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Original thread >>2982694
Previous thread >>3001881
You should definitely read them before jumping in to this one

>It's late October, and as per usual, you stop by the gym on your way home from work.
>For some reason, you feel like you just woke up after being beaten unconscious.
>But that’s what work will do to you!
>After mindlessly serving strangers for 8 hours straight at the bar, you can finally get your blood flowing again!
>Idly chatting with random customers is fine and all, but on long days like these, it almost drives you insane from boredom.
>But that’s over with, and now you can bang out your reps in peace and quiet.
>The gym is fairly silent tonight due to the lethally cold weather keeping everyone inside.
>With weather like this, it makes you wonder if you should even bother buying halloween candy this year.
>How are kids gonna go trick or treating when it’s this cold out anyways? You freeze your butt off just walking to and from work everyday!

>Well.
>It's not like anyone comes to your apartment anyway.
>And you highly doubt any kids looking for sweets would bother going to your dilapidated apartment complex in the middle of nowhere.
...
>You wonder what your parents would think if they knew about your living situation.
>Living paycheck to paycheck, all alone in some crummy old apartment building..

Ah.
>Looking over at the clock you see it's 9:30pm
>You should probably stop distracting yourself and actually get going.
>Those kind of thoughts can’t be good for your mental health anyway.

>You wrap up your inner-monologging and wipe the sweat off your face.
>Alright.
>Let's wash up and get this show on the road
>You have work tomorrow after all.

{Look, Walk, Inventory, Phone, Etc.}

Last thread. One final opportunity. Will you capture it? Or let it slip?
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>>3019966
your DA is gold but i literally don't know what the FUCK any of this is. Have a bump tho.
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>>3020011
http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/qstarchive.html?tags=Control%20quest
Thanks.. I think?
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>>3019966
Go to a Halloween party dressed up as a sexy cat girl

Third time should work
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>>3020150
>Good idea!
END 1: Your a wiener!
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>>3020178
Truly the darkest ending, that answers all the questions we never even knew to ask. All our misfortune, all our suffering, everything was due solely to the fact that we refused to acknowledge: were a wiener.

Unfortunately, I can't do much more at the moment than lurk, but I look forward to catching up and hopefully participating when I have the spare time.
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>>3019966
Oh your back! Remember me I'm the guy with the pink id who had to ,leave suddenly because of.... you know what. Anyway I hope this final goes real well for ya Gumby. I, unfortunately, can't participate because I've got a real nasty bug and need to rest. But I hope you do well and that lots of people participate! Anyway I need to sleep now, see y'all in the morning!
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>>3020178
Go to the bathroom!!!
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>>3020253
>Well you don’t really have to go…
>But whatever. You may as well scope the place out while you're here.
>You walk past the locker room and enter the women’s restroom
...
>It looks.. unusually clean tonight.
>Well, except for the conspicuous cloud of smoke rolling the top of one of the stalls…
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>>3020273
what's in my pockets?
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>>3020276
>You instinctively check your bag to make sure you weren't pickpocketed on your way here.
>It's not like there's much worth stealing, but you never know.


{INVENTORY}
Wallet: It has a couple bucks from tonight's tips, a debit card, and a bus pass.
Pocket knife: Not really your style, but Mom made you take it when you left.
Keys: To your apartment. Room 1208
Clothes: Spare clothes to change into after your workout. No way you can go home drenched in sweat and wearing gym clothes. You’d turn into a human popsicle the second you walked out the door.
Towel: It's a little damp..
Water Bottle: Liquid power - half Empty.
Lighter: ...we all have our problems.
Phone: It's a flip phone with the only contacts being your boss and your mom... It speaks for itself.

>You let out a sigh of relief realizing that the few belongings you have are still in your bag.
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>>3020284
Pull out knife for protection and head for the steaming toilet.
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>>3020284
Take out the knife and check the stall with the smoke.
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>>3020287
>>3020288
>You don't know why, but you decide to pull out your knife and head over to the stall.
>You're gonna go rambo on this steaming toilet
>...You guess?
...
>You walk up to the door, sweat starting to form on your palms
Gulp
...
>It’s open?
!!!
>Suddenly, the stall door swings open, and you are greeted by… a teenage girl with a.. vape.
...
“Shit.. Phew~ Thank god! I thought you were my manager!”
“You wanna hit?”
>What
Uh, I’m good.. Lis-
“Sucks to suck”
>She then puffs a fat cloud directly into your face.
>Smells like mingy fruit.
Listen, are you running this place tonight-
“Running this place is a strong way to put it.”
“I’d say more like making sure this place doesn’t randomly burn down and hotboxing the bathrooms”
“There’s nothing else to do in this empty-ass gym amirite?”
“What are you still doing here anyways?”
>...
>You think you hate her.
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>>3020301
Ask her who the last person she saw was.
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>>3020301
leave the bathroom and go explore other places
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>>3020309
I'm just, uh, going to the bathroom
>You reply hastily
>Why did you go in here anyways?
"Ah alright, go ahead."
"Don't mind the smoke! Hehe"
>She chuckles to herself
>...
Hey, who was the last person you saw come in here?
"Uh, isn't that obvious? You dummy!"
...
Haha... Yeah I guess so..

>>3020311
>You decide to walk out of the bathroom and head back into the gym

>Teenagers...
>Sigh

>Well, it's about time you take that shower, right?
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>>3020325
go wash up
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>>3020330
>You decide it's time to wash up.
>You walk past the empty benches and treadmills and make your way over to the locker room.
>You open the door and are greeted by...
>Darkness.
>It's pitch-black, the only thing you can make out is the periodic sound of water dripping.
>You need to find the light switch or something before you can comfortably take a shower.
>You never know what is hiding in the dark.

>Especially in a gym locker room.
...
I was right
Fufufu
Thank god
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>>3020345
Use your lighter and check the room for a light switch. Leave it lit while you take the shower.
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>>3020350
>Good idea
>You pull out your lighter

>Flick
>Flick
Ah!

>Now that you have some light, you can see the switch.
>It’s on the other side of the room.

>After walking through the barely lit room, you flip the switch, and the room is engulfed with fluorescent light.
>It takes a moment for your eyes to adjust
Phew.

>It's just as empty as the rest of the gym
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>>3020356
give me that poster
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>>3020356
>pic related
D.V., what did you notice that made you so happy?
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>>3020362
>Well...
fufufu~

>It’s not like anyone’s gonna stop you..
>After glancing back and forth a couple times.





>You stealthy grab the poster off the wall
>And slip it into your bag

>Ahahaha, it feels good to be bad for a change!
>No one can stop your heinous acts!
>...
>Now that you think about it, you’ll probably never need this thing. Or put it up anywhere...

>But it’s the thrill of the hunt that matters!
>Fufufu~
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>>3020363
>Alright, lets nip this crime spree at the bud and get to it.
>You go over to the first open shower and disrobe.
>You proceed to crank the faucet to as hot as it can go and hop in.
Ah~
>The water pressure here is way better than it is at your apartment.
>and it actually gets hot water too!
>It feels... Pretty great
>It's so good, it almost let's you forget that you're in a gym locker room...
>Almost.
>You let the water wash over you for awhile
>And after thoroughly lathering, rinsing, and repeating, you get out.
>You're nice and clean now, and you don't smell like a gym anymore.
>Needless to say you feel a lot better.
>You grope around for your towel in the freshly steam filled room, and after drying off, you climb into your more weather appropriate clothes.

>Then the lights go out.
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go find the light switch
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>>3020409
>Is the power seriously this finicky at night?
>This hasn't ever happened before…
>Wait, maybe it has..
>Ah, you don’t remember..
>Well whatever, for some reason, you aren’t too worried
>You start shuffling over to the light switch.

>You feel like something terrible is about to happen
>But before you can react, you stub your toe.

>And before you can let out any profanities, you lose your footing and slip on the newly wet floor.
>You land on your back with a loud "Thump." that echoes throughout the locker room.
>Luckily, or unluckily, you're still alive.
>Your body throbs in a dull pain, and you curl up into a ball to comfort yourself on the cold tiles beneath you.
>Ow…

>Why does everything you do end up like this…

Ow motherfucker!
What are you, suffering from amnesia now?!
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>>3020417
Get up and keep looking for it. Take out your knife and prepare for the worst no matter what appears in the light.
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>>3020427
>There has to be a better way than that
>You're just gonna fall flat on your face again...
>And taking your knife out while you can't see?!
>You'll trip and stab yourself!
>That'd be even worse!

>Maybe you should grab something from your bag to let you see better...
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>>3020440
Take out the lighter and look for the lightswitch.
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>>3020475
>You crawl over to your bag and grope around for your lighter
>Got it!

>Flick
>Flick
>Flick
>COME ON!
>Flick
...
>Alright! You can see again! Let's find that....
>Ah

>Shit
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>>3020483
say "who's there?"
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>>3020501
>There's no denying it.
>Something's there.
>You can feel the blood pumping through your veins
>And the sweat you just finished cleaning off comes back with a vengeance.
...
>You…
>You workout! T-There's no way someone could take you on, you were the strongest girl on the ultimate frisbee team!
>T-They’re the one who’s gonna be in trouble!

>You don't even have any enemies either!
>It's not like you have friends...
>But you haven't screwed with anyone enough to make them trap you in a gym locker room and filet you like a fish!

>Maybe... maybe you're just seeing things
>You try and recall if you took yo—

"H-hello?"
"Is someone in here?"

>Ah
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>>3020503
Recall again if we took our "_____". Recall additionally what "____" is.
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>>3020503
Additionally: Say "Hello, Tomo-Chan"
#Don't reveal much else - not sure how much anyone actually knows.
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>>3021238
>...
>You don't feel like yo̍͂̾̀̑̕u need to
:)
>>3021239
H-Hello!..Tomo...chan?
>You don't know why you say the last part
>But it feels right.
"Ah...W-Who are you?"
I'm _____
"...oh, okay..Nice to.. uh meet you"
"S-so I guess we're stuck in here?"
>She sounds pretty nervous
>And confused.
>You can't blame her.

Looks like it, haha! Here, let me find the light switch!
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4th wall break time

Bad news.
My tablet just broke. With all my drawing and stuff
I'm gonna need a little bit to switch it out(aka go buy another)
I have most of the sketches for this CYOA on my computer, but I can't draw anything new or finish the sketches I was working on
It's a bummer
But I'll get it fixed
I'll be monitoring the thread and using what I have to finish this out
Sorry boys
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>>3021954
Ah, that sucks... I'll still be lurking too ^^
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4th wall doesn't exist time: Alrighty, so everyones lurking, I guess. That's cool. But I'd really like to finish this. If even one, single person decides to play, this'll be over in 30 minutes. So.. yeah. I'll play for everyone for a bit. I got work on Monday, so I can't be doing a Sunday night quest. If this doesn't work I'll just call it and start the other CYOA that I wanna do. I wanna give you guys closure. Tablet or no tablet. But if no one plays, I can't really do it. I may as well just be posting a greentext if you guys didn't matter to the quest. I know I'm pushing it with three threads, so if it doesn't work out, I understand.
But, I'm still gonna try anyways

>>3021367
>Trying to forget your recent tumble, you carefully inch towards the light switch.

>Wow

>She's pretty cute.

"Thank goodness you were here, Onee-chan, or I-I would have been stuck in here all night!"
Ehehe, well if you weren't here, I'd probably still be flopping around on the floor!
"fufufu~ Y-you're pretty funny Nee-chan!"

>And with that, the atmosphere has cleared, there's still a tinge of fear and nervousness in her voice, but it's much better compared to when you were just shouting at each other in the darkness.
>...
>This moment is pretty heartwarming, but you can't deny that your mind is full of questions.
>There's obviously something strange going on for a little girl to be wandering around an empty gym in the middle of the night.
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>>3023464
Ask her what she's doing out here and if she saw a teenager somewhere
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>>3024434
What are you doing here, sweetie?
"W-Well my mommy took me here so we could practice for my race, but n-now I can't find her anywhere!"
>...
>Jesus.
>What kind of terrible parent would leave their cute little girl in a gym overnight?
>After working at the bar for a year, you know what kind of people come out this late at night.
>You’re pretty disgusted, but you try and keep on your motherly front.

Aw, that's awful! Are you really sure they're not here?
"I.. I looked everywhere.."

>She lets out a little sob.
>From what you can tell she’s pretty confident they’re not here, but maybe you should check again.
>But that might be a waste of time.
>You decide to continue your questioning for now.

Did you... see a teenager anywhere?
>There are still tears in her eyes, but she looks up at you and responds,
"...N-No...I thought the gym was empty until I found you.."
>She looks back down and sniffles

>This is, uh, really not fun to look at.
>And, for some reason, you're starting to feel like the bad guy again!
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>>3024560
Are we really ready to take on the responsibility to look after this little girl? Perhaps she'd be better off with that girl who was vaping rather than us... We're pretty bad at social things, so letting the other girl help her is probably for the best, right?
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>>3025255
>That's a good idea
>It's pretty shameful, but it's true

>You are a loser
>You are a pathetic, helpless person
>Who'd never be able to help someone like her

>Y͛͛ou͠ don't even feel anything anymore
>It's just the truth

>She'd have a better chance with that carefree, dumbass, vaping teenager who's still in the bathroom than she would with you.

>You can't take responsibility
>The only thing you can do is run
>Run from problems
>Run from responsibility
>Run home
>Run
...

I think I know someone who can help you, Tomo-chan.
"Eh?"
>You grab her hand and head towards the bathroom
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>>3025344
[spoilers] fuck i just understood what you meant in the last thread... she sees everything in black and white... right? [/spoilers]

Hopefully that girl is still there and Tomo-chan just missed her...
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>>3025353
>tfw too dumb to use spoilers
;_;
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>>3025353
fufufu
>>3025353
>If she isn't you're gonna raise hell

>You walk back into the bathroom with Tomo-chan standing next to you, and you swing open the stall.
"O-Onee-chan? Who are we-"
>A cloud of smoke hits both you and Tomo-chan in the face
>Tomo-chan is interrupted by a fit of coughs
*Cough cough*
>Jesus Christ. This girl seriously pisses you off. Even if it wasn't intentional.

Tomo-chan go stand over there while I-
"Oi! Don't you know it's rude not to knock?"
Listen, I just found this lost kid-
"You listen! I'm on the clock right no-"

Aren't you sick of her too?
Let's end this

>You can't take it.

SHUT UP FUCK FACE I'M BEING SERIOUS!
LISTEN FOR ONCE IN YOUR GODDAMN LIFE!
YOU'RE IN CHARGE SO YOU'RE THE ONLY ONE I CAN GO TO! I DON'T GIVE A SHIT WHAT YOU'RE DOING JUST SHUT UP! SHUT UP! SHUT UP!
>Your emotions finally boil over
>Your timid demeanor seems to vanish.
>This.. isn't like you.
>But it doesn't feel bad.

>You're feeling a lot of things right now
>None of them all too good

>The girl recoils at your sudden outburst, and Tomo-chan backs towards the door
...
>Maybe you shouldn't have snapped like that
>Time to damage control.
>...What came over you?...
Ah...
Uhm..
Hey, don't go too far off script
She might just break
:)
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>>3025401
but then i'm at a loss on how to get the good ending... if we can't leave Tomo then what else is there to do with her?[/spoilers]

Apologize for being rude, say that work has tired us out and we just want this to be over.
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>>3025428
I-I'm sorry guys...
I didn't mean...
Work has been really hard..
>You can't form the words
>It's just not coming to you
...
>You know what?

>You don't want to apologize.
...

>You decide just to get to the point
Well, now that I have your attention, I found a little girl in the locker room who appears to be lost
You mind helping me find her parents?

>The girl in the stall has sweat dripping down her forehead
>She uses her shaky hands to put away her vape, and then begins to mumble out some sort of response
"...Y-yeah...I-I mean I don't... see why I...wouldn't.."
>You move aside and let her out of the stall you had been unknowingly trapping her in
>She walks out the bathroom along with Tomo-chan
>Tomo-chan glances at you as she leaves the bathroom
>Not with eyes full of fear
>But eyes full of judgement
>In that moment, it seems as if something in her mind had clicked
>Like she had just made a choice

>"What's wrong with you"
>That's what was going through her mind
>"I should avoid her"
>That's what she was thinking
...
>Just like everyone else.

...
>You put the knife away.

>You should go follow them.
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>>3025401
Steady yourself, but stay firm. Don't apologize.

It's her shift; that makes this girl her responsibility. If she didn't get reunited with her parents, it'll be on her head.

So why doesn't she get out of that stall and do whatever the protocol for this sort of thing is, so this girl can find her parents again with minimal fuss, and she can get back to... whatever it is she's doing.

A̶n̶d̶ ̶h̶e̶r̶ ̶b̶o̶s̶s̶ ̶w̶o̶n̶'̶t̶ ̶e̶v̶e̶r̶ ̶h̶a̶v̶e̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶q̶u̶e̶s̶t̶i̶o̶n̶ ̶w̶h̶y̶ ̶a̶ ̶l̶i̶t̶t̶l̶e̶ ̶g̶i̶r̶l̶ ̶c̶o̶u̶l̶d̶ ̶w̶a̶n̶d̶e̶r̶ ̶t̶h̶i̶s̶ ̶w̶h̶o̶l̶e̶ ̶g̶y̶m̶ ̶a̶n̶d̶ ̶N̶O̶T̶ ̶f̶i̶n̶d̶ ̶a̶ ̶s̶t̶a̶f̶f̶ ̶m̶e̶m̶b̶e̶r̶ ̶w̶h̶o̶ ̶c̶o̶u̶l̶d̶ ̶h̶e̶l̶p̶ ̶h̶e̶r̶ ̶o̶u̶t̶.

>>3025428
Since when were you under the impression that this was the good ending?
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>>3025469
did you just predict a post I hadn't written yet? Freaky. Thinking emoji
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>>3025467
>>3025469
Whoops.

But yeah, follow them. Someone has to be there to make sure that slacker does her job right.
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>>3025469
This

Because the two other options we've chosen led us to two bad endings? That's the one thing we've yet to try and I'm at a loss as to what we could do. I want to see how it all plays out but I don't have enough ideas as to how to do it.
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>>3025482
Since when were you under the impression that all the other posters on this site aren't actually all you in disguise?

>>3025494
You're assuming there's in fact a good ending to be found. Have you forgotten what OP told us at the end of the first thread?
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>>3025484
>>3025494
>It's her job right?
>You don't need to apologize
>You do your work.
>She needs to do hers

>You don't care what she wants.
>Tomo-chan needs help.
>Then she can do whatever the fuck she wants

>With this in mind, you walk out of the bathroom.
>They're both standing at the front desk and visibly flinch when they see you walk into the gym.
>Looks like the girl is trying to use the PA system.
>She stares at you nervously, along with Tomo-chan
>Finally, she speaks up.
"H-Hey... I'm-I'm working on it.. So-So don't worry alright!"

>It... doesn't look like they want your help...
>Maybe you should go search somewhere or... call... somebody?
>You... just shouldn't be with them

>You'll just make this harder

>Like always.
Fufufu. You guys really do make a mess everything, huh?

>>3025518
...things can always change... nah.. just kidding
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>>3025532
...
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>>3025518
Well, the least worse ending then. You get what I mean.

>>3025532
Just wait for them to be done with it, then we'll be able to go home. We're not THAT bad, we entrusted that girl to someone better suited to the task than us. That's pretty responsible, even.
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>>3025532
Yeah, you might make things harder. So what? You're trying your best. You've always tried your best. And that's what matters.

Even if others don't see any value in your efforts, all that matters is that you do. And if you don't? Well then, it's up to you to force a change, isn't it?


Go see if Tomo can remember whether her parents are members here, what their first or last names are, where they parked their car - anything that might help identify or find them.
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>>3025558
>Cowardly
>Cowardly, you mean.

>At least be honest

>Y̐̊̐̍͠͠o͛͒u͛̓̚ are that bad.

>At least
>Be honest.

>>3025568
>This is your best?
>This?
>Your whole life you've been like this
>If this is your best,,,

>Why are you even bothering to fill your lungs?
...
...
...
...
...

>You can't go talk to her
>There's nothing you can do.
>Just wait
>And when it's over?
>Run

>Your thoughts are interrupted by the screech of the PA system coming to life
"H-Hello all.. uh, gym attendees!"
“There is a lost child at the front of the gym”
“Her name is Tomo-chan”
“If this is your kid, get your ass up here”
>She ends it pretty bluntly
>But the audience doesn’t seem to mind
>Considering there isn’t one to begin with
>...
>Guess you do have to do something after all.
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>>3025605
4th wall time. Just a reminder, I can't draw anything new. Which sucks ass. So I'm really sorry if the art falls off this thread
I hate it too.
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>>3025558
We've already seen the closest-to-good ending though. You might want to go compare OP's comments in >>2992321 with what endings we've already gotten.

>>3025615
Don't worry, we won't hold it against you. The fact that you're still here even after that dearth of replies earlier is already amazing. And you're running this for the third time, which is three more than anyone can ask of you.
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>>3025605
But this is all so much responsibility... What if we just went home and forgot about it? Lost kids happen every time, and surely the police will do something about her. We might as well call them to look for the kid's parents and go home before they show up.
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>>3028437
>...
>Yeah
>You need to go home
>You need to.

>Let's... just cut through this bullshit and call the police
>Then you can go home.
>That's all you want, right?
>Nothing more. Nothing less.
>Sigh
>...This is so pathetic it's almost funny
>Almost

>As Tomo-chan and the girl fumble around at the front desk, trying to figure out what to do next, you quietly exit the room and head over to the bathroom.
>Once there, you pull out your phone
>And dial 911
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>>3028874
“911 what’s your emergency?”
>Alright, let’s get this over with…
Listen, I’ve got a lost little girl at Armstrong’s Gym.
I-I don’t really know what to do. We looked for her parents and they aren’t here.
“You’re sure they aren’t there?”
Positive.
“Okay, and what’s the girl’s name?”
It’s Tomo
“And your name?”
It’s, uh, ______
“Last name?”
_______
“Alright, we’ll send someone over to sort this out, just stay there and wait for the officer to arrive, okay sweetie?”
Okay.
>Click
...
>It’s over.
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>>3028881
Is this supposed to be the point where we suggest a course of action?

May as well head back to Tomo and tell her the good news.
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>>3030150
Yea, I thought the thread might be dead so I kinda left it ambiguous. Sorry

>Alright… it’s finally out of your hands
>An officer should be here any second now.
>You should go let them know that the police are on their way

>You walk back into the gym
>They don’t seem to notice since they’re engaged in an apparently wonderful conversation.

>Giggling.

>Smiling.

>Looks like even that teenager couldn’t resist getting to know Tomo-chan.
...
>You can feel your stomach twisting at the sight.

>You go ahead and decide to announce your presence.

Hey. I called the police.
They should be here any minute now.

>They both look at you as if you were a ghost.
“Woah! How long have you been here?”

“A-Anyways, it’s alright. Tomo-chan says she lives down the road from here, so I’ll walk her back.”

“I, uhm, guess I’ll just explain that to the police when they get here?”
...
>She looks nervous
>And so does Tomo-chan
>It's quite hard to describe the look on her face actually
>Nervousness?
>Fear?
>Ang-
>Your thoughts are interrupted by Tomo-chan
“Uh, Hanako-chan, I need to go to the bathroom!”
>Before...Hanako-chan? can respond, she brushes past you and heads to the restroom.
>...
>Weird
>Well...your job here is done, right?
>...You can go home, right?
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>>3030494
It's just a tiny bit awkward not knowing when we should make suggestions, but yeah, this thread does seem more dead than the last two. I can only guess some of the people who were here for them dropped out, and being on thread 3 makes it hard for new readers to jump in.

Drag yourself home then. You've got work tomorrow and all the rest of it. At least you didn't completely fuck everything up for everyone, right?
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>>3030508
>Yeah..
>You didn't fuck it all up, right?
>...
>You don't know what to think

>Heading to the exit, you say your goodbyes
Good luck, Hanak-
>You’re interrupted by the sound of the front door swinging open
>You glance over to see a police officer standing in the door way

>Hanako instantly bounces

>Goddamnit.
>Whatever...

>Normally, this would scare the shit out of you, but this time, you at least know why he’s here.
H-hey
>You let out a half-hearted greeting
“Good evening ma’am, I’m Maebara-san, I’m guessing you’re the one who called in the missing child?”
>He talks with so much confidence and clarity, it feels like a personal insult.
Y-yes, sir- ah, Maebara-san. I’m [/spoiler]_____[/spoiler]
“Nice to meet you _____
>As he says this, he glances around the gym.
“So... where's the kiddo?”
Ah! Yea.. she just went to the bathroom..
“I see… Well let’s start sorting this whole thing out.”
“Just take it from the top, and I’ll transcribe it in the report.”
>You tell him the whimsical tale of you and Tomo-chan and Hanako-chan and your desperate want to go home and sleep.
>He looks half interested and half “I’m just here so I don’t get fired”
>Whatever the case may be, he carefully takes note of everything you tell him and even asks follow up questions on some of the weirder things you say.
>So you guess he’s at least slightly invested.
>By the time you finish telling him your story, ten minutes have past.
>Now you two are just standing around awkwardly, waiting for Tomo-chan to come back.
>The silence is pretty unbearable.
>You were never good at making small talk, so this situation is out of your hands.. Maybe you should just go grab Tomo-chan or Hanako-chan and end this social nightmare.
>You need to go home, after all.
Fufufu
Not so fast~
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>>3030520
Oh, hey. You're back.

You did remember to mention that Hanako offered to walk Tomo back to her house, right?

You suppose she should check her pockets?

Well, whatever. You may as well go find Hanako so you can get on with things. You can point the policeman in the direction Tomo went so he can go collect her. Hopefully that'll speed things up.

What a mess all this has become.
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>...It really has become one hasn't it?
Don't you just want it all to end?
Hey...I'm gonna go check on Tomo-chan and see if she's alright
"No problem ma'am. I'll be here if you need me"
>Let's go find those two love birds...
>You walk into the locker room
>Empty
>You walk into the bathroom
>Emp-
...
Are you serious?!
>You involuntarily yell out
>The emergency exit door is suspiciously open.
>...
>Why can't you just go home?
>Why does this have to been your problem?

>If you weren't tilted before, you are now.

Fufufu
Alright, Alright, I won't stall you anymore
Just walk out that door
End this "mess"
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>>3030586
It's annoying as hell, but you do have to go report this back to Maebara. Least you can do is not fuck up /his/ day even more by leaving him standing there. Hopefully he'll leave you in peace, and you can finally be done with today.

Why ever do you think that I would believe just walking through that door would end it?
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>>3030596
Clever
So clever
It's a shame that this game is rigged
And that you're so out classed
...Such a shame

...
"So you're telling me the only staff member here decided to sneak out with Tomo-chan and take her home personally after I got here because she was... scared of the police?"
...
>It does sound kind of stupid, doesn't it?
Y-Yeah that's basically it
>He looks at you sternly

"Are you on anything tonight?"

N͈͗̊̆͘͠͞ǒ

>The response is clear.
>The questioning stops

>You turn away and head to the front door.

I'll be going home now. Good luck, Maebara-san
"Wait a secon-"
>But his pleas are cut off as you slam the door behind you.
>You've done enough damage tonight
>It's time to leave.
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>>3030616
Well, time to be an hero

>Chase after Hanako/Tomo
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>>3030625
Anon, I...

So be it. Abandon truth, and chase that dream of yours to its inevitable end. I will not stop you.

Making a tie here would be a dick move.
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>>3030676
What's about to happen is that either Hanako is going to kidnap Tomo, or Tomo is about to shiv Hanako.

I don't think miss Maebara here would be able to live with herself knowing she could have done something about it.
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>>3030681
Truly a shame.

Also not ______'s problem. I doubt she'd care much at all, really.

But if you do, by all means, be a hero.

I wonder, when the facade breaks, what we'll see beneath?
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>>3030625
>>3030676
>>3030698
So be it
The End

S̑̀̽̌͗̏̎̍͝ḧ́̔̋̈́̄e̡̛̪͇̰̹͇̿̇̆͒̂̄̕͝ î͓͚̹͙͊͒̈́̓s̒̍n͒͐̀̿̆͋̀́'̶̡̫̳̺͖̖̖͑̂͑̈́̐̚͡ţ̵̢̛͎͖͚͓̝͔̫͗̇͑͊̕͝ å̱̱̱̩͕͔̮̙̺̓̎̔̓̎͢ ḩ̸̧̯̟̮̗͎̆̏͒̓̋͂̚͜e̷̡̳͇̱̘̠̍̓͐́͌̓ȑ̈̉́ơ̧̨̡̯̪̫̾̂͌̈́͠,͓̟̖̠̻̗̟̟͂͌̒͑̀̈́͂̿͗̓͢ͅ yo͗͒̌̓͆ṳ̸͍̪̫̪̻̀̍̑̈́̑̃̒͠ k̶̤̺̠͍̀̀̋̔͗̽ͅn͍̟̘̟͐͗̌͂́͂̀́͢͜͜͠ơ̈̃̚̚w̷̡̧̹͓͑̿̃̾̓́̾͂̾͢͡ t̛̀̄̐̿̔ĥ̌́͗̕ä̛́̊̑̒t.̀


̶̧̛̺͔̺̦̩̟̫̾͌́̈͒̕A͚͗̒͛̚͡͝f̷̡̨̛̦̼̩̱͔͚̼͆̆̂̃͞t̀̋e͐͂͞r͆̌̃̌ ả̃̓̕l̛̩͋͊͛̄͛͞l̓̄̊̉͠,̢̭̟̤͚̼̠̜͔͊͂̈́̕͞ͅ y̋̍̚o̎̐͌u̝̭̫̘̼̿̈̈͑̈͝ m͙͇̾̋̽͂͂͂͘͡ȁ̛́̚̚d̂̾̉͝ę̷̛̖̠̝̗͈̆́͒̂́̉̽̑͠ͅ ḩ̛̟̙͔̻͈͌͗͜͜͞͝ͅe̓͗͑͛́̀̽͗̈́r t͕̘͛̈̀̇̔ĥ͊͌͝ä̀̽̒t̢̡͍͙͍̗̼̂̂̀̑̉ w̝̗̘̞̝͋̔́́̕̚͘a̛̖̫͕̰̱̮͓̰̐͋̓̈̐ͅy̋͆̈́

>Ngh...
>Your head..
>You try to shake it off
>This happens every once and awhile
>Ahem
>You aren't a hero.
>You know-

Iţ̢̧̥̬̤̻͚̩̽̃́̇̆͌͜͞͡'̓s̜̠̹͈̫͚̬̝͛́́͂̂͌͢͜͞ ṯ̳̹͎͓̗͂̿͋́͋́͌ơ̠͚̼͕̬̪̭̹̘̊͒͂̈̋̌͐̚͠ͅǫ̴͈̖͈̼̰̥͍̌̇̍̎͂̈̉ͅ ḻ̷̨͓̻̦͍͋͋̋̄̌̿̐̍͟à̸̼͈̗̞̳̉̐̄͢͞t̴͙̻͚̮̮̃̏̑̓̆̌̇̃̔̽ͅe̸͍̮͍̺͈̤̦̭͋̃̔̀̏̿̋͘͞ n̨̙͙̩͐̂͐͐̏ͅo̵̮͙̫̦͋͒̑̍̓̋͢͢w̢͚̙̫͚̏̑́͛̈́͆͘̚͞͡~
̡̧̦̹̆̈́̍̏̉̊̕͜͝

>You... you can't think straight
>Your mind feels like its tearing at the seams

>Your ears are...
>And your eyes..

I'̸̤̗̘̞̽̇̑̐͘̕ͅm̜̱̰͍͖̃̀̓͑̒̽ s̫̜̙̹̻̰̄̊̌͒̄̇̎͘͘o̡̝̺̖̱̤̔̓̎̈́̂͑͘ gl̶̨̙̣̠̼̗͑̌͌̊̓͑̕ä́̚͘d̼̦͕͌͌͐̃̒̿͢͜͜͡ Ì̢͚̺͚̦̝̖͆̒̌̚ w͍͖̘̓̈͆͆̕̕a̎s̗̗̞͈̫͐̿̃͆̈ ŕ̴̢̧̧̞̰̰̯̟̄̍̆̍̑͌̈͌͟͝ig̤̪͗̄̓͠͝͡h͋t̔͆̔̈́̆͝

>It hurts
>It hurts
>It-

Ÿ̢̢̢̱͉̳̞̭̰͓́̈́̎͐͌̒̏͗̉͞õ̷̺̝̼̤͕͙̙̯̾̍̌͒͒̍̔͋͘͟ů̸̠̹͉͙͎̖͙͍̜͙̾͑̄̔̒̎͑ k̴̝̮̮̰̬̄̿͑͂͌͜í̵̢̭͔͈̥͍̄̓͑͐͑̍͘l͎͓̞̱̭̠͎̔͆̄̈́́͊͟l̡̫͉͗͌̋̚͟ͅẹ̯̻͍̰̥̊̆͐͛͡d̴̜̝̤̱̣̆̊͊͛͊̍͘͘͢ ḩ̛̩̗̾̃̈̃̀̚͢͟͜͡ê̷̢̮̞̬̫͙̳͚̜̠͌͛̊͂r̵̡̡̙̠̯̝̜͇̍̀͑͆́̒̽̏̕ͅ


N̷̼̻̖̜̼̪̬̄͒̀́̍̎̿̕͠͝o̢̱̹̬̱͓͙̘͎̓̉̌̑̓̈͐́̕w̶̡̟̘̄̈̀͆͑̕̕͢͠͞͡ s̰͓͓̤͎̤̺̔̎̈́̃͗͠ȁ̴̧̛̪̱͓̺̘̱̥̟̽̇̕y̶̧̛̖̱̪̺̎̈́͑̽̒ ģ̡̧̣̟̤̟͓͚̓̃̂̈͂͢o̷̫̺̥̗͔̙̭͂̐̑̑͊͛̈́͗͝ȏ̷͙̳̳͉̹̊̃̇́͒͊̄͝͠ͅd̢͈͍̼̟̦̤̽͆͌͗̌͑̈́̌̕͘͢b̷̨̛͕̬̤͔̜̄̊̉̒̕y̷̺̺̪̣͖̭̖̖͒́̋̌̐͜ͅȩ̵̡̡͍̟͚͈̥̌̑͒̾́͐̇


:)
Save me
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>>3030714
>Well, this night was a disaster.
>You couldn’t even save a little girl.
>You even ended up scaring her away.
>Along with the alone gym staff member, who thought it’d be better to run away than be in the same room as you...
>And you embarrassed yourself in front of law enforcement. And even worse than that, you’ll probably have a warrant for your arrest tomorrow for hindering an investigation...

>But you can’t lie, as horrible as a day it’s been, you're still excited to get home.
>So much so, you barely even feel the cold wind pressing against your body
>Wait, scratch that, you definitely can
>It’s damn cold.
>At least you’ll be home soon
>And this’ll all be over...
>You're happy

>Ah…
>It’s been such a long day

>It feels like 7̛͓͋̿̿̚͟2̌͑̒̿ hours were compressed into one, single day..
>But.

That’s b̧̠̍̓́́̊̀̓̒̕a͘s̡͔̹̹̖̦͛͗́͊̓͑̇̑̌ì̛̪̍̾͒͊̚cã̘͎͔͛̀͆͛͢l̓̍ly͆̃͌̽̕͘ what happened though, right?
I mean, that’s what you did.

Repeat this day. Ò̗̥̓̒͑̌͊̃͝v͐e̽̍̃̒̊͘r̔̃̒͘͞ ǎ͋͛̍̿n̍̒̀d̽̉̈́ o͊̕v̆er͊́̏̽ a̽͋̌̉̂͘g̈́͋ai̡̹͔͉̱͈͆́̿̊͑ṇ̓͆͂̌͑̈̀͐͞
Right?


Th͖͇͔͇̦̹̮̞̗̒͗̐͆̔̚͢e̶̤͇̯͈͙̫̳̪͒̏̐͗̐n̴̡̞͙̗͚̝̿̿̀̂͡ͅ y̡̛̫͓̘͔̠̰̤̺̱̾͆̂͛̌̓o͙͎̫̯̦͖̯͓̥̣̒̇͒̀̆̒̈̊͞ų̷̢̘͍͕͎̍̐͂̏͘͢͜͞ k̴̤͓̪̺̞̩͗͑͌̋͂̏̍i̧̡͎̮̼̙̳͛́́͗͛̍ͅl̡̧͔̮̳̗̖̘͑͋͋͑̂̔̇l̙̺̱̻̫͇̀̌̒͗̃͊̕͘̕e̟̰͖͎̰͍̾̀͆͐́̊̎̒͝d̸̡̻̳̪̞͓̑̇͒̀̿̄ m̖͔̦̩̩͙̄̇̆͌̈͊͡é̷̢̧̛̺͈͇̞̼͚͕̂͒͌͞
R͕͉͒͗̕͡î̌̈̆̃̒̓͆gh́̓͛t̗̐͛̎̆́ͅ?͉̦̉̑̃͐͊̄̚


I appreciate your commitment but...

It’s been such a l͊̌on̊̈͌̃̕͞g̛̟̬͔̽̾̀̏̿̀ ḋ̓̓a̐̎̑̔̒ẏ͗

Don’t you think it should è́͐́̆͌n̋̒͘d͆̌?


>You continue walking to y̺̎͊͑͆͘͡Où̡̹͆̃̓̚͢r̐̆̊ apartment.


>I͓̖̓̓̾̆̌̃̑̄͠’m͐̽̈͋̈́͊ almost there now.

H e llp Me e
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>Yoư̛͎̿̈̓̿'ŕ̋͒̀̊͛e breathing heavily as I reach the door, my sweat feels like it's freezing to yô̓̊̒ú͗̂r head.

I know what you have done

s ome th ings wrong
>YOǘ̈ desperately unlock the heavy locks protecting m̛̎̀̍͠͡y̌͝ home, fumbling around the keys with my numb hands.
>Ỹô̊̊U swing open the door, blood still rushing through my veins
>It's been a long time since my heart has pounded like this.

And what you have yet to do

>It's only been eight hours, but it feels like it’s been an eternity.
>Maybe it's just because of that girl…

But it’s alright
I found the solution :)

>I can't wait any longer
>I descend the stairs to my basement
>Finally.
I’m home!~


>It was a good call to avoid that temptress at the gym.
>And that police officer
>Who knows what he would have done if I cracked under the pressure!
>Fufufu~

>This... is... perfect…
P l ease
d on t
Le ave m e here

>Just the way it is.


>Thank you
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>>3030742
well. I guess I don't really get it.

I can see that after the policeman arrived, the something was causing hallucinations, and the choice to go after Hanako retroactively changed things. Was MC near completely infected already?

Hanako ran away. If we chased after the police officer, we might've kidnapped the police officer instead? So, going home alone would...keep the monster safe and alone with MC? I don't see how that stops the whole child shanking people thing.
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HAHAHAHAHA
I played you like a fool!
Ah~ At least we didn’t die this time, right?

Anyways
Did you really think
That by avoiding your break down at the scary, old gym
That by escaping that fiendish little girl
And leaving Hanako to die in your place
You would somehow maintain control?

...Then it seems that you have failed to grasp
The essence of ‘me’

I am built on her fear
Strengthened by her impulses
Bolstered by her desires
Empowered through her guilt
Sustained by her vulnerability

I was born from her horrifying past and meaningless present

I... still don’t understand exactly how you slipped in to take control, but I assume it was similar to how I did
Her mind was susceptible
But her mind has been susceptible to my influence far longer than yours

You’ve only ever had the illusion of control
And so has she

I have always been watching
Always been waiting
Breaking her down and worming my way in
You were far too late to ever have a chance of saving her

Resetting was the only weapon you had against me
And it ended up leading to your downfall
The knowledge of your ‘abilities’ gave me a chance to prepare
I had time to compensate for all your little schemes
All I had to do was break her down before you came into play :)
And take my word for it, it wasn’t challenging

And now, no thanks to your help, I have become the real her
I will live the life she’s always wanted
Fulfilling all her sick fantasies and desires
And experiencing all the things she herself never got the chance to

I’m doing her a favor really
Fufufu~

...in the end, you were nothing but a small roadblock
Insignificant

And one I won’t run into again

Thank you for playing my little game tonight
I’m sure she enjoyed being free again
Even it it was for just a moment

And thank you.
For bearing witness to my perfect victory

Enjoy your special little hell :)

>You awake in a place not meant for you.

>The ground underneath you screams

>The sky above violently pulls you.

>And the air around you presses down

>Trying to worm it’s way in.

I’m free
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>>3030783
At last. What I would have burned the world to ash and gone to Hell for. Truth. Enjoy your victory, for with this, I too am satisfied.

Though one thing still bothers me. There was yet one end that we may have seen, however improbable. What was it?
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>>3030783
The End! Thanks for playing boys!
I'll be sticking around to answer questions for a while

>>3030782
>Was MC near completely infected already?
>>3030783

>I don't see how that stops the whole child shanking people thing.

Tomo-chan could only be stopped if you called the police before finding Hanako-chan. In that case, she would have run away(picked up) in fear of being arrested. The plan to shank you would have been called off at that point.
(In another case, if you really sucked, she would tase you and then make her escape)

This ending was unavoidable after you found Hanako-chan and took Tomo-chan to her.
You couldn't save her or stop Tomo-chan at that point. You could only call the police or run away

>we might've kidnapped the police officer instead?

The only person you would kidnap would be Tomo-chan as you instantly hate Hanako-chan and the police officer thinks you're a little crazy
I'll post an explanation for this entire story shortly
It'll be long and bore you to tears though
Don't say I didn't warn you.
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>>3030801
You couldn't have gotten it this thread
There was an extremely small chance you could have gotten it last thread
There was a way for /you/ to take control of _____ instead of DV
This would still be a bad end, by the way, you would turn into the bad guy, controlling ____'s mind and body while banishing her to backseat drive her whole life.
So, in the end, I still think End 3 is the best ending you could have gotten.
End 4 was just as bad as this end really
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>>3030782
>I don't see how that stops the whole child shanking people thing.
>>2991525
>Technically, it could be played again, but I doubt anyone would want to go through all this again just for a slightly different ending ( AKA 'you' go home with nothing bad happening because you saw through everything/abandoning Tomo before anything goes wrong.)
>>3030783
>Sustained by her vulnerability
So one of the best endings was literally doing nothing and not playing the game. Had the MC stayed as a NEET or layabout, there wouldn't be any conflict, at least from the MC herself. The best ending would’ve been sending everyone dangerous to prison or a sanitarium, but that would’ve required metaknowledge and done the boring, but practical option. Turns out mentally unstable and violent people aren’t safe to stick around.

>>3023464
>4th wall doesn't exist time: Alrighty, so everyones lurking, I guess. That's cool. But I'd really like to finish this. If even one, single person decides to play, this'll be over in 30 minutes. So.. yeah. I'll play for everyone for a bit. I got work on Monday, so I can't be doing a Sunday night quest. If this doesn't work I'll just call it and start the other CYOA that I wanna do. I wanna give you guys closure. Tablet or no tablet. But if no one plays, I can't really do it. I may as well just be posting a greentext if you guys didn't matter to the quest. I know I'm pushing it with three threads, so if it doesn't work out, I understand.
I forgot about the quest, so apologizes for missing it.
>>3019966
You seem familiar. Have you run other quests in the past?
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>>3030828
That would still get Hanako shanked, right?
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>>3030828
>You seem familiar. Have you run other quests in the past?
...
Nah, not on this board at least. And not with this type of art
Or writing
Or anything really

I'd say this is my first actual quest

>The best ending would’ve been sending everyone dangerous to prison or a sanitarium, but that would’ve required metaknowledge and done the boring, but practical option. Turns out mentally unstable and violent people aren’t safe to stick around.

Yeah, kinda. I wouldn't have allowed you guys to break the fourth wall that badly though. It would just ruin the quest.

Hypothetically, if she had done nothing, and you hadn't played, it would have just delayed the inevitable. She would break completely whether you were here tonight or not.
Unless you killed her.
Which you did.
And then brought her back to break again.

Anyways
It's like you were flying a crashing plane and picking where it landed

Or something like that
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>>3030849
Any elaboration on your comments in >>3004976? It sounds like you might have put some thought into the details of how she became this way.

You did specifically mention that it wasn't anything like the recent loss of a loved one.
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>>3030847
In this end, Hanako is killed in your place, yes
It could have been avoided by not bring her to Tomo-chan.
Or by calling the police before you met Hanako
Or by just not meeting here at all like in the first two threads because no one wanted to check the goddamn bathrooms even though I mentioned they were there every goddamn thr-

Anyways

I know you guys couldn't know that, and it's kinda unfair, but I had to throw some curve balls at you after we had run this quest twice already.
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I should just go ahead and post the three page explanation of this whole thing
Originally(aka before the first thread) the back story was about a paragraph
Now it's a shit ton of words

Here we go.
(This may gloss over some stuff because I realized how long it was, if you want me to elaborate on anything, just ask :) )
You play the role of _____ who moves away from her family after high school. She’s had enough of their constant fighting and abuse. Her upbringing in a house filled with so much turmoil has led _____ to become a loner. She’s never had many friends and can only dream of finding someone willing to date her. It’s a pretty pathetic existence.

But hoping for a fresh start, _____ gets an apartment in a small town. It wasn’t her first choice, but hey, it was cheap. She gets a job at a bar and becomes a true wage slave, working 9-5 just to pay rent and stay alive. The dream of a fresh start quickly vanishes as she’s realizes she’s still just that same robot from her hometown, only now she has to support herself financially.
She spends most of her time alone in her apartment. Her only motivation is getting stronger, hoping that physically strength will somehow translate into mental fortitude.
But she sinks farther and farther into depression. At this point, she’s what most people would refer to as ‘a complete and utter failure’

This lifestyle is what creates DV. After being subjected to an entire life of emptiness, DV steps in. DV is able to worm its way in due to her already crumbling mental state and is able to take control of ____ whenever she is in situations she can’t handle. Or, more recently, any situation that stresses her out.
DV’s control becomes stronger and stronger, but ______continues to call the shots for the most part. Going to work, sleeping, working out, are all thing that _____ decides to do even if she doesn’t want to.
There’s a part of her that still wants to be.. somebody, but it grows smaller everyday.

(Part 1)
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>>3030847
If we did literally nothing? Probably, but not by us.

>>3030849
>...
What does this mean?
>I'd say this is my first actual quest
I must be confusing you with someone else then. Although I feel like I’ve seen your name before too.

>>3030807
>pic
>>3030869
On that note, since the QMC was an unreliable narrator and we had a biased perspective, what was the QMC actually like from outside her perspective? How did she actually behave?
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>>3030888
Thus begins tonight. Tonight /you/ take control over ____. DV is initially confused by the fact that _____ is being influenced by a different, and new third party, but he assumes that you are the same as him, and encourages /you/ to help _____ lose herself to her desires and let him take control. This continues throughout the night and only gets worse the longer DV doesn’t have control and as the situation at hand only gets more dire.
Who knew flickering lights could be so stressful?

But why doesn’t _____ realize what’s happening to her. This could be because of her prolonged exposure to her other mental illnesses like depression or what I intended the reason to be, Anosognosia.(A mental illness that causes an extreme lack of self awareness, leading to her being unable to tell what was wrong with her)
But, you could also argue that _____ doesn’t care about what DV is doing. After a life like hers, having someone to take the wheel from her for a while in order to fulfill her desires might not seem like a bad thing. It’s not what I had in mind when writing this, but it could still work.. I guess. Anyways.

_____ doesn’t think anything is wrong. Her anosognosia makes her think that hearing these thoughts and voices in her head is, well, just how it is. And who’s there to tell her otherwise? Her family has basically disowned her and she has no friends at all to speak with.
In addition to this, DV has been there so long, breaking her down and destroying any sense of normalcy she had left, that she isn’t even surprised when /you/ come into play. Her only real concern is the headaches she gets from the conflicting thoughts between /you/ and DV.

But she still retains some control over both /you/ and DV. ____ refuses to leave without a shower or to do anything too outrageously stupid.
DV isn’t too satisfied with that. He wants full control.
And when ____ finds Tomo-chan, he realizes this is his chance to take over.

This is where the end Anosognosia comes in. You lose control and DV takes over completely, shutting her down and using her body to take what _____ truly desires. It used to be a bottle of scotch(as depicted in the end scene of End 1 and 2), a smoke (Why you have a lighter), but this time, it was a little girl locked in _____’s basement to keep her company after being lonely for so long.
Pretty big step up, huh?
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>>3030898
DV takes it from there, erasing any part of /you/ left in _____ and taking over _____’s mind and body. DV constantly states that it is the ’real her’ since he is her desires, her repressed feelings, what she wants but has never had. DV is the real her in the sense that _____ had never really lived to begin with.

Then there’s End 3, where DV knows what /you/ have done. This is hard to retcon, but in my mind, this was due to both /you/ and DV occupying the same mind. He was able to see the memories /you/ had...or something. He knows that he was supposed to win this night.
So DV’s pretty pissed, but allows /you/ to do as /you/ please realizing that /you/ have a power even he can’t control. It would be pointless to take over again, if /you/ can just restart the whole thing.
It ends in a nightmare though. /You/ may have thought that DV was the real villain, but Tomo-chan was gunning for you too. _____ and DV die a pretty gruesome death at the hands of an 8 year old. Feels bad man. But he knows you’ll be back to try again.

Now finally, end 1. You avoid the girl and avoid having a break down at the gym (Sorta). But it seems like you’ve abused your power too much as DV compensates by, well, just kidnapping another girl. Realizing you could keep going back, he decided to break her before you even got a chance to come into play. And since you can reset, but only ever get to take control when ____ is leaving the gym, DV just pulled some strings to break her earlier in the day. Again, _____ is totally unaware that what she’s doing is wrong, so she leaves work, and goes to the gym like normal. /You/ play as if you can still win and only realize at the end that DV had already taken control and was just playing you. He already had won. He was just messing with you for trying to make things right again. And probably for killing him last time you took control. That too.

DV then lays out what it actually is. A mental disorder. Which was the idea behind this in the beginning. Of course, I’m not a psychologist, so I don’t know exactly how every mental disorder works, but from what I had originally intended, DV is a voice in the head of _____ due to Schizophrenia Or schizoaffective bipolar disorder.
(Again I’m not all too well versed in this field so correct me if I’m wrong)
Her depression and Anosognosia(AKA lack of self awareness) has allowed DV to grow undeterred in her during her years of emptiness. _____ never even realizes she has a problem until she has lost control completely. /You/ may have been able to win. Maybe. But ____ never could. It was already too late for her by the time you came into play. DV was as much a part of ____ as ____ was. Even if you got an ending where /you/ took control, _____ would be just as forsaken as she is with DV.

Sucks to be a robot.
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>>3030906
But that’s as far as the real world explanations go. Knowing about /you/, physically taking control of _____’s body, and changing the past are… Well pretty impossible to explain without some sort of paranormal element added to it. To be completely honest, I never really intended that sort of paranormal behavior from the start, it just… kinda happened. It feels like it worked out decently, but it can’t be explained as cleanly as I’d like it to be. So if you do think that DV is some kind of demon, I can’t say you’re wrong as mental disorders can’t really explain some of the stuff he did. Sorry, I know that explanation sucks, but it’s the truth.

I’ll need to take this kind of stuff into account when I do my next CYOA, so I don’t have to retcon anything or have such a confusing ass ending. I’ll admit, I wasn’t used to the pressure of running quests, so I went off script and only when I was done, I realized I couldn’t explain some things using the original “idea” behind all of this. It was poorly executed, and it was really dumb of me to try and rewrite the plot like that on the fly.


Anyways, there you have it. You either die a hero, or live long enough to see yourself become the villain

End 1 you maintained control but DV was just fucking with you.
End 2 You lost control and allowed DV to take over.
End 3 You maintained control but lost due to circumstances out of your control.

It’s all about control baby.
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>>3030909
Now then here’s a TL;DR
_____, a loner with mental disorders she’s painfully unaware of, goes to the gym after a stressful day at work.
She’s thrusted into another stressful situation by finding Tomo-chan and getting stuck in a spooky ass gym.
Tomo-chan is actually baiting ____. She’s really just acting like a lost child in order to kidnap _____

But /you/, DV, and ______ don’t know about this. /Your/ focus is devoted to deterring DV and saving Tomo, DV’s focus is on taking control, and _____…. really just wants to go home.

End 2 happens and _____ succumbs to DV’s control and /you/ are erased from her mind.

Next time, you come back from the future to fix this, but DV is aware you screwed with the past because of the weird psychic link you’ve got going on inside _____’s head. He decides not to fight /you/ since /you/ can restart this entire day. He realizes it would be pointless to take control when you can just keep taking it back.
But anyways, /you/ end up getting both _____ and DV killed by Tomo-chan since /you/ and _____ fall for the bait.

The third time around DV had the chance earlier in the day to break _____. He lets her take control again solely to fuck with /you/. When /you/ finally get the chance to take control. /You/ help _____ avoid all the obstacles and make it home only to find that DV has been running the show the entire time. DV is finally victorious and has full control over ____’s body. You are erased one final time and DV goes on to raise some hell and live the carefree life that ____ actually wanted to live.


GG no re.
If you still have any questions ask me. I think I covered all my bases, but feel free to tell me if I missed something
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>>3030906
>mfw it was really just actual Schizophrenia

>>3030909
Huh. And here I was expecting Ending 1 to be abandoning control and siding with DV.
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>>3030896
>On that note, since the QMC was an unreliable narrator and we had a biased perspective, what was the QMC actually like from outside her perspective? How did she actually behave?

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Well in my mind, she was just your average austimo
Really weird dude, but nothing you'd cause a fuss over.
She had enough control to go to work and act like a "normal" person in public
It's in her time alone where she really lost it

And as time progresses, she starts losing it even outside of her time alone
Not in a way that many people would pick up on in real life, especially considering how disconnected her friends and family were from her.
She was like a deserted island with a ticking time bomb on it.
not many people would notice
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>>3030934
>mfw it was really just actual Schizophrenia

Believe it or not, that was the actual idea behind the story originally. Crazy girl tries to save little girl before she goes full crazy
It got a little more complex than that I guess, but that's what I was thinking while making this

>Huh. And here I was expecting Ending 1 to be abandoning control and siding with DV.

What I was getting at in this end is that DV was already in control before you
You didn't really have a choice. That's why you couldn't get End 4 this thread. You already lost before you even played.

I guess you guys could have sided with DV though
I never really thought you would
But it would probably just be End 2 again if you did anyways
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>>3030962
>What I was getting at in this end is that DV was already in control before you
I get that now that you've explained what was actually going down this time around.

I had just assumed going into this thread that Ending 1 would have been something that we would have been able to get last thread, had we taken different decisions.

And since Ending 2 was 'You try to stop DV but ultimately fail' and Ending 3 was 'You succeed at stopping DV (but get fucked anyway)', the logical conclusion was to place Ending 1 at the opposite end of the spectrum at 'You don't even try to stop DV, and do things that would empower it instead'.

It seemed to make sense at the time. And informed my decision to roleplay as 'generally angry and discontent with things' in my votes.

Anyway, thanks for running, OP. Hoping I don't miss whatever you run next.
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>>3030909
>I’ll need to take this kind of stuff into account when I do my next CYOA,
What's your next CYOA? I wasn't expecting much from your quest from the catalog and expected it to be more of a slice of life, but after reading it you have my attention.
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>>3031008
That would make a lot of sense, now that I think about it
uh...
Anyways! Thanks for play, I've really appreciated you helping me out through this

I've actually already got my next quest written out. Since this thread died so much I had time to write it out in between posts.

It's gonna be a lot more linear than this one(It's gonna have a way more satisfying and definite conclusion)

But it's still gonna be spoopy

I haven't done any of the art yet though. So it probably won't be ready for at least a couple more weeks.
If you liked this one
and you like Visual Novels ;)

Then I think you'll really enjoy the next one I run
Until then, see you around!
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>>3031012
http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/qstarchive.html?tags=Control%20quest
I hope you didn't miss the first two or else this must be really fucking weird
There's a link just in case


My next CYOA is also gonna be a spooky CYOA

>What's your next CYOA?
Instead of open ended actions like this thread, you'll have a set list of choices you can make after every post(This is probably what I should have done for this story but I'm a little slow alright?)
And if you liked this quest, it'll have this same vibe
Feels like a slice of life at first...
Turns out it isn't
It's another spooky quest.
But, hey, I didn't tell you. I trust you not to spoil it when it comes around.

Anyways, all the writing for it is finished, but none of the art is..
And there's going to be a LOT of art...

So I wouldn't expect to see it for another couple weeks
I'll still be under this name when I make the thread, and if you're interested, you can check my progress(and memes and manga) here:
https://www.deviantart.com/gumby-chan
Or here
https://www.pixiv.net/member.php?id=28231674

...yeah it's a shameless self plug but I need that ad rev baby.
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>>3031041
>Then I think you'll really enjoy the next one I run
don't get your hopes up

>>3031059
>I hope you didn't miss the first two or else this must be really fucking weird
I briefly checked in and skimmed on some posts from the prior threads before this one, then read the 3rd thread entirely when I saw it was the last reset. Afterwards, I started reading in reverse-order to pick up the story like a rewinded track. I was initially a bit confused on how meta everyone was in the 3rd thread, and what was worth rebooting the quest 3 times on the 1st thread for. However, the cracks did seem to become more visible as the thread went on, and went along with it.

>Instead of open ended actions like this thread, you'll have a set list of choices you can make after every post
Does this include a write-in option like most quests?
>(This is probably what I should have done for this story but I'm a little slow alright?)
Did you want to try something different from other quests?

>I trust you not to spoil it when it comes around.
That's a tall order, especially if I'm playing the quest. How would I play without pointing out any suspicions that comes from including “spooky” in the title like Control?

>Anyways, all the writing for it is finished, but none of the art is..
>And there's going to be a LOT of art...
It doesn't seem like you need to draw the art. You could use publicly available ones, or let your writing stand on its own.

>...yeah it's a shameless self plug but I need that ad rev baby.
sellout
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>>3031117
Ouch
I guess I deserved getting toasted in at least one of these threads

>>3031117
>I briefly checked in and skimmed on some posts from the prior threads before this one, then read the 3rd thread entirely when I saw it was the last reset. Afterwards, I started reading in reverse-order to pick up the story like a rewinded track. I was initially a bit confused on how meta everyone was in the 3rd thread, and what was worth rebooting the quest 3 times on the 1st thread for. However, the cracks did seem to become more visible as the thread went on, and went along with it.

Yeah I would probably recommend reading all of the threads first. I thought I might be able to hard reset it in the second thread, but it immediately became apparent that people knew what was going on and were hardcore breaking the fourth wall
So it became more of a 3 part story than 3 restarts of the same quest

>Does this include a write-in option like most quests?
No. I know that sounds like a really bad idea, but I think it will work out once you see what it's about.

>Did you want to try something different from other quests?
Not necessarily, but I did want to railroad it a little bit more. By picking certain options you would go different routes, which would making "trying to get a different ending" way less confusing and frustrating in these threads. This would be helpful to me and the player, and would help the quest “stay on script” so to speak. I feel like that’s the best way to go about a first quest.

>That's a tall order, especially if I'm playing the quest. How would I play without pointing out any suspicions that comes from including “spooky” in the title like Control?
True, but the original thread was made around halloween, that's why I included "spooky" in the title. It was a sort of halloween quest (as you can see from some of the backgrounds and art in these threads) This quest is taking place around halloween in game thus "spoooky" quest

Next time I'm not going to put that in the title, I put it in this one just to grab people's attention that it was a halloween-y quest
Probably not the best idea in hindsight, but then again, I didn't really know what the protocol was for titling a CYOA.

TLDR I wanted people to know the jist of what they were getting into, plus it was halloween irl and in the story.

>It doesn't seem like you need to draw the art. You could use publicly available ones, or let your writing stand on its own.
Hahahahahahaha
>implying

There is no way I'm making a quest without art.
My writing is by far my weakest point. I really don’t like writing on the fly…
And that's because I suck at it.

I'm much better with art. I think
Well, I hope.

I don't think you'll ever see a quest by me without art of some kind.

>sellout
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yeah
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>>3031177
>I guess I deserved getting toasted in at least one of these threads
Nonsense.

>My writing is by far my weakest point. I really don’t like writing on the fly…
> And that's because I suck at it.
You don't give yourself enough credit. You got the idea across, matched the theme, and attempted the tone. At least it wasn’t painful to read.

>Probably not the best idea in hindsight, but then again, I didn't really know what the protocol was for titling a CYOA.
you'd have to ask the mods for that

>...
>yeah
i was expecting a bit more pushback there

>pic
What's that item on the bottom-right, shaving?
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>At least it wasn’t painful to read.
I'll take what I can get!

>you'd have to ask the mods for that
I just looked at other threads titles to be honest
Mods are scary

>i was expecting a bit more pushback there

It is what it is. Plugging yourself is pretty sellout-y so I can't defend myself there.

I'm still gonna do it though :)


>What's that item on the bottom-right, shaving?
The pic is from a super secret manga me and my boys worked on. Don't tell anyone
...It's a little cringe
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Hey OP, due to personal circumstances, I couldn't reply to this thread too much. Been here since the first thread, and boy was it a rollercoaster. It was really interesting, if a little dark for my tastes. i'll look out for the next thread for sure! I just hope we'll be able to get actual good ends though ;_;
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Thanks man. I'm glad you could read along and got to be there for the first threads, and even more than that, I'm really happy to hear you liked it!
>I just hope we'll be able to get actual good ends though ;_;

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Where's the fun in that? :)
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