FAR ABOVE THE NIGHT SKY OF PLANET VEGETA, IN THE FACE OF AN IMPOSSIBLE BATTLE, A CURSE PASSES TO THE FIRSTBORN.Raditz didn't know why he was here. He was no stranger to the planet clean outs that Frieza ordered. He had been on several on weaker planets. No he merely wondered why he was fighting alongside the prince and his bodyguard.Though that wasn't the only thing on his mind, before he had left his father had come to say goodbye, something that was strange in itself. But stranger than that was what he had told him."Raditz, I'm sending your brother away as well, to a far away planet called earth." This wasn't to strange, even Saiyan children could exterminate most planets given time, no what was said next was what continued to confuse Raditz even as he fought now."No matter what happens next, you must promise not to look for him."--------------------------------------------------------------It might have been a battle had it not been for the presence of the Prince, the planet didn't have any kind of civilisation, the only fighting force it had being large armoured beasts with thousands of legs and claws. And even then they were no threat against even your weakest ki attacks, each attack simply shattering their armour and killing them.It was about halfway through the eradication that the three of you got the message on your scouter. RETURN TO PLANET VEGETA IMMEDIATELY“Well Vegeta?” Nappa was tall for his age, despite being only a few years older than the prince he was as tall or taller than the average adult. But his height wasn’t for show, as muscles filled every part of his figure, and as for as you could tell they were the real deal.“Nappa I don’t leave a job half-done, not even if the Lizard orders me too.” The prince was in stark contrast to the giant, small for his age, though no one would be stupid enough to say that to his face. But despite that no one could ignore how powerful he already was, rumours abounded that even now he could fight off fully grown Saibamen without breaking a sweat.That left only you.You would never admit it even if everyone knew, but for a Saiyan you were weak, even for your age. Your Ki blasts were erratic, and you lacked control on the battlefield, but even so you had what a Saiyan needs most. Pride. Your father was a great warrior, and damn anyone who said your weakness was from your mother.So you did the only thing your Saiyan pride would allow you to do, fight on. You only nodded to them and kept blasting away.
It was several hours later, as the last of the creatures was crushed underneath Nappa’s weight, that you saw it for the first time. First there was the blinding pain that wracked through your body, then you saw things.Your father bathed in deadly light above planet Vegeta as Frieza laughed.Nappa being vaporised by a blast of Ki from Vegeta.A Saiyan you’d never seen before facing down Frieza.And the last thing you saw before you fell into unconsciousness, you and that same Saiyan, dead from a beam of concentrated ki.——————————————————————————————It was a month before you woke up from what felt like an eternal nightmare to the sight of one of the medical rooms aboard one of the many ships of the Frieza empire. Unaware that you had only woken into a much worse nightmare.It was Nappa who first saw you had awoken, the giant looked far more solemn than any Saiyan would wish to look.As he helped you out of the Pod questions surged through your brain, what had you seen, how had you been injured, where was your mom.But as the medical alert siren began to blare you knew you only had time to ask one question.>What happened to me>Why aren’t we back on Vegeta>What were those Visions>Where is the Prince.>Write-In
>>987963>What happened to me?
pls have mercy. haven't we suffered enough dragonball quests?
>>987963>Where is the Prince.
>What happened to me?Time for Dragonball
>>987963>>Where is the Prince.Anal.
>>987982I'll switch to>Where is the Prince.To break the tie
>>987967>>987972>>987982>>987987Votes will be called after 10 minutesand as such the first vote is a tiebecause of course.>>988006Oh shit never mind then.CALLING FOR>Where is the Prince.Writing now.
>>987963>Why aren’t we back on Vegeta
Nappa’s brow furrows as he throws a set of battle armour at you, a skintight suit that can expand to most sizes. You can swear he almost smiles at you before checking down the hallway.“Vegeta is in the healing pod next to you.” As he say’s it you turn and instinctively shiver. Even with the time he’s been in the pod you can see he has been badly hurt, scars run across his body, and his arm seem’s to be broken.Turning back you see Nappa with the darkest most fearful look on his face, and everything he says hit’s like a blow.“No matter what he says, no matter what he does, you have to swear allegiance to Frieza.” You try to open your mouth to argue but he grabs you by the shoulders. “Raditz. If you don’t listen, you will die tonight. Our pride won’t mean anything if we die.”For a second you see his screaming face as he’s torn apart atom by atom.Thats when several of Frieza’s soldiers burst into the room. “We are here to take the Injured Saiyan to see the Emperor. Do not resist monkeys.”You see Nappa’s fist clench, and his Ki flares for a second. Before he unclenches and passes you over. “Yeah Yeah, just give him a sec to breathe, he’s only just out of the chamber.”As you’re marched out you see him sit down with his back pressed against Vegeta’s pod.
You are marched through the curved halls of the ship by the small group, your muscles are tired and it takes all the energy you have to walk in a straight line.You see through the holographic windows of the ship that you are floating far above a cluster of meteors and space dust. As news updates barely manage to penetrate into your mind from nearby radios.“The Meteor had not shown up on prior scans and it is unknown if foul play is involve…”, “As of now no survivors have been found.”.One of the broadcasts however fully captures your attention, if only because of the voice that comes over it. “Of course my deepest sympathies go out to any survivors and I beg of them to come forward to me for recompense. No one could have predicted this tradegy but I do promise that nothing of this sort shall happen again under my watch.”"A stirring speech don’t you think, I wrote it myself.” You didn’t even notice you’d been marched into the room, not until you see him. No one is sure what race he is, but everyone knows what he looks like.Pink and Purple, with a prehensile tail and a smirk that never leaves their face. If you ever face that figure in a fight then it is better to die quickly than to struggle pitifully.Frieza.“Now child, I am sure that you must be very confused, but their is no reason whatsoever to worry, you are safer here than anywhere else in the universe.” The Emperor smiles, as if to a joke only they know, and turns away from you.“I am so sorry to be the bearer of bad news, but I am afraid that your Planet Vegeta has been completely destroyed. And if reports are to believed then it was all the work of your father, the “warrior" Bardock.” You remember the nightmare. Of your father bathed in light as Frieza laughed.“However, thankfully for you, I do not believe in the sins of the father, so I will allow leniency, all you must do is swear a lifetime of fealty to me and my empire, and you shall be allowed to live and fight as a Saiyan does. Aren’t I merciful.” >Accept, you cannot fight this monster.>He killed your father, He destroyed your planet and he mocks your race YOU WILL NEVER BOW TO HIM [Will Initiate an impossible battle]>Write-In
>>988157>>He killed your father, He destroyed your planet and he mocks your race YOU WILL NEVER BOW TO HIM [Will Initiate an impossible battle]SAIYAN PRIDE WORLD WIDE
>Accept, you cannot fight this monster.Can't beat the Freeza. 10/10 best ruler.
>>988157>He killed your father, He destroyed your planet and he mocks your race YOU WILL NEVER BOW TO HIM [Will Initiate an impossible battle]I'm sure we can't beat him, we probably won't even annoy him. But goddamn I'm curious to see how the story will change if we do this.
>>988157>He killed your father, He destroyed your planet and he mocks your race YOU WILL NEVER BOW TO HIM [Will Initiate an impossible battle]But does he have 6 fingers on his right hand?
>>988157> Write-InSwear it standing up rather than bowing. Small victories.
>>988169I like this. Freeza might death ray our knee out, but it's something.
>>988157>He killed your father, He destroyed your planet and he mocks your race YOU WILL NEVER BOW TO HIM [Will Initiate an impossible battle]FRIIEEEEEZZZAAAAA!!
Rolled 16 (1d100)>>988157>He killed your father, He destroyed your planet and he mocks your race YOU WILL NEVER BOW TO HIM [Will Initiate an impossible battle]IT'S NOT IMPOSSIBLE WITH THIS NAT 100
>>988157>>Accept, you cannot fight this monster.
>>988157>>Accept, you cannot fight this monster
>>988157>Accept, you cannot fight this monster.
>>988196>>988194>>988186>>988181>>988168>>988167>>988164>>988163>>988180>>988179>>988169And I am counting4 FOR FIGHTING6 FOR FEALTY- With 2 sub voting for standing.Man you guys are supposed to be Saiyans right?WRITING FOR>Accept, you cannot fight this monster.
>>988206>>Man you guys are supposed to be Saiyans right?Sure, but last time I participated in a quest with an impossible fight at the start the QM immediately killed us off and ended the quest right there and then so I'm a bit more cautious now.
Rolled 8 + 2 (1d20 + 2)>>988206Or rather it is a tie I am sorry.Shall Raditz's rage overcome he sense?rolling 1d20 + 2 from fear + 2 for warning - 6 for RAGEabove 10 he stands down, under he fights.
>>988208Commonsense not to fight frieza and Nappa warning us. Dude baiting anons is only gonna lead to salt.
>>988212Ah the world loves it's coin on the side doesn't it.THEN WE CONTINUE ON WITH FEALTY AND A SIDE REBELLION.>writing for Swear it standing up rather than bowing.>>988214Don't blame me that those filthy monkeys never learn their place.
>>988222This your first time running a quest?
Excellent. Looks like lord freezer is going to put this weakling quest out of its misery.
>>988232That easy to tell?If you show me a first timer's first thread that went well then you'd be showing me a miracle
>>988247Well it was either that, or you're running a huge jackass vib so I was going with the safe bet. Word of advice, Might not want odd modifiers like that unless you explained sooner. It seems like you're attempting to railroad said MC to a path you want.
>>988247Once Raditz dies you should make this quest about Frieza's cooler older brother.
>>988262That guy Fridge?Yeah he's pretty dope.
>>988262>Implying next quest won't star Kuriza
>>988157>>He killed your father, He destroyed your planet and he mocks your race YOU WILL NEVER BOW TO HIM [Will Initiate an impossible battle]this is probably what Raditz would do at this point.
You can’t stop shaking. Even without a scouter you can feel the power rushing off of him in waves. Power enough to destroy a planet with the flick of a wrist. To destroy you planet in the flick of a wrist. TO KILL YOUR FAMILY WITH THE FLICK OF A WRIST.“He will kill you.”Thats all that stops you from launching everything you have at the monster, the thought of Nappa’s grave warning, the thought of Vegeta’s broken body and the thought of your brother left abandoned far of in the space goonies.You unclench the fist which you didn’t even know had begun to collect ki, and begin to breathe.Your body stationery and standing as tall as can you begin to speak. " I swear my fealty to your empire.” You don’t make any move to bow or kneel, simply staring into the eyes of the monster in front of you. Frieza for his part doesn’t react at all to your small act of defiance, his smirk never leaving his face, as he stares back without fail“I am so very glad that unlike the little prince you can see reason. You have to understand that I am doing the best that I can for you, I am quite sure that with his temper and with all that’s been taken from him that without my protection the little prince would have no issue tearing you apart for what you father has done to him.”Then he simply turns around and walks over to a chair facing a large view screen. Beginning to give off orders to various crew members around the room who scramble about. As you are pulled out of the room again by the soldiers you only hear snippets of orders.“Someone send the message to Beerus that I've finished…"“Keep Scanning for that power level from earlier…”“Someone tell my brother I’m not taking calls…”
As you are walked back to the room you had woken up in, you feel it again, the pressing on your brain, and the pain that threatens to tear your body apart.But this time you feel like you understand, and instead of trying to hold it back you let the vision wash over you. You see far far away from here, a saiyan attack pod have a minor malfunction no one could have expected, as it careens into a forest. Your heart sinks for a moment, before you see that the child passenger is okay.You know deep inside of yourself that this is Kakarot and that more than anything else he is safe. Your dad always said that Saiyans didn’t have familial bonds, and that he was only soft because of your mother.But seeing that your little brother could grow up safe far from this monster, made you happier than anything else could at that moment.——————————————————————————————Soon enough you find yourself back in the room where Vegeta is being healed. Nappa runs to the door as he hears you approaching, but even he can’t hide a smile when he see’s that you’re uninjured.As you sit down across from him, the two of you staring at the pod containing the prince he begins to speak.“Back on the mission you collapsed out of the sky screaming, we thought that you’d been poisoned by one of those huge beetle monsters, but after a few minutes you just stopped screaming. I tried to carry you back to the pod but Vegeta insisted that he’d do it, that it was his job as prince to stand for all Saiyans.”He stops for a minute, checking a few screens on the pod before sitting back down.“The second we got back we were forced into Frieza’s chambers, and told about the “Meteor”.” you can swear you hear venom drip from his voice as he say’s it.“He refused to swear fealty. The fight lasted seconds, the beating didn’t stop for hours. Not until Vegeta begged or died he said. I swore both of our fealties as much as I could to try and get him to stop, but the bastard just kept at it for hours.”He sighs and looks at you, it’s only now you can tell how exhausted he looks, a Saiyan can stay up for days easily, Nappa looks like he’s been up for weeks.“Neither of us blame you kid, no matter what your dad might have done.”Your fists clench.>My father didn’t do anything. (Tell Nappa about the visions.)>My father didn’t do anything. (Don’t tell Nappa)>Just let the comment pass.>Write-in
>>988419>My father didn’t do anything. (Tell Nappa about the visions.) But some place they would't be listened in on.Nappa is the smartest one to be fair both due to his position and experience. Monkey general and all.
>>988419>My father didn’t do anything. (Tell Nappa about the visions.)
>>988419>>My father didn’t do anything. (Tell Nappa about the visions.)
>My father didn’t do anything. (Tell Nappa about the visions.)Nappa's a meathead, but he might be more likely to believe a fellow Saiyan over Freeza.>>988423This is also a good addition.
>>988419>My father didn’t do anything. (Tell Nappa about the visions.) But some place they would't be listened in on.
>My father didn’t do anything. (Tell Nappa about the visions.) But some place they would't be listened in on.
>>988452>>988450>>988444>>988442>>988439>>988437>>988434>>988434>>988432>>988428>>988423A slam dunk for telling nappa about the visionsAlso just to make it clearWrite ins for actions separate from all suggested ones are treated as normal votes. Write in's that expand an existing vote count as a vote for that option, but if most of the votes for that option are of the same write in then the write in is added.CALLING FOR>My father didn’t do anything. (Tell Nappa about the visions.) But some place they would't be listened in on.
>>988476I'll support this, don't know who might be listening in and Freiza is likely a bit paranoid
>>988535Well he was paranoid enough to axe some of his best fighters, not to mention all of the others soldiers in orbit around Vegeta that got caught in the blast.
>>988476You feel a twinge of rage at the idea that your father could have done this, but not at Nappa who couldn’t know better, but at that bastard Frieza, who lords above all and who wants to destroy your pride.Clenching your fist you turn to Nappa, before silencing him with a finger to your lips. Through elaborate pantomime and charades you eventually manage to get him to guide you to the showers, which are soon at full blast.“You know if you were worried about bugs you could’ve just said you wanted to go to the shower and talk some more, the whole jumping about and flailing thing just would’ve made you more suspicious.”“Well I mean-““I mean I don’t even think their are bugs in the medical room, but I didn't really check”“Well I wanted to shower anywa-““And I would’ve preferred to keep and eye on Vegeta.”“God damn it Nappa listen.”Instantly the smile that had been playing across his face vanishes, the hot water had been doing him more good than he had realised, as he became completely serious again.“Ever since I first passed out before, I’ve been having Visions.”Nappa freezes completely, his eyes focused completely on you.“I saw all of us dying, I saw my brother land safely across the galaxy, I saw my father die to that BASTARD FRIEZA’S HAND!”You go to swing at the wall in anger, as Nappa moves faster to grab it.“Before your father died, he was sent to kill off a population of future seer’s, they were weak but crafty. It was need to know kind of stuff, and I only knew cause Vegeta was mad he didn’t get sent to do it himself.”It feels like the world stops around you. The water runs cold and even the engines of the ship seem to stop.“Y-you believe me?”Nappa only sighs, ruffles your hair and turns to leave.“We’re the last of our race kid, we have to look out for each other. But we can’t do anything yet, if you’re right. If Frieza did all of this, then I swear we will get our revenge someday.”It’s then you remember that vision, of Vegeta himself killing his closet friend.>Warn him, he has to know how far Vegeta can fall.>No you can’t spread distrust now, they were so much older in the vision, their might still be time to change it.>write-in
>>988583>Warn him, he has to know how far Vegeta can fall, but explain that Vegeta could probally still be saved. Nappa, plz live gobbie.
>>988583>>No you can’t spread distrust now, they were so much older in the vision, their might still be time to change it.can't fuck up the team dynamic right off the bat, can we?
>>988583>>No you can’t spread distrust now, they were so much older in the vision, their might still be time to change it.
>>988583>Warn him, he has to know how far Vegeta can fall.
>No you can’t spread distrust now, they were so much older in the vision, their might still be time to change it.Like Nappa said, last of race, gotta look out for each-other.Until we stab him in the back and place all our bets on Goku, right?
>>988598>yfw Goku hitting his head doesn't turn him retarded>yfw we find Earth and Goku is ruling it>yfw Popo
>>988598>Wanting to stab Nappa in the backWhat the fuck is wrong with you?>>988607Honestly I'd prefer one where we end up ruling shit not just teaming up and 'training' fucking Goku to instant win everything.
>>988616You don't want to find our brother?You a asshole. No one said Goku would be cooperative with us
>>988583>>Warn him, he has to know how far Vegeta can fall.
>>988623I don't want to find super Retardo Goku, Which is what he is in Canon.
>>988616You mean actually re-establishing the Saiyan Empire and overthrowing Frieza?It sounds in-character and I like it.Only question is whether or not we pull the shit Raditz does in canon when he gets to Earth.
>>988616You're right, we should train Gohan instead, we'll do a better job than Piccolo.
>>988586>>988589>>988593>>988596>>988598>>988625>>988627OKAY CALLING3 FOR WARN4 FOR TRUSTWhat you do when you get to earth, or when you get to earth, or if you go to earth, will be up to you.But you do know that doing the wrong thing that way leads to getting a new breathing hole.
>>988629And Raditz doesn't see the future in canon, so clearly canon is 100% the go-to right now.Don't be a buzzkill.
>>988632>>988634Well Clearly we point shit out and we don't hold Goku's kid fucking hostage if I remember correctly or start off fighting. If anything we have Goku and Vegeta kick the shit outta each other. Or go 'missing' on earth until they show and train with them. Build a force to take out Frieza. >>988638Would've had a new breathing hole anyway here. If we had foguth the bastard.>>988641Better safe then sorry.
>>988663>Better safe then sorry.>ITT: Filthy non-Saiyans
>>988638You can’t do it. Despite the visions, despite the fear, you can’t deny what Nappa has said to you.The three of you are all that you have, if the future says that your pride will destroy you, that you will turn against each other and fall, THEN THE FUTURE CAN GO DIE!You are what’s left of the might Saiyan race, Despite how far you’ve fallen, despite the insults from a monster, despite the galaxy itself standing against you, you shall do as Saiyans always do and FIGHThttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tUYia23WiaoYou are Raditz, son of Bardock and Gine. You were nothing more than the lowest of the low class warriors, but nothing everything has changed. Your Inherited curse has allowed you to see the future that lies before you. But you will not accept a cowards death. You will fight the monster that destroyed your people, you will prove the might and pride of the saiyans, and you will avenge your father!“Come on Kid, lets go make sure Vegeta has a welcoming part when he wakes up.” Nappa says as he don’s his armour and starts to leave.“And just so you know, he’ll want to spar once he’s out.”—————————————————————————“Raditz here, I swear I will get my revenge!… If I can survive the might of an awakened Prince. But maybe strength is exactly what I’ll need to change our races fate.”“NEXT TIME: "FIGHT AGAINST THE PRINCE OF ALL SAIYANS, THE TWIN RAGES CLASH” Don’t miss it."END OF EPISODE 1
Good news is, Raditz is a clever little shit, when he isn't being a fucking retard for PLOT reasons.We just need to make sure we disrupt any PLOT that comes near him.
And it is over ladies and Gentlemen!I don't have a concrete schedule yet, but I fully intend on running again.I would just like to take a moment and thank Booker Man, QM of Dark Gate Academy, for encouraging me to take this first step, to TFS for giving me an interest in the series, and the series itself for being greatIf you have any questions drop em here, including any questions for any of the characters if you want to test my character writing skills.And tell me, what do you expect from this story?
>>988748>And tell me, what do you expect from this story?Salt. Salt and powerlevels.
>>988748Us to die horribly because Anon's are fucking stupid, Nappa to die because we didn't warn him and a retarded Goku. I'm hoping for the best tho.
>>988748I expect this to be short-lived. Honestly man, some of the things you write come off as pure awkward and also for a first session this was pretty lackluster.Not only was it boring but it was short. If you can't dedicate six to eight hours on your first session how am I supposed to get invested in this at all. Not to mention its DBZ fanfiction so its already on a list of shit we dont need that is inherently cringy.Nappa seems too fucking nice although I really can't remember him much in canon.
>>988758Trust me, I'm not a fan of Power levels that much either. Part of the reason their was no real combat in this thread, apart from getting the shit kicked out of you if you stepped out of line to frieza, is cause im working on combat on my end.>>988762Always hope for the best anon, it's what gets me through life.>>988769Sorry to hear that man, though seeing as you already dislike the base idea for the quest I can't say I can do much to help, I do agree about length and when I run again I will be starting an hour or two earlier.As for Nappa you have to remember, this is right at the start of the story, this is before they've worked as slaves for Frieza for 20-ish years, shit like that could make the hardest person cold.
>>988769>I don't like thingThen why are you even here?
>>988790I do hope we end up going another route this quest then all the other ones of 'Oh we find goku, lets be best friends and work for earth' I think a new Empire would be bitchin...plus we can hopefully grind before we get to that part.
>>988748It's good to see you taking that first step and actually running something. A few of the usual first time slip-ups but slip-ups are how we learn and grow. This anon >>988769 has some decent criticisms to take on board and work with.As for the quest itself, I'll support it all I can. DBZ is an over-saturated franchise when it comes to quests, though I've never been one to discourage someone from running a quest just because there are similar ones out there. You should try to strike this out as it's own thing that separates it from other quests. On top of that, you can always improve on character writing and getting a hang of each character's voice, something that gets pretty tricky when you're working with characters from an already established canon.On top of making sessions longer, I'd advise working on pacing to keep people more interested. This short session feels a lot like a prelude with not all that much going on, it would be good to kick into more action to hook people sooner. Also, I think you should include some rules for dice rolls in your next OP, because in a combat-oriented deal like this, it could become a bizarre mess if you try to explain things as you go along there.
>>988825I can't control the Anon's I can only suggest paths, however that's not to say that things will be easy if you just decide to be buddies.It would be quite an issue if for example no heroes died and learned some very important techniques.>>988839I do plan on making the rules a bit clearer next thread, as I said im still ironing out kinks with combat, and the rules for votes I kind of wanted to reveal as they happened.As for feeling like a prelude, thats cause it kind of is, next thread will start with Vegeta waking up and only escalate from there hopefully.
>>988864I'm fine with some people dying, Really am. I'm not okay with bullshit death things for 'shock' value.
>>988769I agree that the characterisation is ... non canon.
>>988954I'm okay with being non canon, at least at this early point in the story. If I remember well (probably not because i have shit memory), Vegeta was and will always be a little shit, and while Nappa was prone to be angered, he seemed to care for his species (except traitors), and this being before they were ridiculed and overworked by Freezer, maybe Nappa was a better person back then. Still expect Vegeta to be a little shit as usual.>>988881The one thing I expect about people dying is to be permanent. One too many quests, just like the series themselves, uses and abuses of the dragon balls to revive people and rebuild what was destroyed and power ups the dragon balls to grant more wishes or have shorter cooldown if not all the wishes are used.
>>989010>Changing the way things were operated without Denday to do it.
How old is Raditz?
>>988728That theme song is Super lame, stop using it.
>>988864Is Dragon Ball Zero canon in this?
>>990498Thanks for that I didn't actually know that was a thing.Unfortunately I already had a plan in mind for Turles. And I can't really agree with the endings characterisation of Nappa or Vegeta, however that is what I imagine the characters all look like at this point, and that is how I imagine Bardock.
>>989010If I remember vegeta became less of a little shit after having a kid. And honestly I kinda expect cannon to be out the window since I am expecting us to cause some form of character development to nappa and vegeta. (at least when it revolves this two)
I don't see why you guys would trust Nappa of all people.
>>1001172Because this isn't canon and we have no reason to distrust him?
>>1001172>Nappa as the general of the Syrian army shouldn't be trusted
>>1001172Nappa is a chill guy, and ironically, he's more calm and collected than Vegeta despite how Vegeta treated him like a hotheaded guy. See: The shitton of times that vegeta lost his shit because things didn't go as he want, proving that he was full of bullshit and simply mocked Nappa because he was losing when he is just as prone if not more to get enraged and lose his cool when he's losing