slowly returning to normal. "S-Steve" she then said, in a saddened tone. "I'm...weak. I'm not a strong succubus, my...human part still has...a feelings weakness that I can't handle yet, it's too strong. So strong, for you, Steve. Please help me until I'm a stronger demon, ok? I'm...Not strong yet... Not strong enough to fight it. I need to become stronger."

>Session End!

---------

Twitter: https://twitter.com/CheeseCakeQM

I loved it, I loooooooooooved it. How did you guys like it?
>What did you like most?
>What didnt you like?
>What would you change?
>Rate /10
>Write in

>>40121882
I liked the hyper succubus and MC
I didnt like(insert something not true)
I would make succubus more yandere
8/8 m8 wasnt even b8(10/10)
Next time...we hold her hand.

>>40121936
I'll second most of these.
Exceptions:
1) no yandere.
2) needs more dragongirl (can be another character)
And I will admit to being HIGHLY biased.

>>40121882
>What did you like most?
A simple human making missions with his familiar succubus against demons and shit?! Neat!
>What didnt you like?
It wasn't well explained, this whole deal, and i think that we are ignoring common logic in everything. Come on, i know she is hot as hell, and i know that it's cliche, but we just ''Hell Yeah''d her and didn't give a fuck. At. All.
>What would you change?
More action to equilibrate with the magical realm, maybe less drama.
>Rate /10
8.5/10, it' good, but can be better.
Overall, thanks for running it, guy. It has potential.

>>40121882
Great potential. Keep up the good work.

>>40121936
HYPER SUCCUBUS FTW.
ty m8, dass g8
>>40121992
Hrmmm, dragongirl, eh? :)
>>40122014
Logic issue: Yeah, I noticed that too. I'll reinforce the logic.
More action: Yes, I want this too. I want less drama more action too, but now I got experience and I can work on it.
>>40122091
Thanks!


I appreciate feedback so hard, guys. Thank you!
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Thead Archived: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive.html?tags=Game%20of%20the%20Damned
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For next time, I might keep this OP, or switch to a different one, more in sync with the fact that half of the main characters has McEnormous T&A and is a succubus.

>>40122168
>Hrmmm, dragongirl, eh? :)
Yes please?

>>40121882
>>What did you like most?
Hot horny succubus? HELL YEAH MOTHERFUCKER.
Also the prospect of badass urban fantasy a la Dresden Files seems pretty cool.
>>What didnt you like?
There's no real indication of when voting is closed and exactly what action will be taken. Once you've decided what to write, you should indicate what you're writing and when you're writing it, like what you did in >>40119346.
Also, the way you're handling the magical realm is rather schizo, but I think that's more because of how people are responding to the prompts rather than your writing.
>>What would you change?
Needs more smut and world-building detail. We have a horny succubus, and not only do we have no idea why she's so horny or where she came from, but we also didn't get any sort of blowjob scene. It's a compromise where literally no one wins.
Also things need to HAPPEN in this quest. Literally all we did today was meet a hot succubus, take her home, give her a blowjob and clothes, and take her to a restaurant, with maybe 10 lines of backstory and world detail in between. That should have taken half as many posts as you used in this quest.
Quest choices take time away from the writing, so possibly cutting down on the branching points would be a good idea.
>>Rate /10
8.9/10 Best New Quest
Definitely following this in the future.

>>40122205
Maybe. I'm a very single-waifu guy and I love this succubus too hard

>>40122210
>magical realm is rather schizo
Please rephrase/elaborate, I'd like to understand this part and I dont.

>Also things need to HAPPEN in this quest
This is a recurring weakness of mine. Things that happen like what? Killing things? Actual, permanent consequences? If so, I understand completely, but please confirm.

Thank you for such detail on the feedback. Very appreciated!

>>40122304
Think by schizo he means one minute there is a super sexy hyper succubus blowing us and the next were ignoring her to do a job to kill a demon while she struggles to keep herself from wildly fucking us senseless.

By things I think hes talking about smut.

>>40122304
>>40122210
I was also a bit miffed by FTB lack of blowjob scene.

Ah well.

9.5/10
Gonna keep an eye out, so I can get my Steve fix too. Kiki, don't worry, I know how you feel.
When do you think for the next session?

>>40122384
Pastebin, first post. No smut.

>>40122447
That does nothing to alleviate my miffedness.

>>40121882
Seems neat, am interested enough to follow your twitter for the continuation.

>What didnt you like?
I didn't know how to feel about the 'go fail the mission for all I care about' bit. Was she just being tsun? Does she not know the consequences? Or does she want Steve to fail so she can claim his soul / be freed from being enraptured with him?
Probably just her being tsun, and me reading too much into it.

>What did you like most?
Cute Kiki moments, missions haven't been too grimdark or murderhobo or anything. Demons are usually almost like zombies and Nazis in terms of guilt-free opponents.

>>40122484
She's definitely Tsun as fuck. And yan as fuck. And dere as fuck. And fuck as fuck.

>>40122304
>Please rephrase/elaborate, I'd like to understand this part and I dont.
We flirt with her, turn her on, get a blowjob, and FTB?? Seems a bit weird, especially when you were setting it up so well.
Also we go from getting a blowjob to refusing to fuck her or even hold her hand even though she's so obviously wildly horny and she explicitly said she wanted it. Also what >>40122375 said.
>Things that happen like what?
Any of:
a) Smut. Everyone likes smut, provided it's well-written and slightly tasteful. See >>40122384. I understand according to the pastebin that there are no plans for it, but you should seriously consider it since your writing is great.
b) World-building/backstory. For an introductory quest thread, there is a considerable lack of either and that should change soon in the future.
c) Action. Kicking ass and taking names is always fun.
This thread was lacking in all three, but there's good setup for any of them in the future.
Honestly, if you had shown the blowjob scene and wrote up to the point where Kiki says "I smell him" and then cut to session end, this would have been a 10/10 thread.
Unfortunately it looks like me and >>40122457 will now be eternally miffed.

>>40121882
>What did you like most?
Succubus acting angry/tsun while not being able to stop herself from kissing/cuddling/etc.
Also the idea of training our hot succubus familiar to be a badass by killing demons is pretty fucking neato.
>What didnt you like?
Nothing the other anons haven't mentioned, specifically some more worldbuilding would be nice.
>What would you change?
This might just be my opinion, but:
>>40122210
Going off of what this anon said about things happening, keep in mind that having every option be a write in isn't necessarily the best. Usually write ins are great, but they do take longer for players to make choices (and for you to write since you won't know too much beforehand of what people will say). For the smaller, less important decisions they can take up more time than needed, and I think it might be better to present a few options with the possibility of a write in (like what you did when Kiki wasn't dressed while leaving the alleyway). That might just be me though.

Overall I'm looking forward to the next one, this was fun

>>40122611
>Going off of what this anon said about things happening, keep in mind that having every option be a write in isn't necessarily the best. Usually write ins are great, but they do take longer for players to make choices (and for you to write since you won't know too much beforehand of what people will say). For the smaller, less important decisions they can take up more time than needed, and I think it might be better to present a few options with the possibility of a write in (like what you did when Kiki wasn't dressed while leaving the alleyway). That might just be me though.
This is exactly what I wanted to say. Thank you for phrasing it better.

God damn it Cheesecake
DON'T YOU DARE
let Puppetmancer and Inventomancy die!

Those were the best!

>>40124943
Uhm, well. For the most part, these one-shots are experiments, which is why I'm making so many. At core, I have a series of things I want to have in a quest to make it enjoyable for me to write, which I discover and explore via these one-shots.

-Inventomancy: Fun as shits, but the system is clunky, plus the enviroment is too childish for me to take seriously.
>I won't take this as a serious long-running quest like High School of the Eldritch.

-Puppetmancy: Started out as shit, and the core concept has been passed here in the familiar/master relationship with combatwaifu - I LIKE the concept, but I much prefer a modern enviroment to have it all happen in. Their theme is a bit different too, Puppetmancy is more rags to riches sandbox whereas this is "do X mission or die." and easier for me to give direction and think.
>I won't take this as a serious long-running quest like High School of the Eldritch.
>However, I do LOVE the puppet theme, so I will likely make a proper reboot, or try to salvage the first episode into something decent, maybe? The "spiritual sucessor" to this IS game of the damned though.

Also, neither of them has superaffectionate hyperwaifu. I crave my superaffectionate hyperwaifus really bad - Mary in HotE is a prime example of that trope, and here, Kiki just takes it to eleven and that's fucking awesome for me.

>>40122375
Ah, I see, thank you.
>>40122384
No smut, sorry. I MIGHTPERHAPS do it? Highly unlikely though, so dont count on it. I dislike writing sex explicitly, quite a bit. Just me and shit taste.
>>40122431
I will notify by twitter - if I can, I can do this daily
like HotE.
>>40122457
Sorry bruh, but there are no sandwiches in a quest that says "sorry, no sandwiches" in the OP.
>>40122484
Thanks!
>I didn't know how to feel about the 'go fail the mission for all I care about' bit. Was she just being tsun? Does she not know the consequences? Or does she want Steve to fail so she can claim his soul / be freed from being enraptured with him? Probably just her being tsun, and me reading too much into it.
You're reading too much into it I believe.
>Cute Kiki moments, missions haven't been too grimdark or murderhobo or anything. Demons are usually almost like zombies and Nazis in terms of guilt-free opponents.
Thanks, that's quite a good insight I havent noticed. Nice to see things work out this way!
>>40122506
fuck/fuck would fuck
>>40122508
>We flirt with her, turn her on, get a blowjob, and FTB?? Seems a bit weird, especially when you were setting it up so well.
Also we go from getting a blowjob to refusing to fuck her or even hold her hand even though she's so obviously wildly horny and she explicitly said she wanted it. Also what >>40122375 said.
Yep. The schizo problem. I'll see what I can do without sucking too hard. Its a characterization problem, yes.
>a) Smut. Everyone likes smut, provided it's well-written and slightly tasteful. See >>40122384. I understand according to the pastebin that there are no plans for it, but you should seriously consider it since your writing is great.
Eeeeh. Maybe. Unlikely, sorry. I'll consider it though.
>b) World-building/backstory. For an introductory quest thread, there is a considerable lack of either and that should change soon in the future.
Will do
>c) Action. Kicking ass and taking names is always fun
Gotcha

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>>40122611
>Succubus acting angry/tsun while not being able to stop herself from kissing/cuddling/etc.
I loved this way too much too.
>Nothing the other anons haven't mentioned, specifically some more worldbuilding would be nice.
*Nod*
>Going off of what this anon said about things happening, keep in mind that having every option be a write in isn't necessarily the best. Usually write ins are great, but they do take longer for players to make choices (and for you to write since you won't know too much beforehand of what people will say). For the smaller, less important decisions they can take up more time than needed, and I think it might be better to present a few options with the possibility of a write in (like what you did when Kiki wasn't dressed while leaving the alleyway). That might just be me though.
I've been told of this problem in Puppetmancy too, and then I went overboard and got the opposite problem in Inventomancy. I'll try to calibrate myself better in that aspect, but by default I love write ins.

I'm a bit surprised nobody has brought up Everyone is Fucking Psychic though tbh. Just a different audience, I guess?

>>40125547
There is a difference between writing explicit smut and lewds, learn the difference and write lewds.